Searing Blue

By carlosjackal

A penny
A peep
Into bedlam
A lifetime
A mind
In hell

She looks at me
Like I'm love
She looks at me
Through piano keys
Her grey matter
On reverb
Until the echoes
Turn to screams

I lick the pavement
It goes to my head
I lick to taste
Those lovelorn keys

What time is the asylum open?
My baby blue
She still burns bright
So away, away
I'll steal her
I'll steal her away

We're both
A fucking nightmare
Our fingertips
Won't let go
Yet our eyes
Are lit like sanctuaries
And our hearts
And our minds
Though torn
Sear with heat

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© 2017 Carl Denyer
Published on Friday, February 20, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Mute Serenade On Thursday, September 7, 2017, Mute Serenade (466)By person wrote:

    I don't feel qualified to leave something as meaningful as this deserves. This is beautiful, simply stated. And one of my favorites from you.

  • A former member wrote: What can be said, when love is real, it's real. Circumstances don't matter much in that respect. As a piano player myself, I love how you incorporated the piano into this poem. Once again, very lovely visuals. Queen Reb:).

  • Drea On Thursday, February 25, 2016, Drea (1516)By person wrote:

    I still love this just as much as I did all those years ago. The emotion still kills me.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 27, 2016, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:

    Thank you, Drea! That's a great testament for any poet's work..Can it's initial impact on someone last over the years..*bows*

  • A former member wrote: I like to find my here in the early hours of morning before sanity fully wakes. you make dead poets turn in their graves...gangrene with envy :)

  • A former member wrote: a love so crazy it might just work,..mental vacation from the outside world where theres nothing but the parallel thought of abstract emotion and all its benefits, to share this state of mind with another appeals heavily to the harmless crazy in me.

  • Mylissa On Saturday, February 28, 2009, Mylissa (852)By person wrote:

    Oh my word, or oh my words, so deep and crisp, yes I did say crisp. I love your flow lately it almost has a ancient feel to it. I am enthralled with this.

  • Riven Waker On Sunday, February 22, 2009, Riven Waker (348)By person wrote:

    Vivid, skillful language creates a very sensuous tapestry. Well done. :}

  • A former member wrote: i can think up nothing to compliment this on the level it deserves. very awesome.

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Saturday, February 21, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (367)By person wrote:

    mmmm, flow. Well written sir.

  • A former member wrote: This is hard to comment, the poem is good but goes beyond amazing.

  • Drea On Saturday, February 21, 2009, Drea (1516)By person wrote:

    I wish I knew the right words to express my feelings after reading this. It's everything lined up perfectly. The perfect song, the perfect emotion..and these..the perfect words. I'm sitting here with tears running down myself. I don't know what these words triggered in me, but I makes me want to find out. Thannk you.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 21, 2009, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:

    "I'm sitting here with tears running down myself." Your whole comment and bookmark is exactly the reaction I've been hoping for to this piece...But the tears? Wow..I was never expecting that. *HUGS* You've made my week :) Super dope thanks. P.S. We need to drag Mikey back here. I sorely miss his poetic genius.

  • Drea On Saturday, February 21, 2009, Drea (1516)By person wrote:

    Yes, we do need Mike back here. I've been away from this place far too long. I am so glad I'm back. I get to read works like this from one of my favorite writers. Write one my friend.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 21, 2009, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:


  • A former member wrote: This begins to make my night a better one. Awesome flow, awesome vibe. +tpu+

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 21, 2009, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:

    Most glad to be of assistance, and Thank You :)

  • A former member wrote: lyrical splendor, mate, Cheers! As the Hatter has noted... the rhythm is powerful and the content entwines a mad love, a love of madness, perhaps...

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 21, 2009, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:

    Wow..That's one of the shortest comments I've seen you give...To me that's an astounding compliment :)

  • Joey On Friday, February 20, 2009, Joey (31)By person wrote:

    I wish i could write something like that. I really like it. Keeep writing.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, February 21, 2009, carlosjackal (2588)By person wrote:

    "I wish i could write something like that." Thank you :) You saying that makes me extremely proud of what I've written.

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