This Walked too Far-off to Become Untitled

By Rebel_not_Radical

~"You walked too far off"~

too far off from sanity

A little girl with specks of silver
In her eyes whispered eerily
Whilst twirling her hair

A popped-bubblegum mass
Shining, entwining
Like her pale skin to mine

she said after floating
for a minute or two:

"Hey can you help me find my color wheel?"

And she tugged at my sleeve
Where I wear my heart

sometimes...

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Published on Friday, September 22, 2006. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "This Walked too Far-off to Become Untitled"

On Tuesday, January 16, 2018, carlosjackal (2787) wrote:

Yep, this is brilliant.
A former member wrote: "Hey can you help me find my color wheel?" First: The Title is Fantastic.The concept is quite fantastical;soft & subtle;makes me think of the smokeghost in Gibson's "Mona Lisa Overdrive", even though they really are not even close (weird, or wired)...
On Friday, October 20, 2006, hate_doll (263) wrote:

hehe, this is very cute and flawless in its sismplicity.
A former member wrote: just completely, and simply beautiful.
On Monday, September 25, 2006, TaintedButterfly (653) wrote:

I may as well just faint now. Brilliant, and just enough pain to peek through. Damn, you guys are killin' me! Well done. Julia~
On Friday, September 22, 2006, Dissolving Poet (560) wrote:

*sighs* I loved this one, my eyes were dancing with beauty that you sprinkled into them, and the words floated into my heart and stayed until there was no energy left to sustain such weight, of great words ~Gothic
On Friday, September 22, 2006, Alanarchy (1168) wrote:

Loved it all, especially the way you ended it (Loved that pulling drop toward eternity), even though I was a little bit dissapointed when it actually did end. Nice work.
A former member wrote: "And she tugged at my sleeve/Where I wear my heart/sometimes..." You caught at my heart with the very first word and drew me in so deeply, I could barely risk taking my eyes from the screen before the end. Excellent. ~*Beth*~