macabre en concerto
By Devil lyn
head slammed
against a microscopic window
of rectang
they took my laces
and my belt ~
I`m left with padded screams
and teeth clamoring for a bite;
hands, they scent of the ocean
sunflowers some
where some
how
have riddled with the reefs …
poetry
in a zig zag paper
have blown pre caution
to the wind … I miss your maggot bliss
on a strawberry tinted nipple
and your pores
aged in musk have settled
with the dusk ~
I`m scared
unprepared … the creepy clown
has wandered back into
my down`d
town …
daddy, he
don`t hurt no more
and mama is buttering the spread
in spider-ant-roach-dust-mite dust …
I miss our lunch hour trysts
under the boogeyman vines
as you once played dracula on my neck
but those hickeys they had
grown wings and minds of their own ~
flu from my flesh;
and what is it
with the ghosts in my darkness
silhouetted on a concerto stage
oh, yes I hear it now, the human macabre,
for rest still my un`sobriety heart
it`s just a passing the urge
to kill and be killed in return …
but who`s blood is this stained on my hands
mascara dried and caked and smeared? … tomorrow
is the day for the deers, I shall run
as you ride shotgun in my mouth
beside that pitch black soul
in that bright white suit;
it must be sunny outside
because I had a dream
and you weren`t in it
Comments on "macabre en concerto"
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On Sunday, September 17, 2023, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
This was so clever and original. What stonking wordplay as well and that last line was a superb mic drop :)
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A former member wrote:
I like this, seems to convey the madness of an act performed and faint recollection of regret for the horror performed, and then the reader is left to wonder is it regret?
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On Saturday, October 29, 2016, Devil lyn
(345) wrote:
Actually it is ``joy`` in regret ... personal demons tend to do that, particularly after they're overcome ... Great analogy, HM!
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A former member wrote:
Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice.....
The strength of the imagery exudes a picture of definitive detail, while the way the narrative comes across ,portrays the flighty mental skips of a person, thinking more than one thought at once, and only managing to just keep up with what they're saying, as they speak it.
A beautiful sense of contradiction.
Dense and thoroughly created tone and mood. Erratic and some what chaotic musings of a psychotic.
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On Saturday, October 29, 2016, Devil lyn
(345) wrote:
``Psychotic``? ... Cool! ... But unfortunately I`m sane (sorry to report) ... Thank You, Eyekon, for reading and leaving your exhilarating thoughts! ... Devlin
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On Friday, October 28, 2016, Queazenart
(200) wrote:
This is an immensely thick and dense piece. It feels like the tone, or maybe just the scenery, shifts a few times in the poem, but the imagery is so- dare I say- esoteric that it's hard to really tell. It really takes some effort to fully grasp. The reward is significant, though. After a few reads I must admit I really like this piece. Well done once again.
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On Friday, October 28, 2016, Devil lyn
(345) wrote:
I would like to think that this (the poem) would be the exact ramblings of a person imprisoned within the insanity of their mind ... Definitely esoteric; the way I love my poetry, which is probably what an insane person would say;) ... Thanks, Q, for your thoughts in comment;).
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On Friday, October 28, 2016, dwells
(4177) wrote:
The maggot bliss line was such a superb image that I can't shake it yet DL. The second half style was reminiscent of someone who I used to know from the old neighborhood. This was a relentless onslaught of 12 gauge perfection. Cheers! - Dan
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On Friday, October 28, 2016, Devil lyn
(345) wrote:
``12 gauge perfection`` ... damn! That is cool of you to say, Dan ... thank you for reading and relating; means a lot!