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Wedding day blues
By Lylani
It was my wedding day
And I the blushing bride
I sat alone on the cool stone steps
As dusk it stole the day
The sounds of joy and dancing echo all around
Yet I sit out of view
My Love, he came and sat beside me
He told me I was beautiful
I smiled - disconnected
How many other people had said those words to me today?
The angels perched on roof tops staring down
Popcorn in hand watching intently
This one would be good
Massive build up - Rave reviews
I gazed into his deep dark eyes and sighed
This was my day - my fairytale
He raised his eyebrows 'Huh?'
The angels all leaned in
'Long day' I tried to hold back the tears
They groaned in disappointment
I shivered from the thoughts ripping at my heart
He slipped his jacket over my bare shoulders
His warm cinnamon smell ... intoxicating
Today I truly realized how deeply in love I am
The angels smiled as if reading my thoughts
A distant owl gave a mocking hoot
He took my hand gently and gazed into my soul
'Are you happy?'
How strange he be the only one to ask me that
Everyone else is so eager to assume
'I will be' I replied simply
His eyes told me he was waiting for a real answer
'I love you'
Bats screech overhead like witches cackling
His eyes searched mine trying to find an answer to all this
there was nothing but crystal tears, now overflowing
The angels had their show
The fates spun our threads together for this brief moment
Our wordless longing played out in the whispers of the wind
He pulled me up and held me close 'Always' he spoke into my hair.
I returned to the party
Again the blushing bride
My new husband beamed at me asking where I'd been
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© 2008 Lylani
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On Thursday, January 18, 2024, carlosjackal
(3014)
wrote:
A tale in verse with a clever and heart-wrenching twist in the tail. A favourite.
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On Tuesday, December 12, 2017, Cassette
(1144) wrote:
There is so much pain bundled up in this... I do hope you are happy.
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A former member wrote:
This.. the unmistakable pain. Its beyond words what this made me feel. Thank you for the write..
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On Wednesday, November 19, 2008, Sketso
(435) wrote:
Ya know, I remember the day I 1st read this... still hurts. Kudos to you for writing a poem that sticks!
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On Friday, January 16, 2009, Sketso
(435) wrote:
yeah, still... ya know? Reading this almost makes me feel guilty, as if I were the "he" in the shadows. Exquisite telling of a tearful tale.
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On Friday, January 16, 2009, Sketso
(435) wrote:
...and as often as I come back to read this, I should fave it, right? So there, I did, it's done.
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On Wednesday, November 12, 2008, Leith Plunkett
(239) wrote:
This was written before I joined DP. I am so glad I went back through your work. The angel audience really set the scene for me with their judging eyes. This is a beautifully captured piece.
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On Tuesday, November 11, 2008, allenthepope
(7) wrote:
you are very talented...thank you for the kind words
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A former member wrote:
i think this is a wonderful work oh how delightfull it would be if i could write like this excellent job it creates a sad picture
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On Sunday, September 21, 2008, Narcissa
(404) wrote:
You captured my interest and held it thru the whole piece...I had a feeling about the end and that made it all that much more of a killer piece. loved it.
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On Friday, September 19, 2008, veingo
(532) wrote:
Oh wow. I didn't see that ending coming.I look forward to reading more of yours. Welcome to the vally. ^V^
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A former member wrote:
That was...unexpected to say the least.But I can relate.Great piece
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On Wednesday, September 17, 2008, Lylani
(116) wrote:
Thank you all for such complementary comments, I didn't think I'd hidden the ending that well but it seems I had better than I thought.Thank you also for such a warm welcome to DP
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On Tuesday, September 16, 2008, Sketso
(435) wrote:
... ow ... I can envision the hurt, the ache, the longing... and the sacrifice... good GOD, but that was an intense personal glimpse of tears. I started getting the inkling of oops with the "I will be", then the ending slammed home... torment. What an entry into the world of DP.
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A former member wrote:
This is heartbreaking. I do hope you will be. Welcome to DarkPoetry.
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, heroineyes
(113) wrote:
damn, that was intense...and i can't imagine that feeling...you put it all so well... "How strange he be the only one to ask me that Everyone else is so eager to assume" wow...that was moving...
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, heroineyes
(113) wrote:
oh yeah, welcome...
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus
(359) wrote:
Wow, I did not expect that last line at all... pictured it as the husband. It went from beautifully romantic to crushingly painful with one line... Well written
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus
(359) wrote:
also, welcome to DP, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
Oh, wow. Really. Wow.
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