Someone I Could Have Loved
By veingo
Her name....
I'll never tell...
I simply called her lovely...
I remember thinking to myself
A girl like this, could lead to a need
for a tiny little heart shaped coffin.
It still haunts me occasionally.
Oh the memories...
She painted erotic pictures in the back of my mind,
just by looking into my eyes.
And I hit the floor like a ghost,
who'd just seen his own reflection.
She purred a deep, warm moan when I kissed her.
And all the world turned the color of lust.
(just a shade darker than blood red)
She tore away my old armor,
like so much tissue paper.
And freed my wings from atrophy.
She said she could see inside of me.
And to my astonishment, she proved it.
God, these memories.
They're adding up to negatives.
Regret has all the perks of cancer,
without the benefit of an ending.
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Comments on "Someone I Could Have Loved"
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On Tuesday, March 2, 2021, terris crimson
(167) wrote:
Forgot the effect your poems have on me. Wonderful write.
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On Sunday, March 18, 2018, Adagios
(716) wrote:
Sweet fuckin Jesus, this was pure distilled brilliance! And, I agree 1000 percent on all counts.
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On Monday, October 1, 2012, Beautiful Incidental
(38) wrote:
.................bookmarking. love.
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On Thursday, August 16, 2012, Maladroit
(198) wrote:
.. So glad this randomly popped up on my homepage...
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On Saturday, July 28, 2012, TheCreepIngCrow
(35) wrote:
Breathtaking...
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A former member wrote:
Wow...I feel like I'm about to cry. That's deep, and amazing.
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On Monday, February 13, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas
(293) wrote:
So I read this poem forever ago (like years ago) and LOVED it.. then today while stalking you I found it again and realized that I still love it. You captured the emotion of hating to love someone so well. Sigh.
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A former member wrote:
"God, these memories./They're adding up to negatives." I absolutely love this poem and especially those partucular words. The way they have several meanings within what was said is just amazing. Thank you for this piece.
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A former member wrote:
This reminds me of someone I did love, but can not stand to love. The last two lines really stood out for me, just wishing it would end. I suck at leaving comments but I truly appreciated this piece. Thank you and good job.
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On Monday, July 27, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
...and even still, I stick with the word 'deadly'. This is one of those works in which you can feel the ache building, but must read through to the end, just because.
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On Thursday, November 5, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
Even still... I could give this poem a different name, as could many I'm sure, but she wouldn't understand. This one is timeless.
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On Monday, January 19, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
holy hell, how did I miss this one? too many lines in this one to quote the ones that ate into my mind... but those last 2 lines... you, sir, have a talent at turning the deadly into an amazing read.
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On Tuesday, January 6, 2009, Lylani
(112) wrote:
Just reread this and it still hits hard amazing piece " I simply called her lovely... " really feeling that line tonight
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On Saturday, December 13, 2008, Leith Plunkett
(237) wrote:
(She painted erotic pictures in the back of my mind, just by looking into my eyes.) So sensual...It reads like it is written in blood from your severed heart...I hope some day you find something so beautiful again. Perfectly captured
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On Wednesday, October 15, 2008, Lylani
(112) wrote:
'And I hit the floor like a ghost, who'd just seen his own reflection.' such powerful imagery throughout amazing work you show such reverence to these memories
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A former member wrote:
/Regret has all the perks of cancer/without the benefit of an ending/ I love this. Perfect ending for this piece.
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On Monday, September 15, 2008, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
Oh my word. That is starkly descriptive. I know this place. Thank you for the write. Instant fav.
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On Monday, March 31, 2008, Reefer_rave
(139) wrote:
flipping amazing... I love the end
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On Wednesday, January 16, 2008, anakronistik_me
(24) wrote:
"tiny little heart shaped coffin" killed me. as did the last two lines... it's like my inner voice has them on repeat. well done. brilliant. -sarah.
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A former member wrote:
when they say it is better to have loved and lost than to never have loved at all,they are lying through their teeth. all I can say is, damn!
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On Thursday, December 13, 2007, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
"a girl like this could lead to the need for a tiny little heart shaped coffin" My god.. That particular line, and "she tore away my old armor like so much tissue paper." I felt this poem.. Walls crumbling like sandcastles.. the entire world doused in what they make you feel.. and you know it's going to be bad for you.. like superman kissing kryptonite. This was wonderful.
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A former member wrote:
funny how i can never find the right words for my favourite 'words'; this just is........IS...........egads
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On Monday, May 14, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
jesus Ron...this was like a shot gun blast..and those last two lines fucking killed me ~kristy
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A former member wrote:
a tiny heart shaped coffin.... *sigh* somehow those words pierce me. if I could, I'd hug your words. RAIN~
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On Thursday, February 22, 2007, beautifulfallenangel
(62) wrote:
how much more right can you be.......... regret is the hardest to live with.. beautiful
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A former member wrote:
the way you tie regret to cancer and then bust out the worst part of it all,
living through it.
so fucking beautiful.
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On Saturday, November 11, 2006, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Simply beautiful!
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A former member wrote:
She was a lier. Believe me.
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On Tuesday, May 30, 2006, weyvern
(80) wrote:
thats so beautiful! "just a shade darker than blood red" i love it! it has to be your best by far
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On Friday, May 19, 2006, BrokenButterflyWings
(33) wrote:
i love the vivid imagery in this.
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On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
The fact that her name is never to be said also shows the awe your still in, either of the pain it would bring, or the fear of breaking the illusion she left you with
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On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
So much imagery painted. a shadow ghost unfolding wings, left me thinking, bat/dragon wings or those of a dove/angel. We all rise to free ourself of the killing feeling of regret. This made me realise what I had happely forgotten
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A former member wrote:
holy shit.... those last two lines man.... god damn...
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On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, veingo
(526) wrote:
You are all too kind! Thank you. ^V^
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On Tuesday, May 16, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
The way you write is amazing, because it is entirely from your heart & soul! I know the feelings you speak of too well. V- this was beautiful. *bravo* m'dear. Julia~
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A former member wrote:
"Regret has all the perks of cancer, without the benefit of an ending" holy shit dude. This just might be my fav or yours so far. I love it. ~Lost
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On Monday, May 15, 2006, Cattarax
(211) wrote:
..... HOLY SHIT this is all the things that I miss ... great write even though I know have tears in my eyes
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A former member wrote:
My God. there are no other words for it. It is a beautifully written piece of art. i must say, you are a master.
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On Monday, May 15, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(560) wrote:
is just as lovely as you are, I hope you know that. I could just drink this up forever and ever this is my second time reading it and I can't get enough of it. You rocked my day today with this... It was splendid
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On Monday, May 15, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(560) wrote:
Your an angelic god this was just beautiful it swept me away until I could feel nothing but love, this was just beyond thoughts and words. You seem to be your all in it. And it just made someone float. It kicked butt and also my heart into love. This
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A former member wrote:
"A girl like this, could lead to a need
for a tiny little heart shaped coffin." very beautiful, but so sad. i love the way you wrote this, ron, and that ending was a kick. wonderful write.
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On Monday, May 15, 2006, TornPaperDoll
(63) wrote:
"a tiny little heart-shaped coffin" OooOoo..i DO love! TPD