e a t e n

By squench

little bites
greedy
and
yearning

swing

over
lies
you
provide

and

i

dissect

every
inch
of
your
abstraction

but
maybe
oblivion
has
me
tight

because

i
just
sink in

you

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Published on Friday, September 30, 2005. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "e a t e n"

On Monday, April 10, 2023, carlosjackal (2787) wrote:

Every morsel a delight.
On Thursday, October 14, 2010, Aragon (10) wrote:

Very cool! Def think it could have been longer but it made the point!
On Thursday, October 14, 2010, Ashteroth (190) wrote:

Wow that was really good though brief. I actually didnt find it choppy as mentioned below but found it flowed quite nicely. Thanks for the read.
On Sunday, March 25, 2007, Sin (1135) wrote:

i thought the choppiness allowed the reader to add their own visuals inbetween snipets..kinda gave that dissected feel to it and i adore this, great write ~kristy
On Friday, September 30, 2005, Err0r (358) wrote:

Very unique. I'm wondering, the choppy effect as BSO stated, was it something you were aiming for? Or just you're normal way of writing things out. Did you want it read that way? Either way. Pretty spiffy.
On Thursday, November 10, 2005, Army Barbie (316) wrote:

Don't listen to Err0r, she asks too many questions. =) I thought this was lovely. Spiffy...pssht, like that's a comment! (jk, I love her to pieces.)
On Friday, September 30, 2005, Dei (663) wrote:

not bad. kind of choppy. but not bad