Of Cracks and Perfection.

By Echoes of Orpheus


Fault is not definitive
and at many a time
may be worn as beauty's mask.

I have seen
the majesty of a sunrise over a lake,
the reflective effects of
a perfectly calm and still water's surface.

But I stay longer than others
I wait for the surface to fault.
The first fish to jump,
boat to pass,
or loon to dive.

The first ripples to
roll across the mirror,
nature's proof that
breaking can be beautiful.




She always apologizes
for weak moments
as if life has given her
nothing but expectations
to live up to.

As if she would try to
face winter naked
and claim to be imperfect
if she wore a coat.
Like the coat would be filling
a fault she would not
admit to having.




She sees cracks as imperfections.


I see places where
I may grab hold


and never let go.





In this way I can
find a place in her life;

filling those little gaps.

And it's not that she is imperfect,
it's just that some things in life
require another,
no matter how perfect you may be.


Imperfect as I may be,
I will always strive
to love her
perfectly








So I will always fill
that lone crack
in her heart.





*The ending will be reworked later...*

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© 2009 Echoes of Orpheus
Published on Sunday, March 1, 2009.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • Narcissa On Monday, June 29, 2020, Narcissa (408)By person wrote:

    Your words are still tender to an old soul... hope all is well old friend...

  • Dreaming in Stanzas On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas (331)By person wrote:

    You are incredible...my new favorite!

  • Taunting The Reaper On Tuesday, March 24, 2009, Taunting The Reaper (188)By person wrote:

    Truly amazing and noble. Every word adding to an almost ethereal quality embedded in a very earthy feeling narrative.

  • Lylani On Tuesday, March 17, 2009, Lylani (129)By person wrote:

    Stunning piece, there is such beautiful wisdom and love throughout this. I know this is one of those that I will come back to again and again

  • A former member wrote: The first section of itself would have made a wonderful piece. But the middle part was masterful. What an absolute and exceptional expression.

  • Believer On Sunday, March 8, 2009, Believer (49)By person wrote:

    the soft wisdom spoken in this is truly magnificent.

  • Dissolving Poet On Saturday, March 7, 2009, Dissolving Poet (564)By person wrote:

    I think its perfect the way it is :)

  • A former member wrote: btw I think the ending is absolutely perfect.

  • A former member wrote: I really liked the poem. It made me feel like I wanted someone like this, someone who was deep, thoughtful, someone who would listen. As I read this I felt like I was looking into the horizon, and pictured someone looking beyond the distance into somewhere deep hence the 'cracks' and then the 'perfection' of love. Beautiful!

  • BrokenAngel On Tuesday, March 3, 2009, BrokenAngel (31)By person wrote:

    wow... im sorry i dont say much. but thats all i can think right now lol. beautiful. and the ending is perfect in my mind

  • Mars On Monday, March 2, 2009, Mars (333)By person wrote:

    You don't have to work on the ending. Again and again (I've read this about twenty million times by now) I can't find the more operfect stanza than the winter one. You know me better than I know myself. And I would do that, I give myself expectations that are out of human bounds. I'll never stop though. Until I can do it. Thank you. I love this so much. The ending was perfect baby. Te amo. Scholar

  • Fantecstasy On Monday, March 2, 2009, Fantecstasy (128)By person wrote:

    Capital... quite. I love the water imagery, there's always something extraordinary about it. Either I'm reading this differently or your style is changing slightly, but the intro seemed to have a different tone than most of the other pieces. Great stuff though. *tips hat*

  • A former member wrote: *cries* and there you go, getting it so damned perfect again. gah i new i missed something. *huggles*

  • A former member wrote: it's about time for you to post again :P I liked this, but it made me a little sad, because I fear that she will never stop thinking she's not perfect...

  • Narcissa On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Narcissa (408)By person wrote:

    Its hard for me to grasp what it is I love about this piece...is it the line about nature breaking or the cracks that you can fill and hold onto...perhaps it is the combination that makes someone appreciate poetry like this.

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (367)By person wrote:

    For the life of me, after reworking the ending about 3 times I just couldn't do better today... Oh well. Enjoy my first post in a month.

  • Lady Grinning Soul On Sunday, March 1, 2009, Lady Grinning Soul (146)By person wrote:

    i don't think you should change anything.... its awesome the way it is

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