Urban Renaissance Vol 1

By Chameleon

I


Under firelight of deep suburbia
thunder rolls across the ghetto-
street kids on sandy pavement
pitch the radio on high.

We move to the beach,
the smell of the city
forces us to face the tide
strong arming it with our longing...

"It all made sense at one time,"
said Jack, pissing in the bonfire;
"I fucking love this song"
I do too-I thought,
peeling the label from another corona.

"Nobody understands this," I said.
What-?!? Jack yelled-What don't THEY understand?"

-This-
here, now, this moment-
pissing under the stars
yelling at the moon,
its as hollow as a photograph
in the foggy morning.

We're as free as a bottle in the sand, man-
sitting, wasting away,
waiting; praying for a strong tide
to carry us away-somewhere...

But this- standing raw in front of the flame
I almost feel alive-
I could run, kill, f@ck, dance-cry
and it would mean something-
Anything; but only in this moment

'til tomorrow rains it away,
another memory on a postcard-
another frown of a stranger-
another broken bottle under a streetlight...

This is suburbia, My friend-
Nobody understands it-

Nobody cares about freedom anymore.




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Copyright 2003 Chameleon
Published on Wednesday, August 20, 2003.     Filed under: "Rant"
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  • Dilated View On Wednesday, January 27, 2010, Dilated View (582)By person wrote:

    Fuck yes. I know I have read this before some years ago and massively enjoyed it and still enjoyed it as much this time around. The simple moments where anything is relevant and becomes the most beautiful thing in the world, but only in that moment. Last few lines tied it together wonderfully. Excellent.

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Tuesday, June 10, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (357)By person wrote:

    Genius... I love the theme and complimenting images. Quite the message behind this little tale.

  • Six-Out On Tuesday, June 10, 2008, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    More people need to read this.

  • Reefer_rave On Saturday, August 18, 2007, Reefer_rave (139)By person wrote:

    Wonderful.. a sense of damaged longing..and pieces of yesterday that never quite look the same after you've thought about it .

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, August 15, 2007, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    Again, I comment on this. 4 years after I first read it. And I still love it.

  • Six-Out On Thursday, January 26, 2006, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    I'm still waiting for your resurgance, so we can finish our poem. And also, so you can finish this series.

  • Six-Out On Monday, October 31, 2005, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    Two years later, and it's still on my favs. Fuck, I love this piece.

  • PoeticHellion On Wednesday, May 24, 2006, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    Wow. I agree with Jon, this is fucking amazingly brilliant.

  • Lotophagi On Monday, November 22, 2004, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    wow, this is the concept of a brilliant film or something - it is just supremely well presented, "This is suburbia, My friend- Nobody understands it-" dammit - these lines just churned me up, it's like I'm there at the scene, just waiting around everynigh

  • Lotophagi On Monday, November 22, 2004, Lotophagi (333)By person wrote:

    everynight, taking it in..... "Nobody cares about freedom anymore." and bam! you slam me back into my place and set the record straight.... you've got the inevitable truth of cilivisation and urbanity in this.... thank you.

  • A former member wrote: "'til tomorrow rains it away, another memory on a postcard-.../...another broken bottle under a streetlight..." Delicious cachophony of the streetlight serenade -sin, symphony, sympathy- in suburbia. I can feel the cracked sidewalk memories bleeding in

  • A former member wrote: ... bleeding in beach chlorine & concrete. "its as hollow as a photograph in the foggy morning." -bravo.

  • Anth On Tuesday, October 12, 2004, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    masterpiece..id elaborate further but i cant do justice,the writing of this is in a league of its own,so much...life..in this,as if the poem was another moment initself,captured inconcievbley in a pure form

  • knightmirror On Friday, August 6, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    damn this was pure emotion,raw,full of truth that made me think of times in my life i hadn't thought of in a long time.what a powerfully phenomenal write.****-knight....*standing ovation*

  • Six-Out On Monday, April 19, 2004, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    I never comment twice on something. But I can actually recite this word for words now, so I figure it's time to re-comment. And there's not much more that i can say that I didn't say before...still favorited, and still on the top of my fav poems ever list

  • Mistress Morbid On Saturday, March 27, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    I like...but because Im not male, I dont see it quite the way you do. -Morb

  • stormtalk On Sunday, January 18, 2004, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    I imagine this will have a torrent of comments in the near future... it's hard and honest and meaningful in its meaningless content.

  • A former member wrote: man this made me want to gather around a campfire, drinking coronas, smoking mad amounts of ganja and debating the extent of our understanding with my closest people. great poetry. :)

  • Nomad On Wednesday, August 20, 2003, Nomad (38)By person wrote:

    Great work... you've captured an elusive feeling without going overboard with the wordage. I really enjoyed it.

  • A former member wrote: six is right this is amazing. i fucking love it. its something so..bittersweet. . truly a work of art my friend

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, August 20, 2003, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    HOLY SHIT! Ok man, this is favorited. I love it. So many feelings stuck in this page, so many little things that make life grand. Every detail relived, I love it.

  • nell On Wednesday, August 20, 2003, nell (270)By person wrote:

    hey this is good , you kind of put into words feelings that are almost indescribable. i likes;)

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