a soundtrack to the home of forgotten dreams.

By Six-Out

the neon lights were blinding.
and we stepped in without a care.
she whispered into my ear.

'twenty bucks, and you'll love me'

thumping bass and lights glittering the night.
with empty stares and one dollar bills
held in the air. I thought I saw happiness in her eyes
but it was just the cocaine.

she called me her christmas eve present.
partly because she couldn't remember my name.
and the rest- because I paid attention.
and she had a tear when I told her she was
too beautiful
for there.

grinding on my lap- she told me she works for it.
and I asked her. simply.
why.

she traced my tattoos with her fabricated fingernails.
and told me about her past.
with the techno beats of some noname dj
in the background- and we weren't so different.
her and I. she kissed my neck
when she told me about her love for poetry.
and rubbed my arms when she spoke of monet

and when she licked her lips towards me.
and i asked her. simply
why.

she spoke clearly and stated.
'for twenty more, I'll suck your dick'

and i thought I saw happiness in her eyes.
but it was just the cocaine.
and a little bit of the lost hopes- drowning.
within this striptease starlet.

I handed her twenty. and said.
she's worth more- just for the company.
and she cried.


as I walked out. she grabbed my arm.
[thankyou] was whispered to me.


and she asked. [wish on a star. for me tonight]
and I'll kiss the one that you
just put back in my sky.

and I smiled. for the first time that night.

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© 2006 Jon Rodgers
Published on Sunday, December 24, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Thursday, January 4, 2018, Cassette (1145)By person wrote:

    I remember reading this so long ago... quite an impression it made.

  • carlosjackal On Tuesday, June 30, 2015, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    Yep, still gets me every time I reread this great piece.

  • A former member wrote: Wow. gorgeous really.

  • Electric-Chair On Sunday, December 8, 2013, Electric-Chair (122)By person wrote:

    Great piece , love the title

  • archangelmichael On Sunday, December 8, 2013, archangelmichael (10)By person wrote:

    I have to say this is definitely one of my favorites. Not only could I see the scene but I could also feel the pain of a lost soul. Beautifully penned and thank you.

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, December 8, 2013, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    Still love this one and more than deserving of POTD.

  • Dreaming in Stanzas On Sunday, July 29, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas (303)By person wrote:

    One of my favorites of yours, you can coax the beauty out of anything...even a coked out stripper. This remains one of my favorite pieces of yours.

  • A former member wrote: gawds.. . .. .i read you a lot, but i dun comment. .. .i jsut like to take your images in and see them; but this moved/stilled me.......the ending beautifully crushing and says so much.....in my corners. i cant put it to words, but thank you for this.. .. . ..

  • Darkest_Addiction On Wednesday, October 21, 2009, Darkest_Addiction (44)By person wrote:

    iv always beleived that those who live difficult lives know more abut the world and see it for what it truely is then those who have lived easy lives and this reminded me of that

  • lovechild On Friday, June 12, 2009, lovechild (43)By person wrote:

    God you have such a way with acceptance and non-judgemental observations- you seem like you really could find the best in anyone and maybe make them want to be that more often. What a shining star of a soul you are --that spark of light; it warms me.

  • carlosjackal On Friday, April 24, 2009, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    *BANG!* You're in my Top 20 ;)

  • carlosjackal On Friday, April 17, 2009, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    Jon, this one still steals my heart. *turns up the volume*

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Saturday, June 21, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus (359)By person wrote:

    I've read time and time again, I still haven't formulated an adequate comment for this, though I feel I should just express how much I love this piece...

  • elisa On Monday, November 12, 2007, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    you stir the darkest corners of a stagnate soul, as always. much love.

  • carlosjackal On Monday, September 17, 2007, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    Still love this piece. Pure brilliance. -Carl

  • carlosjackal On Monday, November 12, 2007, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    Reread this again. I really wish I'd written this piece =)

  • Mahakala On Friday, March 16, 2007, Mahakala (209)By person wrote:

    Beautiful... I dont know why I keep coming back to this piece... I think I'm in love with it...

  • A former member wrote: this one is so disheartening. excellent write ~Tamara

  • PoeticHellion On Friday, December 29, 2006, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    Wow. *melt*

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, December 29, 2006, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    god damn, you rule

  • CharlottesWeb On Thursday, December 28, 2006, CharlottesWeb (511)By person wrote:

    This is different. It had the flavoring of a song you listen to over and over just because it holds it's own world...and fills yours up for a while. Wish it was longer, but it couldn't be. Seconds please.

  • Mylissa On Wednesday, December 27, 2006, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    Amazingly beautiful...you are.

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, December 27, 2006, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    *night

  • carlosjackal On Wednesday, December 27, 2006, carlosjackal (3000)By person wrote:

    "and I smiled. for the first time that." The perfect end to a perfect empathy poem.

  • Dei On Tuesday, December 26, 2006, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    You never cease to amaze me

  • Lynaes On Monday, December 25, 2006, Lynaes (859)By person wrote:

    Good god Jon. You said you can't write? I say bullshit. I could see the whole senario within this.. amazing.

  • A former member wrote: "she called me her christmas eve present. partly because she couldn't remember my name." This was... magical. In a very real way. It speaks. Truly. and with Passion. Miraculous write, dear.

  • Kinkypoptart On Monday, December 25, 2006, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    so beautiful... i mean wow... wow... ummm... wow. :) ~*~Tart~*~

  • Mahakala On Sunday, December 24, 2006, Mahakala (209)By person wrote:

    sweet... it has a graceful flow to it...

  • ShardsofSilence On Sunday, December 24, 2006, ShardsofSilence (222)By person wrote:

    a wonderful write indeed with an absolute superb ending.

  • AniDayz On Sunday, December 24, 2006, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    jon...this is beautiful in the most delicate and subtley painful way...wherein true beauty is born...shimmering softly...

  • A former member wrote: this was wonderfully written. ~red


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