The Siren's Lament
By RhymeBound
"haul thy anchor, set thy sail
and journey by the sea.
follow my longing, loving wail
to hold and be with me.
seek me by the waters deep
where waves kiss harsh the moon.
upon a reef here high and steep
i hum my lonesome tune.
no day goes by where i don't long
for thy so soothing touch.
my voice it trembles in my song
i miss you oh so much.
no night goes by without a tear
joining the sea below.
i need, i want, must have you near
and never let you go."
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when from afar i saw thy ship,
my hopes rose like the tide.
with swelling heart and quaking lip
i've wished you to my side.
i've begged the winds thy sails to fill,
the waves to push thy stern.
hasten thy ship onwards until
i'd have for what i yearn.
but my desire made me blind,
took all my cares away.
so drunk with love as out of mind
the price i've had to pay.
words alone can't speak my grief
oh how my heart was maimed,
when thy ship crashed into the reef
and by the sea was claimed.
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i've sought you by the waters deep
below the moonbeam cast
where you've succumbed to final sleep,
my first love and my last.
thy body from the depths i've raised
and on my isle interred,
then finally the sea I faced
and made my woe be heard.
my voice swelled to a dire dirge,
cacophony of pain.
the waves they roared up with a surge
and hard down beat the rain.
unending tears spring from my eyes,
give birth to restless waves.
The wind it echoes all my cries,
the storm it madly raves.
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yet too i sing of love that's lost,
of my affection true,
and what my eagerness us cost
and my lament and rue.
the winds they mourning spread my word
of longing and remorse.
sometimes by sailors it is heard
who then for here set course.
for they are blind as i once was;
of love they are a thrall.
my warnings they ignore because
love fools makes of us all.
hundreds have here sunk their ships
and each of them i mourn.
an endless song bring forth my lips
here on my isle forlorn...
~ RhymeBound
Comments on "The Siren's Lament"
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On Friday, February 15, 2019, Jonas Robinson
(848) wrote:
No wonder they call you rhymebound. This had perfect rhymes in it, barely forcing. I liked this because of the imagery, especially the images of the sea.
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On Monday, January 5, 2015, Nimue44
(289) wrote:
Not the usual approximation of a Siren: the title called me. As your username says, the rhyme here used got me spellbound. Brava!
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A former member wrote:
Most definitely one of my favorite poems!
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A former member wrote:
I just love how you inverted the habitual tendency of considering the Siren as a manipulator who wants her victims to succumb to her chants and meet their end against a reef by exposing its point of view as a loving entity. Beautifully woven, thank you for sharing.
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On Monday, February 11, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(791) wrote:
Sweet, The Siren tries to warn at the ned, and they still come to the sound of the warnings :) well done
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On Monday, October 22, 2012, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I come back time to time again to read this and it never gets old. Truely lovely and brutally pure as the oceans song.
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On Friday, September 21, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
Wow you are definately on my favor's list!
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On Saturday, November 5, 2011, ColorMeToxic
(238) wrote:
Very nice. Smooth read, awesome rhyming.
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On Wednesday, November 2, 2011, sTr8-jAcKeT
(697) wrote:
Very interesting, great amount of work put into & the cadence was almost seamless through-out the entirety of the piece. Well crafted my friend. Keep it up.
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On Monday, August 1, 2011, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I am in love with Lament. This is perfect. it flow off your tongue sooo smooth.
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A former member wrote:
I am not sure my review would be any different than the rest about the skill and eloquence of this piece. So thank you for an excellent read!
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A former member wrote:
wow!! speechless..thanks for sharing..
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful... I love the twist here, feeling pain for the pain brought about to others through her song... You had me captivated from the beginning. Well done.
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On Monday, July 19, 2010, Riven Waker
(317) wrote:
this reminded me of Poe's lost Lenore - and you executed this work with just such skill - brilliant
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A former member wrote:
you got a 10 from me, as well as a bookmark. i loved this poem very much, and write on! ~S
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On Monday, April 12, 2010, ubiquitoussoul
(343) wrote:
Left me satisfied..Very good write..So glad to have stumbled on this..It was grand..love and loss and the waters,need not say more..The rhyme and refrain was perfect..A breezy read..Thanks.
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On Thursday, March 18, 2010, HeadpatSlut
(257) wrote:
nice write, I haven't read something this good in a while, I give it a Ten, keep up the good work, and thanks for the write.
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A former member wrote:
awesome read.. impeccable rhyme... sincere and classical in tone, a voice of longing, of love has not sung a more heartfelt song. bravo! *bows before wordsmith of antiquated class*
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A former member wrote:
great use of the style dude. and what a powerful story. this is one of the best pieces ive ever read
thanks for sharing
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A former member wrote:
Wow... Sounds like one of My Lyrics... But so much... Romantic... I Loved It. My Respects.
Add Me to discuss further: belemlee@hotmail.com
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On Thursday, June 25, 2009, tinkdarkchyld
(25) wrote:
it was so very pure, dont know if i taste tears or salt water...either or. it was and will always be amazing.
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On Wednesday, May 13, 2009, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
I still adore this.
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On Thursday, March 20, 2008, denver nitze
(251) wrote:
i was reminded about this one again last nite. its f-ing great. brilliant rhythm. two pens up! *cheers* ~ta~
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On Monday, March 17, 2008, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
The bookmarks says it al man. And this is a master piece.
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On Monday, March 17, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
I love this poem, you did so well on it. It is my new fav. Very good.
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On Saturday, March 15, 2008, Dommi
(95) wrote:
this was incredible, an impressive piece indeed. awesome work :)
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On Monday, January 14, 2008, Pureheartless
(15) wrote:
this poem makes me orgy.
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On Friday, December 28, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
amazing and beautifully written great write:)
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A former member wrote:
Nice cadence bru. Your syllables match. Great flow. i smell weed. Damn hippies.
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On Tuesday, October 9, 2007, happilydepressed
(400) wrote:
In Awe
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A former member wrote:
wow....beautiful, i could picture it perfectly.so lovely.
x.raven
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On Saturday, July 28, 2007, swing_the_hammer
(48) wrote:
beautiful, lonely... i really could see through the siren's eyes...
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On Monday, June 11, 2007, Preacher X
(34) wrote:
I agree with allt he comments here, and as my comment on the sailors lament states (i read it first) This poems seems almost made for song.
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A former member wrote:
"seek me by the waters deep where waves kiss harsh the moon." You truly live up to your DP name, sir. Your meter is perfect. The melancholy is beautiful even w/ all it's grief: "...by the waters deep below the moonbeam cast" I love the imagery. ...
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A former member wrote:
... It feels as if you wrote this a thousand years ago and still it carries it's weight. Masterfully crafted. (& be sheer coincidence posted on my b/d, '06). Very well done.
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A former member wrote:
incredible!!!
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A former member wrote:
that was incredible:]
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A former member wrote:
The is almost epic. Such a enchanting tale of love, longing and loss. Obviously the ryhme is the star of the show.. Quite enthralling, and brilliant. +tpu+
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On Thursday, February 8, 2007, Daughter_Of_The_Moon
(106) wrote:
It has been so long that I have read Poetry of this kind. I thought I was privileged to read your newer works, and when I finally got to this one... It's absolutely Lovely. If you dont have any of these published already, they really need to be. I tha
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On Friday, January 12, 2007, FallenHero
(4) wrote:
i am impressed by the imagery that you managed to convey in verse. quite a feat in my book.
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On Tuesday, January 9, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
haunting and sad conveyed elegantly with flawless flow, great write ~kristy
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On Saturday, December 30, 2006, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
latent with deep feeling.........your words are beautifuly sad............well done
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On Sunday, December 10, 2006, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
wonderfully smooth and entrancing read..... captivating and moving
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A former member wrote:
sweet
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A former member wrote:
this is poetry. simply beautiful, there is not one thing that could be changed in this to make it better. from the title, to the rhyme scheme, to the word choice; it's BEAUTIFUL. ....-samone