Comments by HeadpatSlut
- "I must keep on, my battle isn't just for me, I'm fighting for my loved ones that aren't here to fight. My grandmother, my grandfather, my friends, my teacher. My giving up means I give up their fights. I don't have the right to surrender for them, so fighting on is all I can do. If any other friends give up I'll fight for them too. That's the only thing I can do to prove to myself I'm not worthless."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Overcome" by HeadpatSlut
- "This piece delivers a nice contrast, bleak, but the shortness of the lines ensures a quick pace, letting each line hit all the harder before leaving me pleasantly empty at the end, good work :)"
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Death of the Dirge" by Crush_With_Eyeliner
- "I like how it's long as it is, it took me the first couple cycles to get into the rhythm, while I think a couple of lines could have been better, what you have here is damn good, you're definitely able to invoke the mournful tone here, soft but heavy in atmosphere, good work :)"
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "The Last of My Wretched Heart" by SickSanityJenn
- "I feel bad saying how much I enjoyed this, which is exactly how I judge a piece as being truly amazing, it made me feel as though the words themselves were Blackness, instead of white in a black background. How you used a single work, a color to draw out a terrifying descend into tragedy, well done. Only a broken betrayed child can know that sort of misery, and only when they grow up do they realize it. Thanks for posting."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Black" by TornPieces
- "I won't even try to guess at the esoteric side of this, but I'm in love with the imagery, I think of a council of blackened gods summoning up flames and ice to smite a world of insanity; the lines seemed to creep, rising with each stanza before culminating with the final. Thanks for posting, Deviated."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "The Spirits Inside" by Deviated09
- "This is actually exactly what I've been feeling lately, maybe I'll follow your lead and write about not writing? not sure, either way if I do I'll have a hard piece to follow, you really nail down the mental clusterfuck here, great work vincent, thanks for posting."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Silence in the Library" by Melancholic VIncent
- "Overall it's not bad, but I think you overuse the word "death" here, repeating the words "Dead" and "Dying" over and again, they loose their meaning, which is a shame because other than that, this a really great poem that I enjoyed reading, it really echoes the No Man's Land of trenches that made up the first world war, almost reminding me of "Death of a Ball Turret Gunner" is terms of reality and theme, thanks for posting."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Fear" by DeafSoldier
- "Before new flowers can spring, the blackened weeds must but reaped out of the depleted soil, just like to fully appreciate what we have on this earth, we need to watch it all burn, the flow here was perfection, and I've come to expect nothing less of you Malcholm, Thanks for another amazing write, man."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Harbinger Of Death" by Malcholm Dark
- "The message here is pretty clear, but the diction in the second to last line doesn't fit too well, I don't think, the "you" doesn't belong there, I don't think, other than that I like this, clean cut and direct, thanks for sharing :)"
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "rubbernecker" by eidos
- "I'll have to agree with butcher on this one, at first these words seem scattered, but the detain and diction was like a glue that kept me pinned down as I read on, that's what sets you and I apart dave, I can only write a certain way, but whenever I read something you've written I'm left shamed by it, even when you're not sure what you're doing you end up with this weird scene that paints up an incredibly vivid picture in my head, this thing kept me pinned down as I read on, thanks for posting."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "the new never seen orbit." by King_Crazy_Dave
- "I always like it when lines can be uneven and still flow so greatly, I think it goes by a little faster than it should though, not like it's too short, like the lines read too quickly, but a great write nonetheless, you shou"
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Tintinnabulation" by poe_lover28
- "This brings a lot of the Wiccan Rede to mind for me, I like how smoothly it reads, you paint a really clear picture too, I almost forgot how much I like your stuff, thanks for sharing this"
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Sacred Circle" by Rowan
- "I haven't been keeping up with my favorites as of late, this post not only made me regret this but also made me laugh pretty hard, I'd say this is a rival for SilentStalker's "I just wanna Muff dive Baby" for sure, haha, good work man, I give it a solid 10."
Posted by HeadpatSlut on "Requiem For A Space Slut" by Malcholm Dark
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