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The Wolves Motto
By Alchemist
We move as a band of brothers
We're the most prideful of packs
We share no man or kingdoms bothers
We all press teeth to
necks and backs
We howl unrelenting harangues at Luna
She just stays in her dark place in high grace
We rest
for a while, then after our lacuna
All night we're swift with
paws in a spirited race
Through every hamlet our grey coats
bring blood
We are feared, unhumbled we untimidly know
We hunt, feast and play around stench in mud
All
this
is done under timber or in frost bit snow
Our only thoughts
are today's events, nothing haunts
Because like all future
kills, we take what we want
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Copyright 2011 shawn
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A former member wrote:
Ulver, they are called in norsk. They are boreal brothers of mine. Many of my favourite bands give respect to them. i am of Wolven Ancestry, i believe, somewhere far back where a wolf mated with a vulture. i was that spawn. :)
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A former member wrote:
I respect the way you were able to provide superb imagery and description within the sonnet style 14 line format. Excellent.
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A former member wrote:
I love wolves and you´ve really done a great job here. I loved it and good with only 14 lines...amazing...keep writing and publish.
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On Saturday, October 22, 2011, Alchemist
(688)
wrote:
Its was wrote in the shakespearen sonnet rhyming format so I only had 14 lines.
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On Sunday, October 23, 2011, whisperingwalls
(219) wrote:
Didn`t even notice, which is a compliment for formatted poems. The fact that this poem wasn`t restricted by a format but rather thrived in it. Nice dude
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On Saturday, October 22, 2011, whisperingwalls
(219) wrote:
I always loved the wolf, the mournful howl, the power and poise, the network of the pack. I think you wrote a motto the would be proud of.. With that being said, I felt like this poem was missing something intangible, I hate criticizing without being able to give advice, but I feel like you could have taken this to another gear. Don`t get me wrong, really enjoyed this.. Love animal mythology, great topic!
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On Wednesday, August 3, 2011, Poetic-Realm
(258) wrote:
this read like zach galifianakis, a real gem.
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On Wednesday, August 3, 2011, dwells
(4284) wrote:
Hi Shawn - "cat calls" from a wolf needs another synonym, maybe "harangues"? I think your former style was a holdover from rapping? Coming along nicely, thanks.
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On Wednesday, August 3, 2011, Alchemist
(688) wrote:
Yeah I thought about the cat call thing but I used it cause it describes the idea of yelling at the moon like you would a pretty girl.
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A former member wrote:
This was exquisite and made me think of a book ôve read about two teen wolves who were driven towards a stone of truth. Read it. This was intelligent and great and wonderful. Beautiful!!
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On Tuesday, August 2, 2011, Alchemist
(688) wrote:
Thanks and welcome to DP, I see I'm your 1st comment I feel privileged, lol, anyways I usually write in the abstract but recently I have been tring to write with more structure and story.
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