Fortune Cookie
By daiglepoems
My editor e-mailed me today.
He hated my poems with a passion.
"...although in a roundabout, non-descript way
they might be called "poems"
to a fashion.
They've all got this wierd sort of rhythmical time.
Exceedingly easy to read.
They play just like music.
What's more,
THEY ALL RHYME!
Not anything here we might need.
I'm worried you've picked up your drinking.
A volume of metrical verse?
Tell me my friend.
What were you thinking?
You're going from bad to worse.
Catchy, clever, and cute I confess.
Give credit where credit is due,
but taking this sort of thing to press?
My God man!
That'd never do.
Poetry's vague.
Deep.
Abstruse.
It must leave the reader dumbfounded.
A poem isn't something one puts to good use
regardless of how good it sounded.
Must leave you in awe.
Grasping a straw.
Gnashing your teeth in despair.
Questioning word after word's not a flaw.
It's aptness.
Panache.
Flair.
Descriptive.
Expressive.
That's why we love French.
Some old world Greek or Latin.
Though any dead language will do in a pinch.
They roll off the tongue like satin.
If I didn't know better I'd think you a rookie.
Take heed of some friendly advice.
Put each of your poems in a fortune cookie
and sell them with plates of fried rice..."
Author's Note:
It just came out that wayComments on "Fortune Cookie"
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On Friday, June 1, 2012, dwells
(4288) wrote:
Missed this one daigle and well-worth the effort since it re-inforces one of my poetic loves of the narrative style. Always a pleasure and tell your editor to pack sand!
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On Wednesday, April 4, 2012, Devilish
(2662) wrote:
Nice.. obviously i gota lot to catch up on your posts.. =).. If i havent welcomed you forgive me.. Hello there and welcome to Darkpoetry.. i dont remember seeing you roam around on any works but make sure to do that as well as post so none of your awesome work goes un noticed.. if you eva need anything i'm a click away.. dont be shy.
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On Tuesday, March 20, 2012, Magdalena
(616) wrote:
This is great. One cannot stifle poetic expression, you can tighten the syllable count but not the definition in my opinion...... Welcome to DP. Excellent pen.
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On Wednesday, March 21, 2012, daiglepoems
(95) wrote:
Magdalena, Daughter of the smog filled winds of Los Angeles? I'm very stoked to hear someone enjoys my poem. I'm curious You mentioned syllable count. When I read this poem it comes out precise. Where do you find it faulty? I need to know because I don't want to be the only one who can make them work. They have to work for everyone who reads them. Right thanks for the feedback. Made my day.
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On Wednesday, March 21, 2012, Magdalena
(616) wrote:
No fault with your syllable count at all and you're welcome. :)
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On Wednesday, March 21, 2012, Magdalena
(616) wrote:
"Magdalena, Daughter of the smog filled winds of Los Angeles?"......... Anita Magdalena, daughter of the Welsh mountains, no one has ever sang about me.
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On Wednesday, March 21, 2012, daiglepoems
(95) wrote:
yeah. That's Frank Zappa. He wrote a song called "Magdalena" back in the day
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A former member wrote:
lol well played well played