Twelve Roses

By SilentStalker

Twelve red roses stand together,
     holding strong against the weather;
Left by him to show his sorrow
     to the one he called his own.
But while he would always love her,
     she had gone and found another;
Bedded after working hours;
     said she'd be late coming home.
And he always would believe her;
     thought that she would never roam;
          Lying in the bed alone.

Twelve weak roses bending, swaying,
     just above a corpse decaying;
Paying for the time she told him
     he was not the only one.
She confessed that she was cheating;
     told about their every meeting;
Swore the other loved her better,
     that her time with him was done;
Told him that she never loved him;
     laughed that it was just for fun;
          Her true love had just begun.
 
Twelve dead roses breaking, falling,
     as he stood above recalling
When he dragged her up the stairwell,
     telling her what she will owe.
One last time he said he loved her,
     right before he quickly shoved her;
Pushed her from the open window
     to the picket fence below.
And he watched her slowly perish,
     staring down with eyes aglow,
          From rage only he would know.
Twelve black roses lying, rotten,
     over top a love forgotten
By the one who had adored her,
     scarred forever from the pain.
Now as if he never knew her,
     he'd no longer venture to her;
Simply left her to the gravel;
     he'd no longer mourn in vain.
As the house now stood in shambles,
     with the tomb, alone and plain;
          Left there in the pouring rain...

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Copyright 2004 Darun Ferguson
Published on Monday, January 2, 2023.     Filed under: "Rage" and "Poetry"
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  • Star On Tuesday, October 9, 2012, Star (879)By person wrote:

    amazing, imagery of the roses and such are beautiful in here, and yes very poe like, much loved (:

  • Alchemist On Tuesday, October 9, 2012, Alchemist (679)By person wrote:

    Very cool and I love the twisted love story, the Raven was the only witness.

  • A former member wrote: Love this... It's... An amazing write...

  • snakeskingrin On Friday, June 27, 2008, snakeskingrin (59)By person wrote:

    VERY Poe-like....I really dig it. Have you read "My Last Duchess" by Robert Browning?? This reminds me of that a little as well...well put together and thought out. :)Snake

  • SilentStalker On Friday, June 27, 2008, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...looks like I'll have to do just that...thanks for the suggestion... Scholar

  • Lawless Fighter On Wednesday, January 2, 2008, Lawless Fighter (37)By person wrote:

    When i began reading this. . i immediately saw it as a cliche love poem. . and though the idea really is very cliche and old. . .you presented it in a way that hooked me to keep reading to the end. . which is something that seldom happens with cliche works. . very nice, the part about her laughing stung bitterly i have to say as i have experience there heh

  • ApathysKiss On Wednesday, July 27, 2005, ApathysKiss (377)By person wrote:

    this was beautiful and moving =( "As the house now stood in shambles, With the tomb, alone and plain; Left there in the pouring rain..." in the essence of what lovers forsake.

  • Dysphoria On Thursday, June 16, 2005, Dysphoria (88)By person wrote:

    very nice poem, i enjoyed reading it. -morbid

  • Serenity On Sunday, June 12, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    Wow talk about hitting the spot. Not only was this creepy but actually happens. This entire thing was too great.

  • SilentStalker On Sunday, June 12, 2005, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...holy shit; I still get read...? thanks... Scholar

  • Serenity On Sunday, June 12, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    Lol. Couldn't resist a good read. Welcome :)

  • elisa On Saturday, February 19, 2005, elisa (1595)By person wrote:

    ...'Left there in the pouring rain... '.........that sums up the night I found out my (now) eX was cheating on me.......I felt this one~elisa

  • A former member wrote: Great developement of your idea. Disturbing as hell. Perfect.

  • yslehc On Sunday, November 21, 2004, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    o0o0o creepy, as always :P .. love it

  • purr_verse On Friday, October 29, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    ...so here i am, another latecomer to this excellently written piece. Fantastic metre, great storyline... Damn fine write all around, really.

  • purr_verse On Saturday, February 19, 2005, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    (re recent dp mail)...oh, look - i'm not unobservant, i'm senile. >:) Well, I loved it just as much upon recent rediscovery, anyway...

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, February 19, 2005, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...I think I didn't realize it because you were hiding behind bakkhus earlier... :) Scholar

  • cre On Friday, October 29, 2004, cre (410)By person wrote:

    Incredible . . I was just browsing along and this one pulled me in so quickly. The rhyme and the thread of the story . . wonderful work. Well done.

  • A former member wrote: This is wonderful. . .sincerely excellent. The ryhme and repition of twelve roses added divine effect to this flawless poem. It evoked many images and I will loiter upon this for a while. ~ Rose..

  • hate_doll On Tuesday, April 27, 2004, hate_doll (263)By person wrote:

    oh my...quite a thriller...this is my favorite by you, amazing...i liked the repetition of the twelve roses and the different stages...truly amazing...

  • murder_in_clubland On Friday, April 23, 2004, murder_in_clubland (384)By person wrote:

    this is simply wonmderful!!! i love hearing a guys point of veiw usually women write about these things ...great! ~ss

  • SilentStalker On Wednesday, June 23, 2004, SilentStalker (1047)By person wrote:

    ...hmmm...you must not read me much...lol Scholar

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