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Dreamcatcher
By Malice In Wonderland
You
Steal my breath
Replacing it with iron winged butterflies
Corroded and beautiful
Flitting around in brilliant shades of rust
and decay
Mangling mental storms
With sharpshooter
prescision
You
Held me captive
In screaming shades
of inertia
These arms are branches
Yet longing
for home
In shades of seafoam linguistics
I
break
And tremble
at what you make me
aspire
to be.
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Copyright 2011 Rain In The Willows
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On Sunday, February 3, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
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wrote:
i love the way you wrote this
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A former member wrote:
Replacing breath with butterflies, nervous flutterings...branches long for home after being spread beyond their territory...eloquent words- the first stanza my favourite, but the end was the cherry on top. Well done.
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A former member wrote:
very well composed...it read in tones of amber and tiel music to my souls ears...i apologize for not reading your work in awhile...you are simply amazing in the way you exhale your beautiful creations for release...and for us to read...thank you so much kya...much love and respect....chris
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A former member wrote:
I can FEEL the tempo in this. "I break
And tremble
at what you make me
aspire to be" a hell of climax to the building crescendo. Mmmm...I need to go somewhere and think privately. This is inspiring.
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A former member wrote:
... beautiful. i feel the emotion in this
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A former member wrote:
"And tremble at what you make me aspire to be." Oh if only I could write like this, pin pricks of loneliness, solitude, and sadness. Ouch.
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On Monday, August 22, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Wow! Wow! I can't think of a good enough comment... That's unusual for me... This is Awsome...
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