Plastic Ballerina

By cre

Plastic ballerina
In your pink and plastic dress
I brought the world to you
and I confess
Never once did I consider
That perhaps in your plastic way
You preferred the closed-up night
To my bright and plastic day
Plastic ballerina
I watched you spinning round
In your pink and plastic tutu
To a tinkling tinny sound
I played that it was music
And assumed you liked it too
Although never once in all those years
Did I think to stop and ask you
Plastic ballerina
The days grew into years
And you collected dust
While I collected fears
You chipped away in pieces
And the notes dropped from your song
Save one that kept repeating
As you gamely tripped along
Plastic ballerina
In your pink and plastic box
I'll give you back the night now
And forever close the lock
Goodnight ballerina
This shall be our final glance
In your pink and plastic coffin
You'll be free to never dance.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Wednesday, June 18, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • KuraiKokoro On Friday, February 25, 2011, KuraiKokoro (40)By person wrote:

    AH! This made me cry. I used to have a little plastic ballerina that I adored when I was little, but I lost it. :( There was so much meaning in this that I'd never even thought of. Magnificent!

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, March 6, 2010, carlosjackal (2579)By person wrote:

    Classic :)

  • Leith Plunkett On Thursday, January 7, 2010, Leith Plunkett (242)By person wrote:

    An awesome piece told in such delicate fairytale fashion.

  • A former member wrote: one of my favourite peices of writing i have ever seen

  • The Lipstick Factor On Sunday, February 1, 2009, The Lipstick Factor (295)By person wrote:

    Well done--this so easily could have become smarmy--you kept it on it's edge--awesome write. The last line is fabulous.

  • prettydisgrace On Wednesday, February 28, 2007, prettydisgrace (96)By person wrote:

    i really like this,its a beauty...(too many people wrote beautiful,but u know wot i mean ;)

  • A former member wrote: so beautiful... ][ ][

  • beautifulfallenangel On Monday, October 30, 2006, beautifulfallenangel (64)By person wrote:

    (CLAPS)........(CHEERS) beautiful

  • precarious pixie On Monday, September 5, 2005, precarious pixie (13)By person wrote:

    Bravo.beautiful doesn't even come close to a word that describes the worth of this poem.i love it.Encore...

  • Lotophagi On Thursday, July 21, 2005, Lotophagi (341)By person wrote:

    this is such a beautiful moment.... I can't leave a comment worth this beauty. so, thank you.

  • Soulfire On Wednesday, June 1, 2005, Soulfire (95)By person wrote:

    aaa..momma's baby is all grown up....love the poem.

  • Wounded On Wednesday, April 27, 2005, Wounded (19)By person wrote:

    The compassion, the way you feel transfered to the doll and how she may feel and setting her free from torment is beautiful!

  • A former member wrote: A beauty of your creation. How I love Ballerinas, dazzeling poem. Thanx

  • The Crimson Queen On Friday, March 4, 2005, The Crimson Queen (928)By person wrote:

    This is still as beautiful as it was the first time i read it..

  • A former member wrote: wow. You know when something is just so gorgueos? you don't know what to do or say? well this is such a poem. Beautifully written and felt. Just beautiful.

  • Sticky Kitty On Sunday, February 6, 2005, Sticky Kitty (253)By person wrote:

    wow all i can manage...wow -kitty

  • Im_going_to_cry_now On Thursday, January 13, 2005, Im_going_to_cry_now (24)By person wrote:

    I want to bear your children

  • Philla On Tuesday, December 28, 2004, Philla (96)By person wrote:

    Excuse me while I go re read this repeatedly

  • island warrior On Monday, December 27, 2004, island warrior (216)By person wrote:

    Cool poem I envy your talent.

  • A former member wrote: ...wow *speecheless* You never fail to please Jane. ~Ryan

  • A former member wrote: wow, this was written so well. you definatly presented this poem perfectly. i really like this work.

  • A former member wrote: i love that last line... i remember as a kid i had one of those musical baoxes with the plastic ballerina inside, and i always felt bad for her... maybe it was because she was trapped...

  • glasshouse On Sunday, June 13, 2004, glasshouse (568)By person wrote:

    I love this piece. Its written so delicately. You've done a great job. -Glass

  • murder_in_clubland On Tuesday, May 25, 2004, murder_in_clubland (424)By person wrote:

    wow...gorgeous... i like how you did the poem in pink it all fits together...beautiful~ss

  • OLd SouL On Saturday, April 10, 2004, OLd SouL (781)By person wrote:

    want to hear something weird? I smelled plastic while reading this. Guess this poem has to be pretty damn good if it has that affect on me. :::OLd

  • BoldSolitude On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    We all seem to go through life feeling like a puppet dancing to a song and people around us think we're enjoying ourselves. What we really want is someone to just stop the music so we can stop pretending.

  • A former member wrote: I think that this a really good pice of work. Excellent. Stunning. Beautiful. Words anot really express your feelings. Hugs and kissz.

  • Lynaes On Sunday, February 22, 2004, Lynaes (877)By person wrote:

    Stunning. Absolutely beautiful, elegant and sad, fantastic work. ~L

  • A former member wrote: good i really like it good good good *~H0pe~*

  • Lemons On Sunday, February 1, 2004, Lemons (46)By person wrote:

    I love this poem more than my mom. And I love her an awful lot.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, February 1, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    lol.. cool comment

  • Dancing_Monkey On Sunday, January 25, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1288)By person wrote:

    I will allways love reading this.. *Hugs Cre*

  • Griffin On Sunday, January 25, 2004, Griffin (115)By person wrote:

    great write.... because i cant give anything constructive, really good though

  • A former member wrote: Nice, nice....its almost a genie of the lamp kind of thing

  • A former member wrote: oh wow. this work is outstanding. love the rhyming and tempo but most of all the message it conveys. cheers to a great poem. ~true

  • A former member wrote: this is one for the fav list...wonderful write!

  • KittyStryker On Tuesday, July 1, 2003, KittyStryker (736)By person wrote:

    oh wow, cre... just... wow. i have a music box... and it makes me cry... it plays "Memories" from CATS... and god... that, and this, makes me wistful for a childhood i never really had.

  • celestine_moon On Monday, June 30, 2003, celestine_moon (47)By person wrote:

    i keep coming back to this one. so sad and elegant. it trips along in my mind and paints the most enchanting picture. i just love it. -moon

  • A former member wrote: this is one of the coolest poems ive read in a while. it is a strange thing to ponder about the memory of a childhood posession. You can't ever really appreciate anything until you look back on it years down the line. I like how you captured this in th

  • A former member wrote: this simple, yet deep poem. :)

  • A former member wrote: jane. you can pump out amazing poetry and have each piece be original. i respect you so much for that

  • ColdScaredAlone On Thursday, June 19, 2003, ColdScaredAlone (90)By person wrote:

    ohh, i absolutely loved this. it could be interpreted on so many different levels! wow wow wow

  • Midnight Phoenix On Wednesday, June 18, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (243)By person wrote:

    Excellent subject matter and wonderful choice of words. How a doll would be so life-like...... The descriptors in this piece accented the mood nicely.

  • GothicBlack On Wednesday, June 18, 2003, GothicBlack (199)By person wrote:

    well what else can i say that hasn't already been said? i just wanted to let you know, i enjoyed this as much as everyone else... amazing ~gothic~

  • shadowsinthelight On Wednesday, June 18, 2003, shadowsinthelight (156)By person wrote:

    Cre, you write with such a graceful ease and elegance, but this saddened me. The plastic ballerina's soul purpose for being was to dance for you. S.

  • CharlottesWeb On Wednesday, June 18, 2003, CharlottesWeb (521)By person wrote:

    This is wonderful! Metaphorically speaking you are brilliant in this. I could simply dive in to the lake of concepts I've gained from this well crafted talent. Wow...I love this one.~DW~

  • A former member wrote: 'tinkling tinny sound" this poem makes me think of Edgar Allen Poe; great read, great poem...


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