mister business suit [I'm more rich than you]

By Six-Out

I met a man today.
in the convenience store. business suit
and gourmet coffee for fifty cents.
he almost smiled at me
when he spoke.

his words- half trite, half nothing at all
when he said
'son. you'll never get anywhere in life
looking like that'


and I almost smiled at him. when I spoke back.
words meek and full of sarcastic tremors.
this moment monger. treading on my tattooed skin.
like he knew the story of my life.
that smug grin. and I merely said.

'but sir.
you'll never be able to live the life
you achieve. being
like that'

and his face turned into a sneer, as he marched away
to his lexus. I'm sure it comforted him
to know I was still dirty from labor
while he was leaving his mundane life- to go home
to his trite existence.
and I'm sure he took pleasure.
when I nodded as I walked past his car.

to the friends in mine. smiles and memories.
yes. I'm sure his leather seats had more to offer.
mister business suit. to you.
I hope tomorrow.


you live.

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© 2007 Jon Rodgers
Published on Saturday, June 9, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Drea On Saturday, February 17, 2018, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    You better not be a stranger. :P

  • Kainoa On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, Kainoa (20)By person wrote:

    I really like this one. the whole style of it and the truth behind it. you did a really good job. I notice that this piece has been around for a while, but i have also been gone for a while, so everything on DP is pretty much new to me. Anywho...Great Job!

  • maggot death On Saturday, January 16, 2010, maggot death (62)By person wrote:

    Great piece! It was kind of a mix between a story and a poem, and I loved it. I guess I am kind of a story-poem guy. *flaps wings* nice work.

  • Adam On Sunday, July 29, 2007, Adam (245)By person wrote:

    Did this really happen to you? People do this every day just like you said it. I work in hotels and we get people that are like that all the time. Always think they are better then us because we are working here well they are going to their “important” c Scholar

  • Adam On Sunday, July 29, 2007, Adam (245)By person wrote:

    Always think they are better then us because we are working here well they are going to their “important” conference/bonus-party(s) -- Adaml PS: Nice job writing it how it is. Scholar

  • Malice In Wonderland On Friday, July 20, 2007, Malice In Wonderland (987)By person wrote:

    I missed this most of all... Scholar

  • Bella Butchery On Friday, June 22, 2007, Bella Butchery (724)By person wrote:

    hit home with the force of a shotgun telegram.... truly one of my favorites from you.

  • Revolting Theatre On Thursday, June 14, 2007, Revolting Theatre (31)By person wrote:

    Ah, the subtle preaching of a wiseman...I think we'd all do well to learn from this poem...good write Jon. Next time just hit him in the balls.

  • Kinkypoptart On Wednesday, June 13, 2007, Kinkypoptart (555)By person wrote:

    I've met so many people like this and, admittedly, on more than one occasion have dreamed of driving a lexus and wearing a business suit... Great job... -Kinks

  • jack paper On Tuesday, June 12, 2007, jack paper (126)By person wrote:

    convenience store morality... banality... you certainly know how to work the angles... make something simple seem like some kind of life lesson...

  • Alanarchy On Monday, June 11, 2007, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Nice car. Nice suit. How many skeletons? How addicted? to what?

  • PoeticHellion On Monday, June 11, 2007, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    it's true, yo.

  • A former member wrote: He had no self-respect.

  • A former member wrote: ...that last stanza was moving, in its own right. Concise enough to get the point across, but provocative enough to equally do so. Well spat.

  • Tania On Sunday, June 10, 2007, Tania (197)By person wrote:

    I hate being judged too.. wonderful :)

  • Moonflower On Sunday, June 10, 2007, Moonflower (301)By person wrote:

    oooh very nice... :)

  • Army Barbie On Saturday, June 9, 2007, Army Barbie (324)By person wrote:

    I didn't even look at the author of this wonderful piece until I went to comment and it told me who wrote it...And now I realize why this is so amazing.

  • A former member wrote: maybe he is living and you just don't get it for the same reason you think he doesn't...his version of what it is to live is different from yours...it doesn't make his soul empty, it doesn't make him unhappy..but it makes you petty when you think so...

  • Six-Out On Saturday, June 9, 2007, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Or maybe I was just annoyed that he judged me by my looks, so I did the same to him? get your panties out of a bunch. And stop thinking I think I'm better than you. or anyone.

  • DarkPoet On Sunday, July 29, 2007, DarkPoet (232)By person wrote:

    But I'm better than you! I wear no pants at all! Scholar

  • Six-Out On Monday, July 30, 2007, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Bull without pics.


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