mister business suit [I'm more rich than you]
By Six-Out
I met a man today.
in the convenience store. business suit
and gourmet coffee for fifty cents.
he almost smiled at me
when he spoke.
his words- half trite, half nothing at all
when he said
'son. you'll never get anywhere in life
looking like that'
and I almost smiled at him. when I spoke back.
words meek and full of sarcastic tremors.
this moment monger. treading on my tattooed skin.
like he knew the story of my life.
that smug grin. and I merely said.
'but sir.
you'll never be able to live the life
you achieve. being
like that'
and his face turned into a sneer, as he marched away
to his lexus. I'm sure it comforted him
to know I was still dirty from labor
while he was leaving his mundane life- to go home
to his trite existence.
and I'm sure he took pleasure.
when I nodded as I walked past his car.
to the friends in mine. smiles and memories.
yes. I'm sure his leather seats had more to offer.
mister business suit. to you.
I hope tomorrow.
you live.
Awards
Comments on "mister business suit [I'm more rich than you]"
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On Saturday, February 17, 2018, Drea
(1443) wrote:
You better not be a stranger. :P
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On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, Kainoa
(20) wrote:
I really like this one. the whole style of it and the truth behind it. you did a really good job. I notice that this piece has been around for a while, but i have also been gone for a while, so everything on DP is pretty much new to me. Anywho...Great Job!
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On Saturday, January 16, 2010, maggot death
(62) wrote:
Great piece! It was kind of a mix between a story and a poem, and I loved it. I guess I am kind of a story-poem guy. *flaps wings* nice work.
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On Sunday, July 29, 2007, Adam
(245) wrote:
Did this really happen to you? People do this every day just like you said it. I work in hotels and we get people that are like that all the time. Always think they are better then us because we are working here well they are going to their “important” c
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On Sunday, July 29, 2007, Adam
(245) wrote:
Always think they are better then us because we are working here well they are going to their “important” conference/bonus-party(s) -- Adaml PS: Nice job writing it how it is.
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On Friday, July 20, 2007, Malice In Wonderland
(987) wrote:
I missed this most of all...
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On Friday, June 22, 2007, Bella Butchery
(724) wrote:
hit home with the force of a shotgun telegram.... truly one of my favorites from you.
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On Thursday, June 14, 2007, Revolting Theatre
(31) wrote:
Ah, the subtle preaching of a wiseman...I think we'd all do well to learn from this poem...good write Jon. Next time just hit him in the balls.
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On Wednesday, June 13, 2007, Kinkypoptart
(555) wrote:
I've met so many people like this and, admittedly, on more than one occasion have dreamed of driving a lexus and wearing a business suit... Great job... -Kinks
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On Tuesday, June 12, 2007, jack paper
(126) wrote:
convenience store morality... banality... you certainly know how to work the angles... make something simple seem like some kind of life lesson...
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On Monday, June 11, 2007, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
Nice car. Nice suit. How many skeletons? How addicted? to what?
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On Monday, June 11, 2007, PoeticHellion
(191) wrote:
it's true, yo.
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A former member wrote:
He had no self-respect.
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A former member wrote:
...that last stanza was moving, in its own right. Concise enough to get the point across, but provocative enough to equally do so. Well spat.
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On Sunday, June 10, 2007, Tania
(197) wrote:
I hate being judged too.. wonderful :)
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On Sunday, June 10, 2007, Moonflower
(301) wrote:
oooh very nice... :)
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On Saturday, June 9, 2007, Army Barbie
(324) wrote:
I didn't even look at the author of this wonderful piece until I went to comment and it told me who wrote it...And now I realize why this is so amazing.
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A former member wrote:
maybe he is living and you just don't get it for the same reason you think he doesn't...his version of what it is to live is different from yours...it doesn't make his soul empty, it doesn't make him unhappy..but it makes you petty when you think so...
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On Saturday, June 9, 2007, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
Or maybe I was just annoyed that he judged me by my looks, so I did the same to him? get your panties out of a bunch. And stop thinking I think I'm better than you. or anyone.
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On Sunday, July 29, 2007, DarkPoet
(232) wrote:
But I'm better than you! I wear no pants at all!
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On Monday, July 30, 2007, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
Bull without pics.