The Man in the Lake.
By TheProphetUntold
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Hear...
Here.. it called out, from down the way,
though it was not, a voice, persay.
It was the man inside the lake.
...
So long did it beckon, an' so I came
as far as I could, to just see his shape.
It was the man inside the lake.
Close...
He motioned, unmoving, a moony wave,
to shore, where cattails hissed an' swayed.
"You there, won't you go away! " , I exclaimed.
...
Yet he flickered just, an erie gaze,
so long did it beckon and so I came.
It was the man inside the lake.
Here....
"To hear without ear, to speak an' not say...
to live without fear, of dying of age...
come tread the waters and give me your name."
So in I did wade, in stride to my waist,
I held my breath, then spake my name,
an' swam my fingers though his face.
...
So passed the hours, from night to day...
...again and again, in endless refrain.
Aeon to aeon, and still I remain,
the cursed immortal, the man in the lake.
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Author's Note:
Happy Halloween!Comments on "The Man in the Lake."
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On Sunday, January 13, 2019, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
The weave, the craft, the details and that ending. There’s a film to be made from this. Tim Burton to direct? Definitely Edward Scissorhands-era Tim Burton but not Alice In Wonderland-era Burton.
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A former member wrote:
This is so good. I must read more of your stuff.
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On Sunday, November 3, 2013, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
so much like a trapped siren... this is probably one of my favorites out of all your works, well suited for the seasons...beautiful, as always, sir.
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On Saturday, January 12, 2013, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
wow this is awesome I love the last 4 paragraphs. very articulate and thought out. the topic is refreshing.
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On Sunday, January 6, 2013, bpathos
(77) wrote:
Face swim... hmm. I like the visuals and gerneral feel of the whole work.
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On Tuesday, January 1, 2013, deathndismay
(92) wrote:
10/10 This is awesome! First I read of yours, I can tell your an epic poet... Reading more..
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On Wednesday, November 7, 2012, Strataic
(99) wrote:
What a lovely poetic, story Halloween is no time to fear, even if you swim through this trapped man of the lake, enjoyable read thanks.
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On Wednesday, October 31, 2012, Killerdemonchick
(53) wrote:
You are an amazing poet this poem totally suits the theme of halloween
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A former member wrote:
Exceptional storytelling. I have always appreciated that skill in poetry, as it's pretty much lacking in mine. Superior to most of the B crap horror films I've been watching lately, & some of those have decently huge budgets. ~shudders~ ...& thank you, Halloween is the only holiday I even come close to celebrating.
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On Thursday, October 18, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...very enjoyable. you intended to drive away that which you feared, and so you did, by taking his place...