The Man in the Lake.

By TheProphetUntold



Here.. it called out, from down the way,
though it was not, a voice, persay.
It was the man inside the lake.


So long did it beckon, an' so I came
as far as I could, to just see his shape.
It was the man inside the lake.


He motioned, unmoving, a moony wave,
to shore, where cattails hissed an' swayed.
"You there, won't you go away! " , I exclaimed.


Yet he flickered just, an erie gaze,
so long did it beckon and so I came.
It was the man inside the lake.


"To hear without ear, to speak an' not say...
to live without fear, of dying of age...
come tread the waters and give me your name."

So in I did wade, in stride to my waist,
I held my breath, then spake my name,
an' swam my fingers though his face.


So passed the hours, from night to day...
...again and again, in endless refrain.

Aeon to aeon, and still I remain,
the cursed immortal, the man in the lake.


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Copyright 2012 TheProphetUntold
Published on Wednesday, October 17, 2012.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Happy Halloween!
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  • carlosjackal On Sunday, January 13, 2019, carlosjackal (2574)By person wrote:

    The weave, the craft, the details and that ending. There’s a film to be made from this. Tim Burton to direct? Definitely Edward Scissorhands-era Tim Burton but not Alice In Wonderland-era Burton.

  • A former member wrote: This is so good. I must read more of your stuff.

  • Malice In Wonderland On Sunday, November 3, 2013, Malice In Wonderland (1021)By person wrote:

    so much like a trapped siren... this is probably one of my favorites out of all your works, well suited for the seasons...beautiful, as always, sir. Scholar

  • PoetessDarkly On Saturday, January 12, 2013, PoetessDarkly (1005)By person wrote:

    wow this is awesome I love the last 4 paragraphs. very articulate and thought out. the topic is refreshing.

  • bpathos On Sunday, January 6, 2013, bpathos (84)By person wrote:

    Face swim... hmm. I like the visuals and gerneral feel of the whole work.

  • deathndismay On Tuesday, January 1, 2013, deathndismay (150)By person wrote:

    10/10 This is awesome! First I read of yours, I can tell your an epic poet... Reading more..

  • Strataic On Wednesday, November 7, 2012, Strataic (145)By person wrote:

    What a lovely poetic, story Halloween is no time to fear, even if you swim through this trapped man of the lake, enjoyable read thanks. Scholar

  • Killerdemonchick On Wednesday, October 31, 2012, Killerdemonchick (122)By person wrote:

    You are an amazing poet this poem totally suits the theme of halloween

  • A former member wrote: Exceptional storytelling. I have always appreciated that skill in poetry, as it's pretty much lacking in mine. Superior to most of the B crap horror films I've been watching lately, & some of those have decently huge budgets. ~shudders~ ...& thank you, Halloween is the only holiday I even come close to celebrating.

  • FadedBlues On Thursday, October 18, 2012, FadedBlues (2938)By person wrote:

    ...very enjoyable. you intended to drive away that which you feared, and so you did, by taking his place...

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