intoxicated #87
By slow.burn.star
wind.
cracks.
the light from the sky is dreamy and damp.
my hair whips over my face and gets stuck
in my lip gloss.
soft earth and stone.
strange echoes pierce the dull dead silence
and scurry behind marble corners.
silken muted pastels
and pews
fine-grained glances
in dim hours
grey# 87
and leaves falling softly at my fingertips
_
hours beating at the windowpane like bird wings
lying awake
& romancing the clock
my naked back is always facing you.
gauzy
distant
it's always too bright and oily.
in the a.m.
feathery sleep.
then come the dreams
muted, chartreuse.
tiptoeing down my spine and across my cheek
like frail yellowed lace
...
.
a lifeless hum.
the memories of you are clouded.
like time i never spent
and lips i never lingered upon.
i hear your waves softly crashing behind me
as i wander farther down the grassy hill.
a shadow of dawn on the horizon
like a seashell blush
~
I've tried to hold on, but letting go feels so effortless
nereikalaujantis pastang?, lengvas
____ breathe in under w a t e r
after the convulsions subside
it's faint and delicate____
vascular nevus
night
diffused with a rosebud tinted inebriant.
violaceous
delilah blooming in the afterthought
stormless and stoic
I think you
broke me
(take this as a sign)
I'm not intoxicated enough
to keep breathing without you.
Just enough though,
to stay
alive.
Comments on "intoxicated #87"
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On Monday, November 13, 2017, Cassette
(1087) wrote:
oh, there you are... I thought I'd lost your words forever. I missed your writing so very much.
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On Monday, September 12, 2016, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Just pure knockout poetry..The detail and flow are astounding.
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On Monday, August 1, 2016, bluegypsea
(20) wrote:
Great form of poetry -- very interesting to read. The quality of the poem is, to me, also really great! However, what is grey #87? Just curious.
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On Sunday, November 27, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Beautiful... Truely.. A refreshing read and for that I thank you.. Hello there..
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A former member wrote:
The beautiful imagery in this... I can only describe as muted, as if I was seeing this through a fog, or a dream, or as an old film reel... This was lovely and haunting
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On Saturday, January 12, 2008, Distorted_Reality
(100) wrote:
wow brilliantly worded. Such sad but beautiful imagery. I agree with all these comments below me. Just...an incredible write :)
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On Friday, November 9, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
This is a fantastic piece, you have such a unique way of thought and words. "the memories of you are clouded. like time i never spent and lips i never lingered upon". Just fantastic!
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On Tuesday, October 16, 2007, Guillotine
(168) wrote:
a contained and morbidly beautiful dreampiece. It's nice having you posting again, you're brilliant at it and I hope you never stop. RW.
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On Wednesday, June 20, 2007, Tonights Decision
(132) wrote:
felt this like a.. Proustian coup de grace... for me this is a october morning swelling like a black silent wave..shifthing time it self
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On Thursday, May 17, 2007, thelostmessenger
(110) wrote:
wow. there were great lines, and u had a truely stunning word choice. this poem is amazing... *messenger
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, Tania
(192) wrote:
wow this was stunning in every way possible.. pure bliss.
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On Friday, April 20, 2007, DoctorAsh
(371) wrote:
She finally climbs out of the little box thats been sitting in the corner. I have reason to believe your writing skills are impressified. Face it, you're married to poetry, everytime you come back here to post, you leave a smell behind.. like a coin smell
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, nur hidayah
(114) wrote:
I have been waiting for slow.burn.star to post another work and here she is in all her glory. "hours beating at the windowpane like bird wings" Mm wow. I love the disquiet, the glimpses of eerie strangeness, the beauty.
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
Mesmerizing and engaging as with all your other works.. you have a special magic, a special touch that is yours alone.. beautiful.
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, verablue
(106) wrote:
holy hell....this felt like a dream....a delirious chaotic dimly lit dream...and i REALLY didn't want to wake up. seriously, there was nothing about this peice that i didn't love.
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Anth
(1126) wrote:
breathtaking, cinematic, this held me in quiet rapture, anticipation and awe, i could read this over and over,
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, GraveFlower
(240) wrote:
i love your work, you can feel a truely dark and crushing emotion in every syllable, once you see a speck of light, it is cloaked, your words are always so intense and well chosed, your amazing, outstanding write as always ~*dani*~
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
This was soothing to the tone of a poetic bliss. outstanding.
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
This is different than what usually flows from your fingers, but it's no less divine. So many lines that are quotable, but so many things tell me it's not right, because this is too personal. I'm sorry, and this is tremedously amazing.
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
i think its a releif that you havent lost your fire.... i am always scared you will forget yourself and the beauty that you can drip from that pen...
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On Thursday, April 19, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
your words kill me every time… like im a silhouette guardian holding your hand, dim and observant i still feel connected to you... i feel empathy knowing your life.... i know you will find that warmth someday, i have faith in you still.... *heart*