she spoke silver
By Six-Out
she spoke silver
she spoke silver
to me
with a tongue that echo.d breaking down.
reflections
like losing ground.
she'd say that stars aren't the only things
worth the shine.
so I made wishes on the words she spit.
when her lips tasted like coal.
back when I still felt I could
stop the world from spinning.
so I'd pen her like some antiqued china-
as if I could break her to pieces.
the way waves and sand were
meant
to create beaches together.
and she spoke in glimmers.
a voice taking tone from hammers
to points. and I'd let each strike
bring the skies.
oh those skies, they'd be alive. she'd whisper.
when silver spoke from her.
and this distraction
on page. it makes melting.
seem symbolic.
so I ask again- if
she can scream
some substance into me.
and she speaks
in precious metals.
beat, she says. to my heart.
beat.
and my chest. it's tasting this night.
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Comments on "she spoke silver"
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On Friday, April 6, 2018, sIo
(898) wrote:
Lip biting clenched to the hood of forever.
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On Saturday, May 5, 2012, Emma Tenebrae
(13) wrote:
And I ask again if she can scream some substance into me. Excellent!! So subtle and enticing ... to want to know of the relationship of these two beings.
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A former member wrote:
well that's one way to put it.
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On Saturday, November 5, 2011, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
Your poetry always take me to another place I didn't even know existed. *sighs in awe*
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A former member wrote:
this left me speachless! very well writen and great metaphors
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A former member wrote:
*BRAVO* stands and applauds! wow... metallic metaphors... precious indeed!
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On Wednesday, June 1, 2011, Ocean of Truth
(43) wrote:
"so I made wishes on the words she spit. when her lips tasted like coal"... seems like a feeling of carelessness b/c of the ecstasy of the moment... wonderful write
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On Monday, May 2, 2011, lovechild
(43) wrote:
I have not come to this forum in a very long time, but something made me, in particular to see your newer writings. I love ALL of your 'she spoke' poems more than any other writer I have found online. I have about 300 poems on the Yahoo Answers Poetry Section site which show my improvement and how much I read and give comments to others is shown by the fact that I am the newest on the leaderboard. And still...you are the best poet our day and age has to offer, in the emotive quality and metaphoric content of your work. Impressed as ever. Touched, really.
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A former member wrote:
Even before you get to the last line, you realize there is a pulse in this. "...the way waves and sand were meant to create beaches together." I love this line...exceedingly well done. -Div
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On Sunday, April 3, 2011, slow.burn.star
(84) wrote:
Chest cavity full of countless coins. A song. A bird. Forever. I'm asleep.
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On Wednesday, March 23, 2011, N3ll
(11) wrote:
I thought long and hard about what to say in my comment on this one, but damn it, like always, your words leave me speechless and breathless.
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A former member wrote:
glistening piece; good to see a poem from you.
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful pice, you captured me with the wonder underneath the words... Splendid.
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On Wednesday, March 23, 2011, Malcholm Dark
(806) wrote:
when love isn't the same anymore it can be painful... your rendition is quite good, heart felt... loved the last line.... write on
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On Wednesday, March 23, 2011, Corinthian
(306) wrote:
aww listen to you .. how completely gorgeous i wish i spoke in glimmers .... stunning Jon , I have that tempting cake and beer still .
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On Wednesday, March 23, 2011, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
ok i'm going to refuse to believe this is anything but six... pure and simple... because i know this is from you, inside... it's deep, drifting and sigh pulling... yeah... i'm still going to say this is all YOU