Comments by Lawless Fighter
- "Its a nice fantasy but fairly uneducated. . . no offense meant but there is volumes more to being a warrior than a simple "kill or be killed" style of thinking. . .and a battlefield is not governed by simply one rule. . and especially not one rule "kill them all". . .I'm not saying war isn't romanticized in films, books and games because I know it is. . .I'm just saying your interpretation is a little bit off the mark is all. . .but it does rhyme and i do enjoy rhyming poetry!"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "The Art of War" by LOKI
- "Thank you very much for the commendments. . I will certainly pass them along to the voices in my head. . .This was written while i was waiting for my AP English class to finish their ungodly tests. . .this and my rage poem against my ex >_< heh"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "A baby (Longer version)" by Lawless Fighter
- "Its a heck of a lot better in my head. . .there is a lot more to the battle than just that and it all fits in rhythm and gives me goosebumps at how amazing it is heh. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Elegant war" by Lawless Fighter
- "I think you finally hit the nail on the head with this one. . or rather beat it senselessly until it finally gave it and died >_< I enjoyed reading this even though it was unstructured which is something i have a VERY hard time reading. . .All in all i think it fits in a general sense heh. . i wouldnt say that is the rule to poetry by any means i can see where almost all of it is heading in meaning . . and just as always its possible to write about it all you want but even with that much writing i dont think the exact meaning was played out. . nice use of vocabulary XP"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "P.O.E.M." by Trigger
- "I really connected this to two works of mine, "Winter's Silence" for the first part and "The Party" for the second part, I agree in the winter's portion of sensory images and the second party really got me thinking in the sense of a party. while reading that second part i could see a young man wandering through a party where everyone was laughing but him and he just walked around gathering up foods and drinks and pretending to have fun. . .beautifully done."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Thin ice" by palenoble
- "I like the freshness of the rhyme scheme, not a whole lot of poems can pull off that many syllables between rhyming words. . .as far as demons inside. . i have much to relate to there . . .very nice write"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Divided" by Bloodofdeadpoets
- "When i began reading this. . i immediately saw it as a cliche love poem. . and though the idea really is very cliche and old. . .you presented it in a way that hooked me to keep reading to the end. . which is something that seldom happens with cliche works. . very nice, the part about her laughing stung bitterly i have to say as i have experience there heh"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Twelve Roses" by SilentStalker
- "Heh. . halfway through the sometimes verse you changed to something but its not in the title >.< . . .just a thought that i had. . it might be beneficial to interchange them if possible, such as: "Some days...,Some nights..., Sometimes..., Somethings..., Somehow..." and then repeat it all. . something like that. . just a thought to make it less repetitive"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Somedays, Somenights, Sometimes, Somethings, Somewhere, Somehow" by Crimsonrose
- "Wow that seems a little harsh. . . Idk about you but making a rhyming poem that has an odd number of lines seems like a really off-balance thing to do. . "
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "Uh. . idk about you guys. . but. . to me if it rhymes does it really matter how its spelled?. . when i read a poem i read it out loud. . not check its spelling to be sure its gramatically correct. . i mean i appreciate the idea but. . i just dont see how that would change anything. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "This confuses me further are you agreeing with Bella or me because I see both. . .?? o_O i think i might just be really out of it tonight. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "I am giving this a great big "huh?" cuz frankly i dont know what you mean. . .its a simple collection of 6 couplets with four syllables in the first line and roughly 8 in the second line. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "Love it, confusing muses who muse their amusion to the perusing mind. . absolutely brilliant ;)"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "muse?" by snow
- "The very first few lines make me think of the englishmen during WWII. . prim, proper, arrogant in dress and style yet they found it in their hearts to tell people off and then later ask them for assitance. . beautifully written for a non-english born worm childe. . .keep it up! ;)"
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Opusculum Nocturne" by palenoble
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