Beyond the Flames of Lust
By Alchemist
There radiance astounds me
So I pick my jaw up off the ground
And get my mind out the gutter
Still I want to rub them like two magic balls
And find out my future
If that is possible
I know in many ways it is
But with any good prophecy
We must start at the beginning
As much as a child needs to suckle
So does the young man need the tit to caress his being
And the old man just wants a soft breast to rest his tired head upon
To hear the heart beat underneath
And to know the woman there is more than just beauty and a name
She is flesh and bone that has shed blood
But through trials of mind and body she remains
By his side
And he feels lucky not only for the sex over the child bearing years
But to have a life to hold within his own
Against all odds hearts warm to the hearth
That is the fire of love beyond the flames of lust
Author's Note:
This new format for posting sucks I can't figure out how to not have such huge spaces inbetwween lines.Comments on "Beyond the Flames of Lust"
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A former member wrote:
Such a delicately beautiful love poem. For a dark writer u have pulled it off splendidly. I try and write some about my boyfriend but I'm no good at it, the ones I do usually end up dark and lusty lol. Great ink
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On Friday, March 21, 2014, Star
(879) wrote:
I have to agree with chels below. This truly is beautiful. The spaces do the piece justice, I must say. I love how you started it and how you ended it. Truly amazing. (:
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On Thursday, June 6, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
This was beautiful :) I really loved how you started it, and I agree... i feel the spaces really just add to the piece. xoxo
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On Friday, May 24, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
every1's having the same spacing problem. you need to select all, then backspace each line to where you want it. very tedious...
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On Friday, May 24, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...excellent. very entertaining & passionate in both aspects...
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A former member wrote:
Wow, Alchemist, i am speechless. Almost. :) ... Okay, i'm never speechless. This is absolutely wonderful, Friend. i can really feel how it feels to be a man, to treasure the breast like Adam treasured Eve in fables of old. You've allowed a woman to look through a man's eyes at what being female can mean. What a treasure. i'm an old fashioned person but i've often wished i could somehow find a non~graphic way to express what it means to be impaled by the male organ...there is a feeling like no other that cannot be captured in words... to be that complete, to be that whole is un~utterable. This urges me to work on that. Wonderfully done.
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On Thursday, May 23, 2013, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I thank you for leaving me some of the best feedback ever and yes this work was suppose to show that just because men are all about T n A doesn't mean there isn't love there it's just in our nature to be drawn to a woman's beauty. Lusting after your love like Robyn said is one of the most wonderful things mankind has to live for.
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A former member wrote:
The suckling desire embellishes the Freudian Id. An interesting treatise on nurturing warmth.
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A former member wrote:
"I pick my jaw up off the ground" loved that line and all the spectacular imagery in this.
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On Wednesday, May 22, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
The large spaces may actually add to the piece to accentuate the long spaces during a long relationship which aren't always exciting. Lusting after your life partner is way more satisfying than lusting after phantoms. Beautiful as always - XXOO
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On Wednesday, May 22, 2013, andhaka
(168) wrote:
I wanted more. This is beautiful and passionate. Great read!