Unambiguous

By Nehema




Once upon a time
Poetry was more than rhyme

It spoke of the realities in life
Love, war, culture and strife

Something happened, what?
I cannot say...
To make the average person turn away

From the beauty and suffering once employed
The magic of the written poem was destroyed

Bereft of feeling and now on your knees
Pray you don't catch the communicable disease


Education breeds ignorance
When intuition is not applied
The unholy need for inference
When the gift of instinct died

By those who just don't 'get it'
Trapped in a time not their own
Uncreative beasts burdened to repeat
Instead of modernize and hone

Requiring dominion
Tho they don't understand
Respecting only their own opinion
Big words make them feel grande

Poetry is an art form
Art cannot be definitively defined
God is also like art....
Tho many have tried

The atheist of poetry creates rules
Where none really exist
But nothing cannot be defined
They continually insist

Our culture brought low
Since the big disconnect
The need to KNOW
Ultimate disrespect

Did it make you feel?
Anger? or Pain? or Pleasure?
Intellect killing retrospect
Emotions are the buried treasure




....feel me?

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Copyright 2013 Robyn Layne
Published on Tuesday, March 19, 2013.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Thanks daddy dwells for helping me over the hump ;)
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  • Shikiryu On Monday, March 23, 2015, Shikiryu (72)By person wrote:

    i love this poem!!! I cant believe i won that contest over you. this is superb.

  • A former member wrote: You had me at the first two lines, "poetry was more than a rhyme" incredible opening and the content that followed was just as blunt in a lovely way. " Poetry is an art form Art cannot be definitively defined God is also like art.... Tho many have tried" great piece, I apologize about my shitty comment though..

  • Devilish On Thursday, July 4, 2013, Devilish (3759)By person wrote:

    Well fuck me.. my god.. I wish I could put this whole thing on my page Scholar

  • NarcissusNarcosis On Saturday, June 29, 2013, NarcissusNarcosis (168)By person wrote:

    "Did it make you feel? Anger? or Pain? or Pleasure? Intellect killing retrospect Emotions are the buried treasure".... WOW... this is...brilliance...this is a writing that I consider of utmost importance...I have no words good enough to compliment this...just....I LOVE THIS...

  • Ortolan On Wednesday, June 26, 2013, Ortolan (260)By person wrote:

    You're describing everything I battle in my work as well, as I'm sure many others do.Maybe (hopefully) a golden age will return, but til then, it's all about the machine.

  • Alchemist On Sunday, May 19, 2013, Alchemist (860)By person wrote:

    Yeah I want to release a book of poetry but its just a waste of money for a poor boy like myself since there really isn't a market for poetry these days. Great write

  • Invisible Girl On Wednesday, April 17, 2013, Invisible Girl (184)By person wrote:

    oh yeah... I feel ya! Nice post. Thought provoking for sure.

  • Magdalena On Monday, April 1, 2013, Magdalena (785)By person wrote:

    Poetry is ancient and most definitely should not be stifled or boxed by ignorance.. to each their own.... Wonderful expression and pen Robyn. :)

  • A former member wrote: I enjoyed the shortening of some of these words in this poem. It helped it flow better and I picked up the reading pace faster. This line in particular caught my attention : "From the beauty and suffering once employed The magic of the written poem was destroyed." It reminded me of all the poems I wrote down and then destroyed myself and wish I could get back. That's what makes longing such a dwelling argument. A very agreeable write, Robyn, dear.

  • Devilish On Tuesday, March 26, 2013, Devilish (3759)By person wrote:

    I've been waiting for the goat to die so i can comment. now i cant think of what to say other than "wow this gets me wet" .. my all time pro comment. the pop kids love it. .. but just to be sure.. "did i get this"..i'm sure i'll find out soon... yay Scholar

  • Nehema On Tuesday, March 26, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    You do get it, its blatantly obvious in your work. You're an inspiration to many - XXOO Scholar

  • Devilish On Tuesday, March 26, 2013, Devilish (3759)By person wrote:

    aweeee... what can i say to this most amazing compliment. well first of all. thank you . 2nd i can't take full credit i did have a great teacher GhettoZombie 3rd i have taking a great gang bang ohhh so elogantly. (checks spelling) and 4th.. i couldnt of done it without the goat. my guide in life. the reaosn i live .. the reason for the *season*.. thank you darling .. Scholar

  • Sean Mc Shane On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Sean Mc Shane (646)By person wrote:

    That was one of your best Robyn. Excellent all around. I could say much more, but you said it all. Perfectly. Sweet. Til next time -

  • Nehema On Sunday, March 24, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Awe Sean, you charmer... Glad you liked it, and thank you. This came pouring out of me in a rush - XXOO Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Some will never overcome themselves enough to adapt, never seeing that its not a bad thing... No need to reinvent oneself just be open to the thought of something new can be enough. Excellent pen Robyn... Scholar

  • Nehema On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Thanks love, adaptability is available to all, some are just more open hearted and secure enough to embrace it without fear - XXOO Scholar

  • TWiiSTEDAnGeL On Thursday, March 21, 2013, TWiiSTEDAnGeL (415)By person wrote:

    Oh I feel ya girl, this is a masterpiece. I LOVE it and I love you! Thanks for sharing your talent my dear!

  • Nehema On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Thanks sweetie, I love you too ;) - XXOO Scholar

  • FadedBlues On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, FadedBlues (2942)By person wrote:

    ...this is unique & will remain impossible to repeat by the beasts, Robyn. we offer what we can at the altars of God & Art...

  • Nehema On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Exactly Blues...love you and your words, you always make me feel. Which is the whole point - XXOO Scholar

  • Corinthian On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Corinthian (358)By person wrote:

    perhaps you should take here your own advice . for in your group I see little respect and such foul words , very unclassy company that you keep . And no i do not feel you nor do I want to .. nice classy commentary below you should be more than proud , it is time really to grow up is it not ?

  • Nehema On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    I knew a lot of people wouldn't understand this piece, so many assume that when they don't understand something it must be bad, that idea also relates to this piece. Thanks for proving the point this piece is actually about for those that do get it - XXOO Scholar

  • Corinthian On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Corinthian (358)By person wrote:

    aw well how awesome of you that you "get" something ........

  • Nehema On Saturday, March 23, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Lmao, if you read other's comments they get it too... Scholar

  • Im All Alone On Tuesday, March 19, 2013, Im All Alone (83)By person wrote:

    That Shit Is Greatness Robyn.. That's Was Really Good.. Wow You Are Skilled..

  • dwells On Tuesday, March 19, 2013, dwells (5693)By person wrote:

    Sounds like an expansive view on society, with poetry serving as metaphor, well done Robyn!

  • Nehema On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Metaphor, simile...what's the diff to an uneducated artist? LOL, thanks for your help with this piece. Love you daddy - XXOO Scholar

  • dwells On Tuesday, March 19, 2013, dwells (5693)By person wrote:

    Or maybe I should have said simile maybe, cheers!

  • Star On Tuesday, March 19, 2013, Star (1186)By person wrote:

    bookmarked! that is all!

  • Nehema On Wednesday, March 20, 2013, Nehema (1259)By person wrote:

    Glad you like it sweetie Scholar

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