The Terminal Disease of Nature

By NarcissusNarcosis

Making my way through the gap
strolling along a populated void
a trench raised on aleatory amusement
and TV screen dreams
I see
trees divorcing their leaves
preparing to retreat
back into dust
escaping the breeze.
I watch
winds chase cocaine miracles
and opioid dis.content
teasing nature's nest
with allochthonous ideas
pleasing all
but populating none.
I hear
moans from the sky
sunburned cries
wishing the moon to return
leave the stars behind.
I feel
animals seeking a voice
the ability to backtalk
like children of wealth
who were never spoiled
their sole purpose now
to accept abuse
and feign gratitude.
I coax
the omnipresent mother
cleansing her womb
ashamed of spiteful offspring
lacking respect
and a future
wiping their own slate clean...

...and I think to myself,
the seeds
have the right plan...

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Published on Wednesday, July 24, 2013. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "The Terminal Disease of Nature"

A former member wrote: Okay, so this one took me awhile to decipher. It's striking--crafted with the same winsome skill as a certain poem diese von Ihnen about the mist in a meadow. Strong imagery, subdued themes provoking interminable reflection, both inwardly and outwardly toward the sycophantic environment without substance that we're stuck in. ;D "Making my way through the gap"--you are either referring to yourself as an exception to this impaired group of people, or stepping away from them to provide yourself an opportunity to objectively observe . . . or perhaps your usage of the word 'gap' is a coexisting metaphor paying homage to that which is lacking in our society as well. There are two references to the population: "strolling along a populated void" and "pleasing all but populating none." Both seem to point toward the reiteration of the existing message--survival of the fittest, the circle of life, and a self-sufficiency versus dependency. "dis.content" . . . dissing profundity in favor of vapidity . . . "Moans from the sky / sunburned sky / wishing the moon to return / leave the stars behind." This is the most beautiful part of the entire poem. Just enchanting and speaks in whispers of betrayal and wayward dissatisfaction . . . Unrealistic expectations and the input and output function of sewing one's seeds to reap the harvest . . . Very powerful finish, but each and every line reveals a different side of that which is around us--penned so beautifully; it's just another magnificent reminder of why your work stands out. This one is a fabulous example of an allegory with a clear and perspicacious message.
On Monday, July 29, 2013, dwells (4177) wrote:

The old ones die out, the living are numb to it all, and the young have a better way - some things never change. Well said and possibly prophetic, cheers NN!
On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, BlackVelvet Rose (175) wrote:

I agree it is poetry perfection at its finest... but i agree with the point brought forth as well. It is something that needed to be addressed, left to die, and then reborn... Excellent Nar :)
On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, blue angel (866) wrote:

I'm stunned by the sheer depth and metaphoric brilliance, "I watch winds chase cocaine miracles and opioid dis.content teasing nature's nest with allochthonous ideas pleasing all but populating none." Your word complexity is top notch. Written in full blown ingeniousness :)~ This is poetry perfection, NN ~^_^~
A former member wrote: beautifully expressed... disheartened but not without hope. like the phoenix weeping his healing tears. it's never too late for growth and rebirth.
On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, Star (879) wrote:

this speaks volumes in ways that needs to heard. (:
On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, Nehema (958) wrote:

Woooooww... You have officially impressed me beyond what I had hoped. Thank you for this. That last line screams volumes...hope - XXOO
On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, Devilish (2633) wrote:

Oh my god nar. this is absolutely brilliant writing. complete opposite of your norm yet just as amazing. i love this . the last 3 lines took my breath away.. i am in awe right now. bows to you .