The Rhinoceros
By Alchemist
He is way more than just an over worked
And opinionated
thirsty rhino on a charge
To a dimwitted capitalistic
water cooler
Propped up on a humdrum and podunk soapbox
In
some nook and cranny of the uncanny boondocks
He see's
the Earth as an antique shop
With historic clocks and ancestral
horns
And hear's the world as rabbling colloquialisms
Juxpostion
just to fossilize with Perissodactyla
He is the groundbreaking
of a new south
Tampered with and tempered in the fires
that crucified
Rather than crusaded for, ghosts along the Mississippi
And the bones and railroads that crossed under the Dixie
So
in this crash of Durers' he must fight with
The panzer
and the crestfallen carnivores
He is cursed to smell the
roses to spite the thorns
Because his home is a fortress and
not a throne
He must march on and stomp the ground
Until
it shakes the surface of things to come
To let them know
when you're a man that honors your lips
Or an animal that
the poverty and poachers didn't get
Even then the mysteries
of the altered beast
The paradox of cosmic feats and conundrums
of life's beat
Will make you wear your heart on your sleeve
And always have your armor on when you stampede
Author's Note:
I got the nickname Thirsty Rhino back in the day as a joke but thought it might be a good way to write in third person as a reflective allegory for myself.Awards
Comments on "The Rhinoceros"
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A former member wrote:
Worthy PotD. Always glad to engage this one again. Top work, Shawn, you ought to be proud of this one.
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A former member wrote:
Strong, smart, & a whole helluva lotta fun...this poem is the rhino in the china shop that is my mind...muscular & cerebral, this one charges me up on several levels. A masterpiece. LOVE rhinos, anyway, making it double.cool....great stuff, Alchemist....keep up the compelling work...
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On Thursday, October 4, 2012, jonLyndon
(113) wrote:
What a fantastic, brutal-raw, powerful, brilliant poem! It is a rhino of a beast, & I imagine best heard spoken as w/ such lines like: "Juxtaposition just to fossilize..." Wow! The rhyme scheme, the meter, the internal rhymes and this, just another fave line: "And the bones and railroads that crossed under the Dixie"! You have chosen the perfect, only title for this great poem... And the most excellent final line. This is the first poem I've read of yours, so I'm not sure, but I think I have heard your own, original voice here. It's been awhile since I marked a poem as a fave... I think that changes today. Very well composed!
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On Thursday, October 4, 2012, jonLyndon
(113) wrote:
"To be, rather than to seem (to be)"
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On Friday, October 5, 2012, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
Thank you for your comment it's very meaningful to me. Please read some of my other works. One of my newer works I like is Curseverance.
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On Wednesday, October 3, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...this is outstanding. ferocious as the 'plated beast himself...
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On Tuesday, October 2, 2012, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
and it's a powerful allegory indeed. I like the subtle references to the shackles of capitalism/banality of a monetary world one exists in, striving for survival in a world out for themselves....carnivores/poachers all for pseudo-honour? subtle critical poetry I much enjoyed. hehe i got the email...it is a shame that the better writes get pushed down and are rarely discovered as much as the crappy writes...even with the forward buttons they get lost! i miss the old way of viewing recently posted pieces in the one page =[ -=AK=-
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On Tuesday, October 2, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Yessiree, and so unique and descriptive, the thoughts and images became a flood of delight, thanks Shawn, well done
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On Tuesday, October 2, 2012, RubyXero
(481) wrote:
perfect ending. beautifully played enjoyed this very much