Witness Reborn
By Alchemist
Somewhere deep in southern lands
Lies the mouth of a pit that never ends
Women go to well wish, men to ring their
bells
Debating whether it's a door to heaven or
gate to hell
But few know what really goes on down there
Once every hundred years the pit beckons at
will
A bird of prey until it's curiosity over whelms
And the bird's flight is sucked in as if up
was down
If you are there to witness these siphoned
wings
Take a seat and feel the vertigo of the winds
Unbeknownst to the feathers it falls and
falls
Until it fell and then it falls more and shadows sink in
And as the hole swallows it's esteemed guest
While you feel the rise and fall of the inferno's
struggle
Close your eyes to all that surrounds the
ancient rubble
And watch a phoenix be born and arise
With a fire so great that the light burns
your mind
And leaves a mark on the lids of your eyes
That will show you your very soul
Until the end of your time
Comments on "Witness Reborn"
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On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, saatyaki
(5) wrote:
A thoughtful poem thanx for sharing Regards
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A former member wrote:
Wow..there's the phoenix again. Everything returns me to it, must be my fate of late. :) What an interesting piece. i'd like to know more about this place, i'm assuming it is real. We were all meant to be as the phoenix, and sometimes there are these mystical places in the world which remind us of that. Funny, how truth can be a lie to some, and evil can be good to others. All in how we look at it, eh?
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On Saturday, April 12, 2014, TheProphetUntold
(160) wrote:
I really like this work, I think it could benefit from separating the thoughts a bit and getting some punctuation in there. It could take it from an 8 to a 9 or 10. Still good at any rate. +tpu+
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On Saturday, April 12, 2014, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I agree I should break it up into stanzas just haven't got around to it yet.