Witness Reborn

By Alchemist

Somewhere deep in southern lands
Lies the mouth of a pit that never ends
Women go to well wish, men to ring their bells
Debating whether it's a door to heaven or gate to hell

But few know what really goes on down there
Once every hundred years the pit beckons at will
A bird of prey until it's curiosity over whelms
And the bird's flight is sucked in as if up was down

If you are there to witness these siphoned wings
Take a seat and feel the vertigo of the winds
Unbeknownst to the feathers it falls and falls
Until it fell and then it falls more and shadows sink in

And as the hole swallows it's esteemed guest
While you feel the rise and fall of the inferno's struggle
Close your eyes to all that surrounds the ancient rubble
And watch a phoenix be born and arise

With a fire so great that the light burns your mind
And leaves a mark on the lids of your eyes
That will show you your very soul
Until the end of your time 

 

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Copyright 2014 Alchemist
Published on Saturday, April 12, 2014.     Filed under: "Fantasy" and "Poetry"
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  • saatyaki On Wednesday, September 3, 2014, saatyaki (5)By person wrote:

    A thoughtful poem thanx for sharing Regards

  • A former member wrote: Wow..there's the phoenix again. Everything returns me to it, must be my fate of late. :) What an interesting piece. i'd like to know more about this place, i'm assuming it is real. We were all meant to be as the phoenix, and sometimes there are these mystical places in the world which remind us of that. Funny, how truth can be a lie to some, and evil can be good to others. All in how we look at it, eh?

  • TheProphetUntold On Saturday, April 12, 2014, TheProphetUntold (160)By person wrote:

    I really like this work, I think it could benefit from separating the thoughts a bit and getting some punctuation in there. It could take it from an 8 to a 9 or 10. Still good at any rate. +tpu+

  • Alchemist On Saturday, April 12, 2014, Alchemist (679)By person wrote:

    I agree I should break it up into stanzas just haven't got around to it yet.

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