Comments by TheProphetUntold
- "Fantastic beginning stanzas and allusion at the end. The refrain of " woodland, wetland and homeland" then their transformation into ruin speaks to deeper meaning, in my opinion. Emphasis on their importance to the subject and then ruin and acceptance to becoming/metamorphosis into that ruin...perhaps? I enjoyed it, nonetheless. Top shelf, Lux. +tpu+"
Posted by TheProphetUntold on "deus impeditio esuritori nullus" by Lux
- "The second and third stanza have really good lines, I wonder if maybe some parts of it could be omitted to deliver the same or more meaning. ex.. "I'm ok", I lie to myself....As I pick pocket happiness and irritate myself to sleep.... It's your work, I liked it. I tend to try and keep my ideas as short and clear as possible to make the meaning more emphasized. Does "pickpocketing happiness in tiny bursts" mean anything different/ more or less than "pickpocketing happiness"? Just an idea. I can relate to the topics of this poem all too well. Cheers. +tpu+"
Posted by TheProphetUntold on "Sad Soul" by Abberant
- "This is rich with allusion. The last two lines of the first stanza and the opening lines of the second stanza really pulled me in, they feel the most complete. +tpu+"
Posted by TheProphetUntold on "Blood Wolf Moon" by Damien
- "I don't lead people by the nose. To me poetry is saying more than is written, or deriving different images or meanings from what is actually written. I am more imagination than literal interpretation."
Posted by TheProphetUntold on "The Wolf Shepherd." by TheProphetUntold