Rebel Without A Cause ~Paradelle~
By Alchemist
Rebel without a cause why does everyone love you so
Rebel without a cause why does everyone love you so
See adult tantrums
grow from your childish woes
See adult tantrums grow from your
childish woes
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish
grow
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish grow
Worldly lows, a burden held in tow
Worldly lows, a burden
held in tow
Loathful to mankind but decency is your foe
Loathful
to mankind but decency is your foe
Mankind a burden, loathful
to decency worldly held low
Mankind a burden, loathful to decency
worldly held low
Rebel without a cause why does everyone
love you so
Worldly lows, a burden held in toe
See adult tantrums
grow from your childish woes
Loathful to mankind but decency
is your foe
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish
grow
Mankind a burden, loathful to decency worldly held low
Everyone has childish lows, loathful burdens without a foe
Everyone has childish lows, loathful burdens without a foe
So
see mankind grow when childish rebels are held low
So see mankind
grow when childish rebels are held low
Adult decency in tow, grow
love from woe
Adult decency in tow, grow love from woe
Author's Note:
My first attempt at Paradelle although I changed up the style with the 3rd stanza, I thought it would fit the work and be kind of an ode to the Paradelle and its rebellious history.Awards
Comments on "Rebel Without A Cause ~Paradelle~"
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On Tuesday, November 20, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Sounds good to me Shawn, but "held in toe" I believe means dragging along as "in tow". Anyway this was a lightly disparaging piece on all professional protesters that seem to be proliferating, cheers!
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On Tuesday, November 20, 2012, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Nice Shawn, most of us need our tantrums even in adulthood. This style is a way to drive a point home. Awesome - XXOO
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On Monday, November 19, 2012, Dei
(663) wrote:
Honestly, this format hurts my eyeballs. But it is interesting. I read a line. And then having the repetition forces the brain rethink what it already knows. I can tell there was real thought put into this. I liked your concept. I don't love the style though. I find it distracting more than anything which is why i felt greatful for the third stanza. It was placed there like an oasis of something more familiar and sane. All in all, I honestly liked it in spite of the eye seizures it caused.
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A former member wrote:
nice! seriously.. keep writing :)