Rebel Without A Cause ~Paradelle~

By Alchemist




Rebel without a cause why does everyone love you so
Rebel without a cause why does everyone love you so
See adult tantrums grow from your childish woes
See adult tantrums grow from your childish woes
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish grow
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish grow

Worldly lows, a burden held in tow
Worldly lows, a burden held in tow
Loathful to mankind but decency is your foe
Loathful to mankind but decency is your foe
Mankind a burden, loathful to decency worldly held low
Mankind a burden, loathful to decency worldly held low

Rebel without a cause why does everyone love you so
Worldly lows, a burden held in toe
See adult tantrums grow from your childish woes
Loathful to mankind but decency is your foe
Rebels love tantrums, every adult can see the childish grow
Mankind a burden, loathful to decency worldly held low

Everyone has childish lows, loathful burdens without a foe
Everyone has childish lows, loathful burdens without a foe
So see mankind grow when childish rebels are held low
So see mankind grow when childish rebels are held low
Adult decency in tow, grow love from woe
Adult decency in tow, grow love from woe



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Copyright 2012 Alchemist
Published on Monday, November 19, 2012.     Filed under: "Structured" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

My first attempt at Paradelle although I changed up the style with the 3rd stanza, I thought it would fit the work and be kind of an ode to the Paradelle and its rebellious history.
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  • dwells On Tuesday, November 20, 2012, dwells (4177)By person wrote:

    Sounds good to me Shawn, but "held in toe" I believe means dragging along as "in tow". Anyway this was a lightly disparaging piece on all professional protesters that seem to be proliferating, cheers!

  • Nehema On Tuesday, November 20, 2012, Nehema (958)By person wrote:

    Nice Shawn, most of us need our tantrums even in adulthood. This style is a way to drive a point home. Awesome - XXOO Scholar

  • Dei On Monday, November 19, 2012, Dei (663)By person wrote:

    Honestly, this format hurts my eyeballs. But it is interesting. I read a line. And then having the repetition forces the brain rethink what it already knows. I can tell there was real thought put into this. I liked your concept. I don't love the style though. I find it distracting more than anything which is why i felt greatful for the third stanza. It was placed there like an oasis of something more familiar and sane. All in all, I honestly liked it in spite of the eye seizures it caused.

  • A former member wrote: nice! seriously.. keep writing :)

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