Love's Vespine Allegory
By purr_verse
I'd never seen another quite like you -
beautiful unfamiliar creature
in your sixlegged frenzied grasstop crawl,
sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms
from the back of your glorious
chitinous wingmarvels
painted wild iridescent blues, greens, violets;
In my wondercaught crouch before you
I rest my hand upon the ground
so that you may crawl across me
and I can feel your tickling motion,
bringing me closer to an alien delight
and the curious gentle pleasure
of meeting something new
and enriching.
My neighbour steps outside a moment,
notices us.
Since I do not know your name,
I ask if
perhaps
he does.
"It's a native wasp," he tells me,
and in that reflexive, cruel instant,
with a flick and a twitch
and a fearsharpened deliberate motion
fuelled by memory of past pains,
i crush you
before you can hurt me.
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Oh, but I did not forget you -
you were so very beautiful -
and later
too much later
I learnt that the wonderful Blue Flower Wasp
does not sting.
---
Awards
Comments on "Love's Vespine Allegory"
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On Sunday, October 10, 2010, Riven Waker
(317) wrote:
incredibly tragic and beautiful
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On Tuesday, July 21, 2009, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
Very well done. Truly outstanding. Impeccable timing, with vibrant descriptions, but the kicker is how it left me feeling. Grief over a lost chance at something truly beautiful. * * * I shall have to read more of yours.
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On Sunday, September 21, 2008, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Beautiful piece! Don't know how I missed this one previously...
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A former member wrote:
oh shoot!!! this hurts..
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On Sunday, January 28, 2007, zanewill
(82) wrote:
WOW!! and what an allegory it is!! Absolutely stunning imagery & perfectly timed!! Write on!!***
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On Monday, February 13, 2006, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
*jaw drop* so devastating because it is sooo relatable... =( i bear this on my cold shoulder...by far my most favourite of yours, incising and meticulously flattened on the grass as something
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On Monday, February 13, 2006, ApathysKiss
(377) wrote:
i sidestep to avoid ever feeling...absolutely much respect. -=ak=-
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A former member wrote:
by far the greatest allegory i have ever read. so much detail and meaning. i love it all..."i crush you before you can hurt me" priceless
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On Monday, May 16, 2005, Anth
(1126) wrote:
in my wondercaught crouch before you, returning to this again today that line jumps out at me the most, this work, forever splendid, a classic
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On Monday, May 9, 2005, stuart_pid
(135) wrote:
wonderfully worded and so relevant to life. quite possibly one of the most creative pieces i have ever read.
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A former member wrote:
Regret is such a secret human emotion. we feel it more than we see it in others as it is a weakness. A weakness of failure. However you expressed it in such an honest an beautiful way. This was great!
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A former member wrote:
awwwwww - wow it's so nice to hear something of such different nature - Yet man! This relates to so much in the real world - I don't even have to spell out what. So beautiful - Soooooo much images pouring out. I had to slow down while i was reading it
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On Tuesday, April 12, 2005, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
shining imagery and a lovely whimsical feel in this, and the ending just provokes your mind to skip from reverie into more serious contemplation. ahh that fear can over ride such a light moment..wonderful
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On Monday, March 14, 2005, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...not too many things amaze me quite like this did; I think I'm at a loss for words...
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On Sunday, March 13, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
MURDERESS!
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On Friday, March 11, 2005, island warrior
(210) wrote:
A very enjoyable read, "In my wondercaught crouch before you" I love that line.
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On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill
(47) wrote:
An ending that rocks the reader into an almost twisted silence. This poems contains some of the most creative words I've ever seen used in a piece. This is reflective and hauntingly. Welcome to my bookmarks. I can't wait to read more.
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On Thursday, March 3, 2005, Loneal
(86) wrote:
I am humbled by how you can turn regret into something as beautiful as this ... ~L
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On Tuesday, February 22, 2005, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
so much can be imbued here......simply wise and intelligent.......flawless one might say..............urban
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On Monday, February 21, 2005, Solace
(1065) wrote:
*smiles* now that, that was a most beautiful allegory and one that i am thankful for reading...truly few can ever create something so awe inspiring and understandable...but you have done it with eloquence...wunderbar!
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On Monday, February 21, 2005, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
that wasn't very nice...lol..poor wasp...-l-
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On Friday, February 18, 2005, Carmina Gitana
(149) wrote:
God this is good. I love the slow, languid pace of the beginning, the suddenness of the denouement and the shift back to slowness and regret. Beautifully done.
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On Wednesday, February 16, 2005, Delilah
(113) wrote:
Completely awesome work, great twist, I didn't see it coming...~Delilah~
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A former member wrote:
creepy crawlies give me the creepy crawlies . . . seriously though a very eloquent and relaxing read
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On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, Trail of Fiends
(37) wrote:
quite a master-piece you have here. Like the twist. "sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms". wonderful.
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On Tuesday, February 15, 2005, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
oh natty... this just makes me cry. I was very moved by "and in that reflexive, cruel instant".. perhaps not the most melodious line in the piece, but the one which rang truest to me. Terrific title.
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A former member wrote:
"sunshards reflecting ephemeral prisms" Splen(purr)id, in the likeness of DH Lawrence. I luv the color/texture which tickles motion like an 'alien delight'. "chitinous wingmarvels" This Scolia soror; such a sadly , yet beautiful moment. Feels like a pain
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A former member wrote:
...ting! well splashed (no susurrant pun). Well done, 'with a flick and a twitch.' Brightly iridescent...you are a talent.
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A former member wrote:
Each one of your writes that I read reminds me of an excerpt from a glorious adventure tale. Hmm maybe it's just me, either way I love _every_ minute of each. Wonderful work:) ~Ryan
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A former member wrote:
such sweet simplicity and such perfectly written beauty, Truly gorgeous writing
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On Friday, February 11, 2005, Anth
(1126) wrote:
utterly perfect, in every way, written as only you could, another of your poems that i find ill be able to know off by heart, so many things shine through this
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On Friday, February 11, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
awww, that's so beautiful, and sad..... the most amazing imagery, the opening stanza is delicious, moorish, but oh, then it hurts - I felt like a child instinctively acting and then the remorse..... oh you paint a brilliant masterpiece. Thank you.
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On Friday, February 11, 2005, birdwell
(138) wrote:
that has to be the most radical roller-coaster i've ever been on; super high, crushing low, and then a hurling twist, your amazing ~db~
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On Friday, February 11, 2005, Sepulcrawl
(78) wrote:
You've really outdone yourself.
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On Friday, February 11, 2005, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
so sad ... the temp pain of a stinger seems preferable to the lasting pain mistakes like this bring ... just a beautiful piece , a simplest tragedy... funguy
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A former member wrote:
A beautiful tragedy; spoken as only you know how: through the eyes of innocence shaded by demise. Thank you for this prismatic view. :)
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A former member wrote:
It's great to have a new work from you. I love this. Poignant and eloquently expressed.
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A former member wrote:
A fantastic allegory of trust, it's too smart!
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
I loved the choice of words "fearsharpened deliberate motion" followed by "fuelled by memory of past pains, i crush you" It beautifully depicts a primal imbedded reaction that results in a deliberate injury, that in hindsight was unnecessary.
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
we all fear falling prey, thus we inadvertantly become the destroyer of
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
"and a fearsharpened deliberate motion fuelled by memory of past pains, i crush you before you can hurt me" I love that part.. I love all of it.
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
Beautifully unique and captivating purr, and I agree with ardnek. I love the way you express yourself through writing.. so much wisdom goes into your words. Very nicely done. :)
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On Thursday, February 10, 2005, ardneK
(72) wrote:
ouch, I like the underlying meaning behind this, nicely done - >|