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The Dreamer
By SilentStalker
What could match her embrace, the cute
smile on her face, or the look in her eyes?
Not the moon, not
the sun, not the infinite number of stars in the sky.
I looked
up as she passed, and my heartbeat went fast, and I tried not to stare
At her feet as she walked, at her lips as she talked, at her long,
flowing hair.
But she turned as I gazed, and my heart went
ablaze, and I wanted to fly.
No--I'm great with mistakes, but
the worst I can make, would be fearing to try...
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Copyright 2013 Darun Ferguson
Author's Note:
DP College assignment; metrical challenge, from a worthy muse. Anapestic hexameter.Awards
Comments on "The Dreamer"
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A former member wrote:
those are the moments you always remember, especially if they say yes
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A former member wrote:
I loved this piece, I can't put into words how much I could relate to a situation like this.
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On Sunday, July 28, 2013, jennifer atwood
(12)
wrote:
like your work so far.can't wait to read more!
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On Wednesday, May 8, 2013, soul_versing
(882) wrote:
You sir have stolen my breath away with sensational words. Extremely heart defying in forms of whispering thoughts. What a fabulous mind you posses! 10/10
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A former member wrote:
Amen on that last line! Indeed. Not trying is the most common reason for these types of failure. Nice little piece of daydream here on top of that...you've always reminded me of the tough guy with the big heart. Lot of us try to portray ourselves this way, but your realness is always very obvious to anyone with at least a decent sense of observation. Much appreciated, Darun...good job on this assignment.
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On Tuesday, January 15, 2013, Dreaming in Stanzas
(303) wrote:
Love it when you show us what a softie you really are under all that rage!
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A former member wrote:
this was incedible.... just marvelous. nicely penned.. thanks for sharing!
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On Tuesday, January 8, 2013, Devilish
(2658) wrote:
OMG how did i know this would be perfect. this was the hardest assignment for me. wow.
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On Monday, January 7, 2013, dwells
(4285) wrote:
You have indeed captured that rare moment of male paralysis by analysis, when almost any "she" has that certain look akin to Medusa - nothing ventured...
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On Sunday, January 6, 2013, lupus tenebrae
(872) wrote:
Of course Karen takes the good comment, all I can say now is that anapestic hexameter really lends well to the subject matter, its flow is actually pretty appealing to the eyes.
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On Sunday, January 6, 2013, kinkifrog
(2798) wrote:
...sorry Mr Wolf ...had I known I would Have bitten my tongue :P ... I'll toss you for it next time ...
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On Sunday, January 6, 2013, Dei
(665) wrote:
This was so much more than i expected. Im glad you were the one to take up my challenge. You did not let me down. Thank you.
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On Sunday, January 6, 2013, Star
(920) wrote:
oh wow. i concider this a 10 from me. this is utterly beautiful. i wanna fave this dammit. only if i had room. made me tear up a bit at the end.. honestly i don't know what to say.. i'm in awe... thanks :)
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