Bright Overalls

By SilentStalker




A child, finally takes his turn on a roller coaster.
How amazing she is.
Not because she's new.
Not because of the designs on her.
Or where he found her.
Or even how much it cost to ride.
Simply because finally, after waiting so long
She let him, of all people, inside.

Whatever happens now, it has to be worth it.

He doesn't have much time to get his bearings.
Even though he hasn't been here before
He knows what's up ahead.
All he can do, is prepare for it.
Up, up, up she lifts him...
Showing him the world,
Lifting him higher than he's ever been before...

Making him realize how hard he's about to fall.

His life, his trust, his everything...
Depends on how long he can hold on to her.
Because now he's falling...
Falling hard
Falling fast
Falling uncontrollably.


And when he reaches the bottom...
Is when she takes him for the ride of his life.
She lifts him up
She drops him down
She sways him from side to side.
He's scared, he's amazed, he's enthralled
He wants to hold onto her forever.

He never wants it to end.

Sometimes he risks letting go...
Just to see how quickly she pulls him back in.
And she does, as he knew she would.
And he holds on even tighter.


But then the ride runs out of steam.
And he's left there, wondering if it will ever happen again.
But now he's in the exit lane.
And the wait at the entrance is getting longer by the minute.

He'll never feel it again at this rate.

So off he goes, in search of another roller coaster
That's waiting for someone like him to come inside.



My heart is a child
excited, scared, trusting, needy
Seeking those emotional roller coasters
In this giant theme park of love.

Don't be afraid to let him fall.

It only makes him hold on tighter.

Don't be afraid of boring him

He couldn't see you as boring, anyway.

Or taking him through something a few times over.

He never minded a little repetition...
As long as something was still there.






Because as soon as it STOPS...

As soon as he gets kicked off of the ride...

This childish heart goes off

looking for
another roller coaster,

waiting to let


like him





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© 2011 SilentStalker / Mars
Published on Sunday, February 20, 2011.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Not pure collab, but without the direct inspiration of a similar heart, Mars, this would have never been writen. Credit for the title goes to her as well.
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  • Vulture On Friday, September 21, 2012, Vulture (60)By person wrote:

    this is almost a strange thing to cry over. maybe because I know that feeling to well only I've been hurled from every coaster I've ridden. stop being such a genius your murder on my eyelids, my tear ducts.

  • Devilish On Saturday, February 25, 2012, Devilish (3765)By person wrote:

    Damn.. From the mans point of view in a womans world.. oh how dirty it is.. I feel you .. Women can be monsters inside you.... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: you developed this vision so painstakingly well, it reads along a multiplicity.... it offers clear but unique paths for the mind to skip along, play with... pause and contemplate the many ways in which the metaphor just 'fits', just makes so much sense... is so bright, so revealing of how this funny little life with it's many theme parks never fails to provide that wild embrace you've conjured with care here.... and delicate suggestiveness... the bright overalls, even... made me think of that child, but made me think of the positive disposition this welcomes, encourages despite the danger, despite that ever approaching end.... very well done, yep, a great read, universal in concept, but intricately revealed with detail only the individual can feel... well designed with elocution and electricity. *bows before the ax wielding wordsmith of dp workings* Scholar

  • SilentStalker On Saturday, February 26, 2011, SilentStalker (1091)By person wrote:

    ...fuck, can always tell when someone gets it completely...and Mars did the title; I can't and won't take credit for that spark of genius... Scholar

  • NikesRain On Thursday, February 24, 2011, NikesRain (1339)By person wrote:

    i love when you write pieces like this... maybe it's because i'm a die hard romantic... maybe it's because i'm just too soft but this is perfect

  • Malice In Wonderland On Thursday, February 24, 2011, Malice In Wonderland (1021)By person wrote:

    I love this... =) Scholar

  • lupus tenebrae On Tuesday, February 22, 2011, lupus tenebrae (1017)By person wrote:

    That's the only thing about roller coasters, once the thrill has ended and euphoria has died, the craving for that familiar drug resurfaces. Then so begins the quest for more satisfaction. I guess in that sense love is the most thrilling coaster of them all. Excellent prose Scholar

  • A former member wrote: this metaphor is amazing, if i read this correctly ( i tend to make everything about love). love is such a wild ride, but the spin you put on it, the anticipation, the optimism, the self doubt, makes it unique. maybe i read this incorrectly though, im sorry if i did. Scholar

  • SilentStalker On Sunday, February 20, 2011, SilentStalker (1091)By person wrote:

    ...sounds to me like you read it perfectly... Scholar

  • Mars On Sunday, February 20, 2011, Mars (333)By person wrote:

    I read this, over and over, and I see myself and I see you. I see a mirror and I see us. If that makes any sense at all, it's just the way it happens. after all, life is nothing but a rollercoaster. when we're not upside down on one side, we'll be backwards on the other. I love it. both of you. -mars Scholar

  • Malcholm Dark On Sunday, February 20, 2011, Malcholm Dark (1040)By person wrote:

    isn't that the truth... good thing you didn't puke on the way down... lol... nice roller coaster tie-in... reminded me of the older woman and the man half her age... great piece of writing... thanks for sharing

  • Mars On Sunday, February 20, 2011, Mars (333)By person wrote:

    switch the genders and you got the story. :) Scholar

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