When Heaven's Not Enough
By Echoes of Orpheus
Not all desire paradise
as some desires
exist there not.
Satan proved it
in retaining his lust for power;
A need for more than heaven.
I fear a fate quite similar
but for a desire
far more fair.
She is a lover's legend,
A myriad of myths.
The dream of every lover passed;
an idyllic match, a perfect fit.
There is a taste of fantasy on her lips,
an undreamed depth within her eyes.
With kisses much like fairy tales,
though each is
never happily ended.
It's in moments apart I remember
that the world is just the world
and only she can make it more.
I will not exist without her.
Should I die first,
let me cease to be.
May god still his hand
and not pen my life
so much as one more page without you.
"The mind is its own place, and in itself
Can make a heav'n of hell, a hell of heav'n"
I will not be that angel,
feet dangling off the edge of a cloud
looking down upon the Earth.
Re.coiling from sadness,
limp wings behind my back.
A paroxysm of depression
lies but one step beyond those gates.
I will not be solitude's apprentice.
She is here, and until that changes
heaven is empty.
Let there be a gap in my existence,
and I from heaven's hell be tossed;
for the moment I'm without her
my paradise is lost.
~Quote taken from Sir John Milton, Paradise Lost, 1667.~
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Comments on "When Heaven's Not Enough"
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On Tuesday, February 14, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas
(293) wrote:
This is a perfect poem.
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On Sunday, July 17, 2011, Dommi
(95) wrote:
I've read this so many times. It's truly stunning..
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A former member wrote:
A divine beauty of words. The images you painted with your words could challenge the greatest works of Rembrandt, Monet, or any artist I can think of. I will read this whenever I long for that special someone.
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On Thursday, December 9, 2010, Malcholm Dark
(806) wrote:
a perfect love poem... god, satan, heaven, hell and paradise lost.... write
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On Sunday, March 29, 2009, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
Your posts seem to be fewer but each one stronger...Not only sould I feel this but I saw it play above my head...the sad angel dangling his feet over the edge...missing. longing. denying an eternity w/o his mate...ahhh how I miss your words...your visions when your posts are spread apart...and yet its like candy when I can read one. Id fav this if I had room...I will be reading this one time and time again.
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On Sunday, March 29, 2009, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
sorry I wrote this so fast I have no idea what "sould" was suppose to be...perhaps "do"
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On Friday, March 27, 2009, Fantecstasy
(120) wrote:
You deserve more credit then I can give for this sir. You've come a long way... a very long way. "let me cease to be / May god still his hand / and not pen my life / so much as one more page without you." You're answering the question To be, or not to be, with an answer in deadly affirmative form. I'd go on further but I don't think your ego needs to be stroked anymore. ;) *tips hat*
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On Friday, March 27, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
haha Joshy you can stroke my ego anytime :P (Now you see why I just had to point that out)
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On Tuesday, March 31, 2009, Mars
(323) wrote:
Dilly's ego is mine! and I don't share! unless you guys don't care for me looking ;)
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A former member wrote:
this was so smooth, the way it's written.. it reminds me of a good romance novel.. only a lot better because it's real.. i felt that this just flowed from you and didn't even take that long to write.. the muse must be smiling from ear to ear...
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, CjPsychotic
(30) wrote:
Its greatest beauty is the ability to relate. I was thinking the same thing the other day; my heaven lies next to me, why would I want to depart from that and into a salvation so much less desirable. Thank you for that write.
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, lovechild
(43) wrote:
simply beautiful
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A former member wrote:
*stares, awestruck*
and to think, I would have completely missed it had you not mentioned it. I love this, though the emotion, devotion and thought that went into this makes me a little jealous. I love that the end has a catchy little rhyme and I adore the quote; it fit well in the context. This may be perhaps the longest comment I've ever left on any work. Great job, *hugs*
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, Lady Grinning Soul
(143) wrote:
"A myriad of myths." "There is a taste of fantasy on her lips..." "I will not be that angel, feet dangling off the edge of a cloud looking down upon the Earth. Re.coiling from sadness, limp wings behind my back" these parts really stuck out to me. this was really sweet, and i'm glad to see you post again.
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
*hugs* thank you
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On Thursday, March 26, 2009, darkcoldplace
(6) wrote:
this is just great
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A former member wrote:
I don't know what to say to do this justice. Really good, though. Great sentiment.