Fate... feat ~Devilish~
By Nehema
dis.orderly .
momma didn't teach any manners ..
i became brilliant alone
seeing the un.seeable,
inside the minds of broken people,
the choked voiceless,
cold alone, the hopeless
roaming through zones..
hazardous .
there's a way around the feel ..
surreal ..
it seems too far away
untouchable, no face, nameless,
cant be replaced,
inside the case of a magicians box,
waiting to be severed in half
pieces..
one for you..
two for them..
how many limbs can i lend..
detached from the wrath..
i'm sinking fast..
yet floating in my own devoting space
smoke rings rise
with the fall of your chest,
hiding lines behind a simple jest,
needing approval from no one else,
I escape into the fumes leaving the rest
to fill the room
whole heartedly consumed..
the kind of taste you chase ...
shameless ..
a waste..
yet i fit like a glove to your..
level above.. ...
consumption..
there's no where else
to place your case ..
i win
Comments on "Fate... feat ~Devilish~"
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On Wednesday, December 4, 2013, darkheartmagic
(81) wrote:
A damn great write
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A former member wrote:
smoke rings rise with the fall of your chest..inside the case of a magicians box waiting to be severed in half. I know this feeling. A gritty existence you were born into, a victim of circumstance that never had a choice. I love this... It's honest, sad and biting. But it's also accepting, and in that acceptance you find your own individuality that can't be properly compared to someone else. Awesome man.
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On Saturday, August 10, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Being born into a mess can be a blessing, though no one wants to be responsible for cleaning it up. Whoot Whoot! * gives kourtni a cookie* Bingo gf, thanks for the comment n comprehension ;) - XXOO
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On Wednesday, July 31, 2013, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
From two of the best, of course it's gonna be awesome. Excellent collab both of you. You should do them more often. Excellent piece. Til next time -
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On Saturday, August 10, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Thanks Sean, n believe it or not, we do try to write together from time to time n it usually just doesn't work out for some reason, so the title on this is fitting in several ways - XXOO
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A former member wrote:
Ohhhhhhhh sheeeeat hahahahahaha
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On Sunday, July 21, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
" the kind of taste you chase ... shameless .. a waste.. " Loved this. and the ending wrapped it all up perfectly. ♥ Good job ladies. xoxo
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
Super cool collaboration, you two ;) "I escape into the fumes leaving the rest to fill the room whole heartedly consumed. " nice visuals too;)~ ~^_^~ xxx
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, Star
(879) wrote:
awesome collab you two. I hope to read more collabs of you guys, soon. (:
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
If the glove don't fit then you must acquit! This was a proud pronouncement of spell-breaking, bone crunching, superiority that leaves the reader pecking in the dirt like so many chickens. Pluck me, please, cheers ladies!!
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
LMFAO..Oh my god you kill me.. so many chickens.. lmao.. you are my hero.. dwells you have made my day..
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A former member wrote:
the beginning sounds like you explaining my cousin pretty cool
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...I can see you both among the broken, the lonely, the desperate, offering whatever help you can afford. pretty nice, Ladies...
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, Deathkitten
(571) wrote:
Mwahahaha sealing the fate! It IS the kind of taste we chase. Bravo *grins*
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Ok i am going to stroke my own ego right now. if i hadn't already posted i would of took the glory for this one on my page.. lol. this is beautiful. i believe the best collab i've been a part of really.. it fits perfectly with the time the place the notion the feel and the win.. bows,
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On Saturday, July 20, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
It's always an honor and a pleasure to write with you. I believe this was the fastest collab I've ever completed, and the best - like the title says, it must have been fate. Love you HUGE - XXOO