A Fox in Mere Embers
By lupus tenebrae
“Fox in mere embers, lies just out of
hiding,
nine tails aglow with the light they’re providing“,
verses, elusive, in dodging the candles,
cursive in something translation
can’t handle.
As epics were written and lost on the way
and
odysseys mumbled, estranged by the bay,
lanterns and flashlights
had burnt out together,
searching the moor for a tale in the weather,
and filaments whispered, from your ears to mine,
in salvaging cliff
notes from deep in the brine,
“fox in mere embers, lies just
out of hiding,
nine tails aglow with the light they’re providing.”
Verses, elusive, in dodging the candles,
cursive in something
translation can’t handle;
words on a heartstring, and lyrics
on paper,
water in rainfall just turning to vapor,
roses for
no one, and stones for Rozetta,
matching a lip-lock with crimson
poinsettias,
romancing concept with blind innovation,
romancing
diamonds to standing ovation
with love as our secret, and still
all unknown,
and even by candle, we’re still all…alone.
“Fox in mere embers , lies just out of hiding,
nine tails aglow
with the light they’re providing”.
As epics were written
and lost on the way
and odysseys mumbled, estranged by the bay,
the lights seem acrylic, and so far behind
like candles in blackouts
, like two palms in kind,
and dressed incognito, as sirens in white,
they dance and allure with a song for the night.
Metaphors mutter
in hopes of describing,
like relapse and whiskey, or pills in prescribing,
explaining away all the foghorns in sounding
as misty white maidens’
acoustics resounding;
“fox in mere embers, lies just out of hiding,
nine tails aglow with the light they’re providing”.
Author's Note:
One of those little miracles, licentia rhyme isn't easy for me to pull off.Comments on "A Fox in Mere Embers"
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A former member wrote:
Nice mythology context and reference. One can only wish to have your talent.
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On Sunday, August 18, 2013, Void Vortex
(298) wrote:
Wow. The talent on this site is amazing! Magical poem.
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On Sunday, July 7, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Congrats, this is stunning. I always preferred the Iliad to the Odyssey, but this makes me wanna go back and re-read it from the memories and images invoked by this piece. The middle stanza is my favorite, like the references there based on a recent personal experience. Your perfectionism is appreciated - XXOO
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On Sunday, July 7, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Many bows for this superlative piece Wolfie, cheers!
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A former member wrote:
Truly one of your finest works, Jared, & worth many rereads. Pulls at something in me that few poems can. Congrats on the well-deserved win, sir.
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On Saturday, July 6, 2013, TheProphetUntold
(160) wrote:
This was a difficult contest to judge, there were a few other poets who had 10's in merit easily. But when it came to the matter of element, they fell in the 6-7 range and this, in my opinion fell in the 8-9 range. Without further rambling I award you the prize and my respect, for such an accomplished, thought out and heart felt piece. 19/20 Phenomenal work, man. Take care.+tpu+
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On Friday, May 17, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
You so deserved this lupus.. yes yes yes.. i seen this without being logged in and had to ofcourse log in. lol congrats you ..well deserved.
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A former member wrote:
I pictured myself sitting in a rocking chair by a window, a candle in one of those old burners that has a holder for your finger on the sill and it snowing outside. There was a small, dying down fire just beyond the garden trees and there were faces passing between the window and what I saw. There were voices in my ear. You took me somewhere, and echos will last.
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On Sunday, February 10, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(791) wrote:
well written, beautiful why the repetitive mention of the nine tailed kitsune?
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On Friday, February 15, 2013, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
That's the mystery of it, I don't know why that repetition stuck.
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A former member wrote:
What can I add to this comment-wise? Absolutely nothing! This is a work of natural genius...you were born to do this. I fell asleep to this poem floating through my head & swimming through my heart last night. Bravo, man, just...bravo!
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A former member wrote:
indeed a master working this pen, deserving of nothing less than perfect ten!
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On Monday, December 3, 2012, haunted
(837) wrote:
speaking of epic...this is beautiful. i love your choice of words and how they all come together. its a perfect poem lupus. it doesnt get any better than this!
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On Monday, December 3, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
OMG please forgive me i never speak to you this way i can't help it this time i am fucking wet and drenched in this. holy hell. this is a bad bitch. a prefect ten. you sir i can't keep typing i will get myself in trouble. WOW
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A former member wrote:
This was AMAZING!!!!
I loved it so, so, so incredibly much!
Foxes allure me.... Maybe that's why my nickname is Kitsune... >~
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On Sunday, December 2, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
lovely rhyme. love the imagery and flow.