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Falling away
By SilentStalker
I'm on the cliff, so straight and tall
So huge it's hard to see it
all
I'm staring off; I'm staring down
I hardly even see the
ground
I think of what they put me through
I cry for
what I chose to do
I'm staring off; I'm staring down
I'm
looking at the barren ground
My eyes now looking to the
sky
I've silently chosen to die
I'm stepping off; I'm stepping
down
I am prepared to meet the ground
I wonder if they'll
shed no tears
For tainting my soul all these years
I'm stepping
off; I'm stepping down
I wonder how I'll hit the ground
And suddenly my frame feels light
As I begin my downward flight
I'm falling fast; I'm falling down
I'm welcoming the distant ground
I cannot think of any way
More beautiful to make them pay
I'm falling fast; I'm falling down
I'm spinning rolling to the
ground
And finally I feel no pain
I have achieved
this life's refrain
I've fallen fast; I've fallen down
I'm
at the end; I've hit the ground
I wish that I could se their
eyes
When they discover my demise
I've fallen fast; I've fallen
down
I've buried my soul in the ground
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Copyright 2003 Darun Ferguson
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On Saturday, January 12, 2013, Dei
(665)
wrote:
"My eyes now looking to the sky I've silently chosen to die" Im not sure why but these two lines made me stutter. Something about them seem different than the rest. I definitely appreciate this as an example for repitition.
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A former member wrote:
Utterly amazing.
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On Sunday, February 27, 2011, A poet of madness
(115) wrote:
Remember one important thing: don't let the bastards win. You're worth so much more than that
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A former member wrote:
rly gr8 wrk..wat a piece..comments nt necessary at all!!
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A former member wrote:
This poem was awesome. Great work.
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On Friday, June 27, 2008, snakeskingrin
(59) wrote:
Yep...LOL. :) That could be a mirror image of "The Jumper" eerily similar actually. Great minds think alike???? :)Snake
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A former member wrote:
i wish i had some of the will to write about jumping, but never thought of it...looks better, but i prefer the pain.
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, Dissolving Poet
(564) wrote:
this was intense, I could feel my chest clench as the poem began to end, I didn't want it to like a crying plea inside of my heart
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On Wednesday, April 5, 2006, Vexed
(74) wrote:
wow, brought actual tears to my eyes... I like how it felt, in a way, so like what I am feeling... still interesting but I like the first one I read best so far.
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On Tuesday, November 8, 2005, Solitary Dreamer
(24) wrote:
excellent piece...great flow and begining to end transition..I liked it
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A former member wrote:
mmm..this is deep. but, i feel a connection. the feeling this poem gives, it's amazing.
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On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
masterfully written, i enjoyed the whole downward spiral type of falling i felt as i read into this, very deep, awesome job ~Josh~
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On Friday, June 11, 2004, ONEANDLONELY
(117) wrote:
Suicide is a fact of life, and the finality of it intrigues me. There is nothing wrong with talking about it. Good thought, conveyed well.
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On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, yslehc
(334) wrote:
this one's on my wall hehe... it's awsome, especially the last three stanzas
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On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...this was the first truly crazy poem of mine...suicidal thoughts before homicidal thoughts...looks like my redirection of rage worked out pretty well...lol
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On Sunday, October 12, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
Its Simple... Cross The Line... Figuratively And Non As Well. The Mortal Has Commented. GPhD.
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A former member wrote:
The reason I never commented on this one is because I don't care for suicide poems. True...this poem carries none of the "it'll be great when i'm dead" crap that I don't like in the others but all the same...Suicide poetry just do it for me
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A former member wrote:
Even if it IS by you ;)
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A former member wrote:
A very lovely poem.. I am starting to like you poetry a lot so... i shall read more... great work. *~angel~*
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On Tuesday, September 16, 2003, The Fallen Angel
(235) wrote:
This could make a nice song! I usually don't care for suicide butuh...this is exceptional+Fallen One+
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A former member wrote:
WOw, nice poem, makes me think about a lot of things,it was deep and most enjoyed, nice work
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A former member wrote:
Well people who don't talk to you because they don't understand aren't worth the space. Your poetry is deep and emotional especially this one. I enjoyed reading it alot. Keep it up. =) x.x axelle x.x
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On Sunday, September 14, 2003, Crystal Passion
(221) wrote:
yah like axelle put it :)
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