Lightly Treading Through Desire

By lupus tenebrae

Treading lightly through the shadows,
treading lightly through the shadows,
like a spirit thrice discreet,
like a spirit thrice discreet.
Like a spirit through the shadows
the discreet, treading lightly.

Fakes and friends are twice erased,
fakes and friends are twice erased,
The terror makes a hearty feast,
the terror makes a hearty feast.
Are the hearty friends erased?
Fakes and terror, twice a feast.

Increase in this feint desire
increase in this feint desire,
deceit’s likely charismatic,
deceit’s likely charismatic.
Deceit’s likely feint desire,
increase in this charismatic.

Fakes increase shadows erased,
friends are twice the likely feast
and treading lightly through desire,
deceit‘s in the charismatic,
discreet, like this, a thrice spirit
makes a terror, hearty, feint.

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Published on Monday, February 13, 2012. Filed under: "Satire" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

One of my recent ones that sort of vanished to the bottom pile. It's a paradelle, a mockery of my first villanelle attempt from long ago.

Comments on "Lightly Treading Through Desire"

A former member wrote: I thoroughly enjoyed the style of this piece. Repetition is great when used like this!
A former member wrote: Yes, likewise. I've never read anything of this type of style. The repetitiveness took me to circle casting, but that goes into something entirely different. I can't imagine what sparked the inspiration for this. Usually, I find satire work rather violent. This was more of a sense of impending doom. I like the thrill in reading it though, and when the end came about, gave way to tremors at the small of my back.
On Wednesday, April 3, 2013, Ashteroth (190) wrote:

Hmm, I have not read a poem of this style before. Was interesting to say the least. I hate to ask but can you explain to me what "friends twice the feast" mean plz? I would like to better understand. I feel I got the rest but unsure on which way to take that part. Thats for the post ~Ash
On Wednesday, April 3, 2013, lupus tenebrae (860) wrote:

Well, as the author's note suggests, this is a parody of my first attempt at a villanelle. It's taking a jab at the more nonsensical lines I threw in to fit the form. I'm also an Engrish enthusiast, so there's that.
On Sunday, January 20, 2013, Devilish (2633) wrote:

OMG this is what became of the piece i just read? wow . talk about perfecting a poem. ok so i still feel an inch high compared but i know i can learn from you. but this does blow me away.
On Saturday, January 19, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

Interesting word choices at first I thought that you meant to use faint as in slight but you really did mean to use feint as in feint right and fake left... really interesting take. Well done
A former member wrote: This spoke to the philosopher in my mind. It turned my entire view. I thank you for writing this.
On Monday, February 13, 2012, FadedBlues (2096) wrote:

...creating different meanings by rearranging the same words, challenging...my 1st experience w/a paradelle...
On Monday, February 13, 2012, ColorMeToxic (238) wrote:

Love it. Nicely done as always my friend.