Ship in a Bottle III
By Echoes of Orpheus
A work inspired by Ship In A Bottle II
"It's out of reach," the captain groans,
"We're just too small, I should have known..."
Shipwrecked, he stood alone in the sand
"I haven't found it yet, I don't understand.
Long have I searched, suffered these seas.
I die the captain, not on my knees."
The captain walked and left his crew behind.
"It will be mine, if it exists to find."
"I've felt it since wind filled my first sail;
Something worth chasing, that time would unveil."
They met up the beach, equal distance from both broken ships.
Golden hair under a captains hat, flowing past blue eyes, red lips.
A woman, with eyes too much like his own,
having wandered the world and called nothing home.
He searches
through those eyes so blue.
Gaze lured, lost in oceans two.
In them, a wanderers will grows weak;
and past those depths, he need not seek.
and past those depths,
he need not seek.
Comments on "Ship in a Bottle III"
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On Thursday, December 21, 2017, Cassette
(1087) wrote:
I can see these three poems printed and framed on the wall
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A former member wrote:
You know this is fucking awesome, right...?
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On Thursday, January 15, 2009, Mithiras
(35) wrote:
maybe I should read them in chronological order instead of 3-1 >>. But other than this I loved this poetic story. I wish my ship would crash in China...
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On Wednesday, January 14, 2009, Narcissa
(391) wrote:
*sighs*...These series are heart stopping. Perhaps I need to reread the others but I think this is my favorite of this series...The image is so vivid it breaks my heart.
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On Wednesday, January 14, 2009, Henry Coldnight
(15) wrote:
haha I just found this today and I'm going to agree with mars, it made me sigh too. It felt so frustrating when I was one of them [>_
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Leith Plunkett
(237) wrote:
I have been away for a while and I come back to a style of rhyming. A different style than I last read from yourself but I really enjoyed. didnt seem forced at all. Well captured
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
nice "depth". :) Just curious, what would the alternate ending have been?
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
He finds nothing.
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Fantecstasy
(120) wrote:
Would have liked it more, with the crushing despair, and cruelty...
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On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
I think the first is still my favorite, but I always intended to make a series of it, so there it is.