Ship in a Bottle III

By Echoes of Orpheus

A work inspired by Ship In A Bottle II









"It's out of reach," the captain groans,
"We're just too small, I should have known..."






Shipwrecked, he stood alone in the sand
"I haven't found it yet, I don't understand.

Long have I searched, suffered these seas.
I die the captain, not on my knees."

The captain walked and left his crew behind.
"It will be mine, if it exists to find."





"I've felt it since wind filled my first sail;
Something worth chasing, that time would unveil."








They met up the beach, equal distance from both broken ships.
Golden hair under a captains hat, flowing past blue eyes, red lips.

A woman, with eyes too much like his own,
having wandered the world and called nothing home.











He searches
through those eyes so blue.
Gaze lured, lost in oceans two.

In them, a wanderers will grows weak;
and past those depths, he need not seek.









and past those depths,
he need not seek.














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© 2009 Echoes of Orpheus
Published on Tuesday, January 13, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Cassette On Thursday, December 21, 2017, Cassette (1087)By person wrote:

    I can see these three poems printed and framed on the wall

  • A former member wrote: You know this is fucking awesome, right...?

  • Mithiras On Thursday, January 15, 2009, Mithiras (35)By person wrote:

    maybe I should read them in chronological order instead of 3-1 >>. But other than this I loved this poetic story. I wish my ship would crash in China...

  • Narcissa On Wednesday, January 14, 2009, Narcissa (391)By person wrote:

    *sighs*...These series are heart stopping. Perhaps I need to reread the others but I think this is my favorite of this series...The image is so vivid it breaks my heart.

  • Henry Coldnight On Wednesday, January 14, 2009, Henry Coldnight (15)By person wrote:

    haha I just found this today and I'm going to agree with mars, it made me sigh too. It felt so frustrating when I was one of them [>_

  • Leith Plunkett On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Leith Plunkett (237)By person wrote:

    I have been away for a while and I come back to a style of rhyming. A different style than I last read from yourself but I really enjoyed. didnt seem forced at all. Well captured

  • Sketso On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Sketso (416)By person wrote:

    nice "depth". :) Just curious, what would the alternate ending have been?

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (357)By person wrote:

    He finds nothing.

  • Fantecstasy On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Fantecstasy (120)By person wrote:

    Would have liked it more, with the crushing despair, and cruelty...

  • Echoes of Orpheus On Tuesday, January 13, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus (357)By person wrote:

    I think the first is still my favorite, but I always intended to make a series of it, so there it is.

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