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The Lake
By SilentStalker
Dragged into the cold lake, you struggle with fear
But this is your
fate, love; my pain brought you here
The ropes that restrain
you will not let you run
Don't worry, my beauty; it's already done
Now this should be painless, though perish you will
Yet
you will feel nothing, so please, love, be still
Now pushed
underwater, you're fighting to rise
Your panic grows greater; so
wide are your eyes
You grasp at my fingers; you're screaming
in fright
I can't let you surface; please give up the fight
Your lungs fill with water; you know you will die
I can't
stand to watch you; I look to the sky
And soon it is over;
your life now is gone
I hold you for hours; can't seem to move
on
My love, you betrayed me, for that you did pay
Though
I never wanted to end it this way...
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Copyright 2003 Darun Ferguson
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On Monday, July 11, 2011, Ladyhawke
(394)
wrote:
The punishment for betrayal, though silently crying for the hurt to stop. Great write, enjoyed it much.
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On Monday, July 11, 2011, Nameless Pariah
(126) wrote:
Somehow this was mesmerizing.
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful. I see such beauty in a man that kills the woman he loves. That is, perhaps, sick but it is also the way I feel. Had I not found my Dark King already, I might have to wonder about you...
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A former member wrote:
Very well written, the rhyme, words, the images. Are all really done too well... Like it's actually happened...haha Awesome story. Brutal and heartwrenching. +tpu+
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A former member wrote:
seems i havn't commented on this one yet. its a great work, it really is, and there was a great deal of feelings coming from it, at least for me
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On Wednesday, October 15, 2003, TheMistressBucket
(18) wrote:
This is just so beautiful. Makes me want to fall in love. *Misty eyed*
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On Tuesday, October 21, 2003, Cinn
(152) wrote:
wow you were definately feelin somethin with this - it really gets you
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On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
ooo creepy .. i like it, good job
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On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, hate_doll
(265) wrote:
hm...I wish this could be the solution to all our backstabbing ex's ::dreams:: whelp, this was great, as always, wolf explained it well, a twisted tragedy...
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On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...and no blood, for a change...hehe...
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A former member wrote:
He's just good at that...bravo a twisted tragety...wolf
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A former member wrote:
Yes, he is.
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A former member wrote:
But there are no floating heads! *pout* How rude! LOL...delicious darling. How is it you make killing people so entertaining and poetic?
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On Tuesday, October 14, 2003, SilentStalker
(1066) wrote:
...dunno...I keep reading over this one, and the deepness of it gets greater each time...wierd...
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