Fantasy & Ecstasy
By Echoes of Orpheus
Using some short phrases from the work of Fantecstasy,
If you've got the time to decode and really appreciate a poem, go check
out his works.
He's dreamed so many dreams replete
and always woken incomplete
for what was perfect is the past, though it did last
long enough to mark defeat.
Too quickly are hopes taken, he knows,
carried swiftly on carrion,
on carrion and crows.
Still serenading parades of the past
with words that wont reach
and dreams that won't last.
because to dream is a danger, if even for a while,
where the world is but a circus
and masks always in style.
Now forever bound...
for in her he found
one wish and a need for no more.
When spoken, its token
was a residual sound
that echos to this day love like lore;
oh how quickly...
she became his Lenore.
It's when ecstasy exists as fantasy alone,
love is a jester that turns heart to stone,
and solace a king that loans you his throne;
that you realize hell holds no flames
but the ones in your heart.
Hell is but memories for company,
her name as all to behold,
and in part, almost art,
a cadence most cold.
Comments on "Fantasy & Ecstasy"
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On Saturday, October 8, 2011, Ladyhawke
(392) wrote:
Holy god! Why have I never read this? God, this is.....masterful. They way the words flow and caress each other like the movements of water moving slowly but deliberatly through the channel. My god, this leaves my nothing short of speechless. Brava. Just......wow.
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On Thursday, May 7, 2009, ALBATROSS
(194) wrote:
Wow that second to last stanza was brilliant. I'm about to read more from you, I'm impressed.
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On Thursday, May 7, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
Read some of his work, this is his style not mine sir ;)
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On Wednesday, May 6, 2009, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
A great deal of this is wonderful: I think the last stanza loses metre a little, but not enough to detract too much from what is overall an excellent ride. Fast-paced and cleverly structured; fine write! I'm hypercritical of rhyme, too. This is very nicely crafted.
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On Wednesday, May 6, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
That comment from you means a lot, and I will definitely take changing the ending into consideration.
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A former member wrote:
Rhyming is painful isn't it? Like you...I probably could take it once a month, tops. I like the imagery.
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On Wednesday, May 6, 2009, Fantecstasy
(120) wrote:
I'd favorite this instantly, but I need to upgrade still... Definitely made me smile, and very well done. Sensational, as it were. *tips hat*
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On Wednesday, May 6, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
No need, sir. The comment is enough *tips your hat back at you*
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On Wednesday, May 6, 2009, Echoes of Orpheus
(357) wrote:
An attempt at his style, at least I can say that I tried ;) Now that I've got enough rhyme out of me for a month, on to my usual writings :P