Caca de Maimutza
By TropicalSnowstorm
Gypsies are Roma now and
the Piltdown bones have turned into pigs,
but the Princess of Beius still likes to shake it to House
and I know that inside every grain of wheat lies the soul of a star.
I may have a dirty soul, but life is beautiful and so is she
even as heaven ignores my cries to strike me irresistible.
I’ve seen valleys and oceans, yet the largest expanse is the inches
of sofa between us as we watch a movie after the clubs close.
Placing my arm nonchalantly in this “no man’s” land
I hope to bridge the distance, but she never meets me halfway.
Maybe it’s because she is intimidated
by the presence of her friends,
it might be that she is inconveniently
good for someone so cool,
or maybe she just thinks I am full of shit…
but the only place our fingers touch is in my mind
as I try to will my aura to buy her aura another glass of wine.
Once again the would be conqueror becomes the conquered
as I walk her home and a kiss on the cheek
makes me feel like “the world is mine.”
-- by Steve McKennon - 8/21/06
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Comments on "Caca de Maimutza"
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A former member wrote:
" I may have a dirty soul, but life is beautiful and so is she"
Astounding words and an Awesome Piece!
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On Wednesday, January 20, 2010, Rachel
(210) wrote:
This is absolutely fantastic. I am greatly disappointed in myself for never having read it before today. The world is a better place for having this masterpiece (and it's creator!) in it. :)
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
You are amazing.
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Jonas
(715) wrote:
sometimes i neglect to read you because you are so assuredly talented that though always impressed i'm never surprised... that's a stupid thought, i realize. god this is good.
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A former member wrote:
'but the only place our fingers touch is in my mind, as I try to will my aura to buy her aura aother glass of wine.' This poem was mesmerizing
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A former member wrote:
cleverly deceptive use of analogy, it feels like a sweet game, and you go along willingly, but don't be afraid to break some rules. interesting topic, I enjoyed reading.
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On Monday, September 11, 2006, K_Love
(525) wrote:
So tantalizingly beautiful, I'm wrapped around this one completely. Wonderful imagery, most lovely write.
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On Thursday, August 31, 2006, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
so you fell in love with a lesbian. very understandable.
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A former member wrote:
well done, wonderful imagery. this is great ~Tamara
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On Tuesday, August 22, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
Damn. That was absolutely beautiful & real!! "I try to will my aura to buy her aura another glass of wine" Fave line! Brilliant, and just so sweet & vulnerable. Loved it!!! Julia~
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On Monday, August 21, 2006, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Hahaha. That's what it's all about. This is just real-time life. I'm digging it. Write on.
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On Monday, August 21, 2006, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
oustanding images and emotions bubbling up through this, like watching in suspense with every line.... so well done and drawing...
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On Monday, August 21, 2006, DarkPoet
(229) wrote:
Ah! Another gem, I remember that feeling well.