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The Whole
By elisa
the whole
has holes
of parts
apart
with voids
of cold alone
each hidden corner
all well known
as darkness waits
in frozen stones
no one knows
we're not alone
just one
of many
thoughts
unknown
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Copyright 2004 elisa2
Published on Tuesday, July 13, 2004.
Filed under: "Philosophical" and
"Poetry"
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On Thursday, January 3, 2013, SinneR
(17)
wrote:
Short, precise and leaves some mystery behind. Outstanding piece of work
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On Thursday, July 19, 2012, Melancholic VIncent
(428) wrote:
Perfect poem this one. Reminded me of a shattered mind that one with schizophrenia possesses. Good choice of words as well
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A former member wrote:
This is so good
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On Monday, July 9, 2007, Err0r
(358) wrote:
I like how it started with the title, but your words are so probing. You certainly make your point known, nothing cryptic here. NIce work hun.
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On Monday, June 18, 2007, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Splinter shatter, brain piercing write.
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On Sunday, June 12, 2011, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Still so fucking good...Like the best medicine.
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A former member wrote:
i am definitely down with this..not just because the style is so familiar but the content itself is quite..well it MEANS SOMETHING....to me at least. and perhaps far different from what you meant. but that's a good thing i think...however it works...it wo
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On Friday, June 15, 2007, elisa
(1595) wrote:
i'd love to hear your interpretation.... this piece left a permanent dent in my mind ... you should dpmail me.
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On Monday, March 19, 2007, Stranger
(263) wrote:
Excellent word play.
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On Wednesday, September 27, 2006, Drifter
(265) wrote:
oooh i think perhaps i have a new name to watch for around here. I really like this one, i've read it over and over. and i really like the play on words and the subtle message put forth with them.
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On Monday, July 24, 2006, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
wow! puzzles breaking on their own. this leaves me so very well blown. *) 669
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On Thursday, May 18, 2006, inexperienced
(26) wrote:
voids in the whole;voids making the whole.very deep thought,and very true.perfect style
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A former member wrote:
cool poem im ijustkilledmyself i just started the other day check out some of my poems if u want thanks
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A former member wrote:
nice word play
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On Sunday, August 21, 2005, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
......this truely amazes me....so little words and so many meanings...great write
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On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill
(47) wrote:
The first part is so original. The rhymes that are on top of each other and the way they work...Accute and startle. And I don't much like rhyme. It is short and proud. Defind and radiant. Lovely and well-written.
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On Wednesday, December 1, 2004, steuss
(92) wrote:
This flows so wonderfully. I really enjoyed both the words used and the sound they invoked! Well Done!
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A former member wrote:
Wow!
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On Monday, July 19, 2004, Jane
(53) wrote:
wow... amazing...
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On Thursday, July 15, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
Makes me realize that inside I keep hidden and don't investigate in others... a beautiful opening you create... points at what we don't know that we don't know... 1Love, Seth
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On Thursday, July 15, 2004, Mr King
(547) wrote:
Also, beautiful word fit and flow... I love it.
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A former member wrote:
"Just one of many thoughts unkown" excellent stuff. much meaning i find in this.
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