-so you tell her you mister- and let her be amiss-
By swing_the_hammer
i feel heavy
like a hammer falling
i'm unsteady
think i hear you calling
-so i swing-
and i lean...
and wonder if you're listening
i'm reminded of you sometimes
of how you always seem to get me
(entangled in your well-worded rhymes)
captivated by electric lines of poetry
-so i spark and i shine-
accept and decline...
and wonder if i'm yours or mine
i feel deadly
a lover on a waiting list
i'm a medley
of the lyrics between the wrist
and the resist
and when it seemed all others missed
my brain and your bullets kissed...
i wonder if you're reading this
of all committed love crimes
perhaps it is the greater sin
to see within these rhymes
are all that we have ever been
to say there is still time
yet never knowing when...
and i wonder if the ink stirs under your skin
each time you reach for a pen...
i feel ready
like the hammer that i am
waiting...steady
pivoting on a pin
baiting...ready
for that slow cylinder to spin
is your trigger finger heavy?
because every time you let it fall
you blow me away
again and again and again
Comments on "-so you tell her you mister- and let her be amiss-"
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On Friday, December 30, 2016, sIo
(898) wrote:
My chest is caving into a gasp. Tell me there is so much more of this.
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On Sunday, September 14, 2014, BetaWolfinVA
(791) wrote:
what a ride:)
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On Saturday, March 9, 2013, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
This is powerful...the anticipation and wait is killer, and I've never seen or heard it put this way, kept in a writing state...
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On Sunday, February 17, 2008, Niemand
(355) wrote:
FANTASTIC!! -Geisha
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On Thursday, August 16, 2007, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Everyone else has already said it, but Jesus Christ, that title! And then there's that last section. I just stepped on a land mine.
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A former member wrote:
I love poems like this. A personal story yet written well enough to stand on its own poetic feet. And this is very well written
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On Friday, January 19, 2007, elisa
(1595) wrote:
the title is genius..... the poem ....speaks for itself.... love it.
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On Wednesday, January 3, 2007, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
This was smooth, fluid, and absolutely gorgeous.
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On Tuesday, January 2, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
spectacular! great job ~Tamara
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A former member wrote:
This is a wonderful write I can see the emotion with in the lines of this peice
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On Saturday, August 19, 2006, blue
(1409) wrote:
echo, this was fantastic. Entirely fantastic! ~b
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A former member wrote:
hot damn. i'm with six out, this was amazing..both the title and the piece. "i feel deadly/a lover on a waiting list/i'm a medley/of the lyrics between the wrist" very smooth and lyrical..and fantastic closing stanza. this was great.
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On Saturday, August 19, 2006, blue
(1409) wrote:
lmao! o.O)) you said hot damn!
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On Saturday, August 19, 2006, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
holy fucking hell. the title is amazing. The poem is amazing. This completely humbled me. I'm amazed dear, you're astounding.
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On Saturday, August 19, 2006, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
and i wonder if the ink stirs under your skin each time you reach for a pen... adore it! ~lauren~