she dreams
By cre
she thinks she dreams in color now
and she wonders when it rains
where the smoke gets away to
on burnt out autumn days
cold-weather coats
and someone else's chill
she never could get warm
-she never will-
vacation destinations
she can't forget the trees
she thinks she always screams
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rocks come here to turn this amazing shade
dull grey to deep space
blue
you are here to change
she thinks she always knew
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we should take the high road
before this day disappears
we could find our own way
before we disappear
cause the sun won't set till everything is right
she pretends she doesn't know
it's just a slipshod way of holding off the night
and she thinks dirt paths
will always lead to somewhere
but the world is grinding by
and they've all closed their eyes
they never see the snake that hisses
at their mission-minded feet
and she thinks she dreams
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Comments on "she dreams"
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On Wednesday, December 27, 2017, Cassette
(1087) wrote:
very lovely, cre. But I expected nothing less.
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A former member wrote:
I love this type of incredible poetry .... I love the narration .... I love the intense life experience .... I love the vivid description
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On Sunday, October 9, 2016, 10 Forty Three
(543) wrote:
Your way with words.. Very philosophical. Well done! - 10:43
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A former member wrote:
I know you probably don't read these comments anymore, and I'm sure I commented when you first posted this, but I came back to read it again. "But the world is grinding by." Yeah, it really is.
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A former member wrote:
Hi cre I am a hudge fan of your writting Love this one!!!!
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A former member wrote:
Lovely like musical lyrics to a sad song of someone i once knew. Her troubles were all her own. She lived in a world that no one knew, but aren't we all in our private dreams made real? We can lie to ourselves so seductively that we want to believe. You saw the truths of her, perhaps everyone did, and yet she slips by, always wondering why no one else sees what she sees.
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A former member wrote:
incredible poetry...i love the rhythm in this also :)
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A former member wrote:
It begs you to read again and again...truly amazing.
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A former member wrote:
your such an amazing poet.Your the reason I joined dark poetry. ][ ][
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On Wednesday, July 20, 2011, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
this is perfect, I wish I could rhyme the way you do... I've walked these footsteps in various points of my life, and you describe it so vividly...
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On Wednesday, April 28, 2010, A Life Without You
(146) wrote:
Dito, beautiful, absolutely...
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A former member wrote:
So beautiful.
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On Sunday, June 28, 2009, FallenSky
(42) wrote:
This has such a wonderfuly melancholy rhythm, i feel lucky that i stumbled upon such a great piece of poetry
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On Monday, June 8, 2009, Blood Saga
(78) wrote:
Please come back!
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On Friday, February 6, 2009, Cherry Bear
(25) wrote:
Where'd you go? I love this poem. I always have.ST~
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A former member wrote:
wow that's amazing.
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On Monday, June 16, 2008, nur hidayah
(114) wrote:
I wasn't even a member yet when you left this place but have always been a faithful reader and a huge admirer. Like Jonas said, you are missed and because of the beauty in your works, someone is always thinking about you somewhere.
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On Saturday, May 31, 2008, Jonas
(715) wrote:
are you around anymore. i have the odd feeling of palpably missing someone i never met. shucks life is weird. i hope you are well and someday read this. i further hope that it strikes you as wonderful that another person somewhere somehow thinks good things about you from time to time.
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A former member wrote:
Damn man that is some deep stuff there
good job....
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A former member wrote:
Ooh...she reminds me of me! *help me*
No really, this is one of the greatest things I've ever read I think. Wow wow wow.
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On Wednesday, April 25, 2007, prettydisgrace
(93) wrote:
i love this,i love all your work...especially PLASTIC BALLERINA.i must honestly say its the best peice of poetry i have ever read.you are truely gifted.joleen
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On Saturday, January 13, 2007, Angelic Darkness
(27) wrote:
She thinks she dreams but in dreams does she think she knows? Great write. ~*~Angi
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On Sunday, November 5, 2006, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
I totally agree with what antiScripsony says below. Jane, it's almost 2years since you last posted a poem, here's hoping you come back soon with an almighty bang.
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On Wednesday, October 18, 2006, antiScripsony
(30) wrote:
jane be jane. you're better that way. not when you tryin'. imitating something. you think you saw... so jane be jane. i know sometimes that might drive them away. let 'em stay there, you don't need them anyway
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A former member wrote:
wow
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A former member wrote:
You are so freaking grate!!!!!!
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A former member wrote:
I miss you :(
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On Thursday, October 27, 2005, LiP Stiches
(42) wrote:
!(*^(*^$@^*_speachless_)*&(^$#@!
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On Saturday, August 6, 2005, Solace
(1065) wrote:
This is a brilliant piece, an amazing expression that just affixes itself to your heart in an endearing broken way...
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On Friday, July 15, 2005, Dei
(663) wrote:
i enjoyed this
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On Friday, June 3, 2005, Yesterday
(12) wrote:
I love the way this turned out. I, sometimes feel that I dream in colours, but then again.. I wake up. Wonderful job.
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, Litteratus
(42) wrote:
the readers dream when they read this one. excellent work!
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A former member wrote:
why is it the greatest poets try to remain hidden throughout life?
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A former member wrote:
your work is my muse
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On Wednesday, May 4, 2005, Kinkypoptart
(555) wrote:
You always have that flow that a lot of us strive for but can never accomplish. Great write. ~*~Tart~*~
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On Wednesday, March 2, 2005, urbanhumility
(1158) wrote:
beautiful in its self-discovery............well done......urban
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On Tuesday, March 1, 2005, manunkind
(64) wrote:
oh cre, where have thou gone? DP IS EMPTY without you!! anyway, beautiful write, as always. you've done such a good job with the
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On Tuesday, March 1, 2005, manunkind
(64) wrote:
imagery in the first line, that when i read this poem, i saw the entire thing in black and white. :) please come back!! we miss you!
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On Saturday, February 26, 2005, rondant
(58) wrote:
beautiful.....Ronda
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On Sunday, January 2, 2005, Jonas
(715) wrote:
visions of our dreams moving past us, grinding in the mill of time until we have a fine dust of regret that blows away on a crisp wind from the sea... screaming, this is our spilt milk. beautiful, your flair for the melancholy is unmatched
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On Thursday, December 23, 2004, Drifter
(265) wrote:
Once again, proof you earned that little crown in the corner. Wonderful
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A former member wrote:
*Phenomenal*..I am jealous from ur talent..well done..Imad
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On Sunday, December 5, 2004, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
Your words kept me thinking. The lovely wash of colors and environmental portraits made this piece very easy to read.
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On Sunday, December 5, 2004, island warrior
(210) wrote:
I can see why you're royalty, very enjoyable read.
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On Thursday, December 2, 2004, Kfritz
(12) wrote:
amazing read...