Ignis Fatuus

By purr_verse

Aphrodite is a liar;
this shinyspecial beauty, this neverexpected majestic guest,
diamond-eyed and dripping with
heady incensual promises: a full-lipped, full-blooded,
full-fathom-five-i'm-falling
deceiver

and she is too-perfectly smiling

at me.

my voice snarlwhispered: "you are not love!
love has thorns
shadows
and knives.
You are hiding the knives."

She does not answer; she laughs and dances
in fire and amethyst,
turns up the tempo
on the beat below
and gives me a subliminal rapier kiss

takes my blood
without my notice:

the mirror reflects heartcut liquidcrimson
pooling at my feet -
painlessly
hypnotically
endlessly

Fatally

of course

but so beautiful.














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Copyright 2004 Natalie Mills Lyndon
Published on Sunday, January 25, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: So powerful...

  • jonLyndon On Thursday, October 14, 2010, jonLyndon (113)By person wrote:

    The tempo as full blooded as ever...

  • jaunty pill On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill (47)By person wrote:

    This is gloomy , But at the same time , Immense and lit. This one is one for the bookmarks. Thank you.

  • jaunty pill On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill (47)By person wrote:

    On the other hand , This can be taken to a literal end. A shock from the past ebbing back into our future..Wasting away the barren flesh that wears so thin upon us all. Like baby fat or the rinsed stuffing of an old chair.

  • jaunty pill On Thursday, March 10, 2005, jaunty pill (47)By person wrote:

    The first stanza literally knocked my socks off. And not only that , But you did it with a talented pen. Your wording is original and , Somehow , Mellow and still alive. It invokes a clever appeal...A tragic frame caught in beauty. An eruption.

  • A former member wrote: I love this one. It was the first I've read from you, and it was a wonderful surprise. Congrats. *Lilith*

  • Dancing_Monkey On Monday, April 12, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    Kust as I was taken away it ended, but the poem stayed in my head... I cant belive this write, I must get rid of this jealusy somehow.. ennyways, I'll just favor it and pretend it's my creation. Peter -

  • Dancing_Monkey On Monday, April 12, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    she laughs and dances in fire and amethyst, turns up the tempo on the beat below and gives me a subliminal rapier kiss ... so demanding of the readers atention. I am realy in ore by this write.. P

  • Lynaes On Thursday, March 4, 2004, Lynaes (854)By person wrote:

    Stunning. This piece's beauty is very hard hitting. Gorgeous words. ~L

  • A former member wrote: 'painlessly hypnotically endlessly Fatally of course but so beautiful. ' I just had to revisit this splendid cadence ... something for pause to breathe...painlessly endless this beauty...

  • A former member wrote: "Aphrodite is a liar." captivating, simply spectacular.

  • Drea On Saturday, January 31, 2004, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    awing! my mind is searching for the right comment. although, i'm not sure is there is one that does this justice. the imagry alone was enough to keep my attetnion. the flow and choice of words...flawless..~Drea~

  • capt_funguy On Monday, January 26, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    another great write , ... but let's talk business - i'll trade you - "valorsphere" for "snarlwhisper" and i'll even throw in " cadillatrophy" just to get the deal done - funguy

  • A former member wrote: "Fatally of course but so beautiful." Just what I would use to describe this! Wow I just love it. It stunned me, and now I cannot speak. The way you use words is intruiging to the eye. ~Wish Upon A Star

  • birdwell On Monday, January 26, 2004, birdwell (138)By person wrote:

    left wordless again... your talent knows no boundaries ~db~

  • A former member wrote: Aprodite is a liar. "Subliminal rapier kiss" Perfectly worded. And the ending...oh the ending. This just drips with an honest look at love...Perfectly lovely.

  • flying_fox On Monday, January 26, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    the crux of this one for me is in this line "You are hiding the knives". You're writing is never less than purrfection, my most beautiful sister. Always in awe of you. xxxx

  • A former member wrote: 'diamond-eyed and dripping' Such idiosyncratic cadence, the staccato style & beat tempo of this heartcut composition; bites w/ a subliminal rapier kiss: love like a knife. Deadly and beautiful.

  • A former member wrote: the rhythm is like 'liquidcrimson', melting, dripping, off a purr_versed poet's tongue; the verse's purr...drowns the reader deeply...

  • purr_verse On Monday, January 26, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    i swear that your commentary regularly outstrips the poem... >:)

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Sunday, January 25, 2004, Spiritus_Frumenti (340)By person wrote:

    i have no clue what the title means but i get the idea you are portraying here...bitter sweet and witty...awesome...-l-

  • purr_verse On Monday, January 26, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    translates literally as 'the foolish fire'... it's the true name of swamp lights...and just a cool latin phrase, and i'm a sucker for that. :)

  • Alanarchy On Sunday, January 25, 2004, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    I agree with Suicidedoll. That line blew me away. Great write.

  • A former member wrote: purr-fect understanding of love..

  • yslehc On Sunday, January 25, 2004, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    oooo lovely write, quite enjoyable

  • Solace On Sunday, January 25, 2004, Solace (1065)By person wrote:

    Absolutely awesome! I'm all in agreeance with snowstorm, painting aphrodite as a liar and deceiver, great stuff!

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Sunday, January 25, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    "Fatally of course but so beautiful." - great piece! I love the imagery, romantic and idealistic...yet so cynical. Purr-fect contrast! Ciao, T/S Scholar


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