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Ghost Train
By SilentStalker
*I just found this...I wrote it when I was 15...that was 8 years ago, forgive
me...not one of my fav's, but let me know what you think...*
If walking down the rail at night
Don't ever turn your
back
And try to flee before you see
The Ghost Train roam the
track
The chilling glow that it emits
Will make you
freeze in fear
The face of Death will steal your breath
And
take your soul from here
Don't ever let it pass by you
Or you will surely die
And you will share the rash despair
In every victim's cry
When morning lights the cursed night
The train's sent to its grave
But this means naught if you get
caught
Your soul still can't be saved
*I wrote this when I saw fog rising off a railroad track at night...go
figure...it didn't turn out how I wanted it to...but not everyone thought
that, so I kept it*
Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited.
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Copyright 2003 Darun Ferguson
Comments on "Ghost Train"
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A former member wrote:
for being written when you were 15, this is totally awesome! Great job!
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A former member wrote:
Well.. Maybe you don't like it but I do.. Very nice ghost tale.. :)
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A former member wrote:
hi .....i really like it ......
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On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Dayer
(162)
wrote:
nice job for 15 :)
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On Monday, October 27, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
Oh...this was fun! Pure...with a great rythm and a connecting scheme of words...but oh how just...fun...not loaded with angst, just a wonderful story told. I really like this...realy enjoyed it too. ~JMDW~
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, Delilah
(113) wrote:
I thought this was really good...wish I could've seen what you saw...~Delilah~
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On Sunday, October 26, 2003, WinterGrave
(258) wrote:
nice, i have to agree with BloodRose~~~grave
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A former member wrote:
it might be an older work but your talent is still obvious
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A former member wrote:
death comes in the form fog. just ask John Carpenter, director of Escape from LA.
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On Saturday, October 25, 2003, yslehc
(334) wrote:
i like it.. you can tell it's an older one and that you've improved a lot.. but it's still good, your rhyming was always great
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