A good old man

By TropicalSnowstorm

You would have made a good old man
and days and months would have enjoyed
playing with you as they grew into decades,
tip toeing down the hall to try and sneak past.
Conversation and advice finally setting
a table your sons would pull up chairs to,
while they enjoyed small plates of fellowship
and awaited their own children’s arrival.

You could have made so many statements
distancing yourself from the newest trends,
like “why the hell would anyone need a smart
watch to talk to the phone in their pocket?”
Laughter and sarcasm slapping palms
when you quit learning how things worked,
not because you really couldn’t understand,
but you were old enough not to care anymore.

You would have made a good old man
planning month long package tours to places
in China and South America and Africa to
take pictures of things you had read about.
Irritation and embarrassment competing
as that couple from Texas talked down to
everyone while continuously saying things
like “back home we don’t do it like that!”
You should have perfected that grimace
face while reading the label to your
cholesterol meds or canned vegetable
soup through drug store reading glasses.
Resignation and resistance mingling
upon your realization you would actually
need to buy one of those plastic seven-day
pillboxes to keep track of your prescriptions.

You would have made a good old man
trying not to show that your knee hurt
when straddled by small legs pretending to
ride a horse they expected to go “faster, faster!”
Gratitude and sadness jostle each other
while memories suggest interactions
and experiences that would have made
for great stories about your golden years. 

                        I miss you…

--- by Steve McKennon, 02 June 2015

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Copyright 2015 TropicalSnowstorm
Published on Thursday, June 4, 2015.     Filed under: "Reflective" and "Poetry"

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Missed every minute since 10/8/2008
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  • River Lily On Tuesday, September 8, 2015, River Lily (1017)By person wrote:

    This hit a chord with me..Just went through a significant loss ..and although the pain dulls with time there are moments its fresh and new all over again..very heartfelt and beautifully penned. Scholar

  • Jessica Orr On Sunday, August 9, 2015, Jessica Orr (30)By person wrote:

    remembering is tactic of love, as new thoughts are opened. And one looks. And one writes. Very analytical, and I hope writing helped. Good night.

  • dwells On Wednesday, July 22, 2015, dwells (4513)By person wrote:

    A heartfelt and elegant tribute to a father (we only get one). I started writing poetry almost 10 years ago after my dad died. Mom is still my biggest fan, but I have to censor much of my stuff. Thanks for sharing these very personal snapshot that made him come alive for us; if only in the words of a loving son - cheers, Dan

  • Magdalena On Sunday, July 5, 2015, Magdalena (629)By person wrote:

    This is such a poignant piece, brings to mind my father, who was an introvert except when someone made him angry. Old school and very strict. It is four years this month since he passed away..... This is beautifully written Steve, thank you for sharing with us.

  • A former member wrote: With all that's been going on lately, I think this poem is a good place to start reminding people to appreciate their friends & loved-ones while they are still Here to appreciate such. How often have we found such words too late? Either way, a poignant work here, Steve. You've painted us a haunting image of a Death with the very words of a Life. A positive remembrance. Makes me want to accomplish my life's goal even more now: which is to become a Good Old Man. Or at the very least a Bad Old Man....OLD is what I seek to become. & I am so fortunate to have that chance. Thank you for these reminders in the form of your lost friend. Truly, this is what poetry is for....

  • georgelstein On Saturday, June 6, 2015, georgelstein (64)By person wrote:

    You've managed quite a duality. I find myself smiling at the anecdotes while experiencing profound sadness about the void. Beautiful, and I am so sorry for your loss.

  • my soul whispers On Thursday, June 4, 2015, my soul whispers (5)By person wrote:

    It is remarkably rare that I am without something to say. Well done, sir.

  • ColorMeToxic On Wednesday, June 3, 2015, ColorMeToxic (244)By person wrote:

    My heart skipped at the end...I am sorry for your loss...this is powerful, forcing tears to well... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: This is truly beautiful. This filled a void in me for someone very special that has been gone longer than I care to remember. Bravissimo! Scholar

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