It Should Have Been Better

By cre

She rarely spoke of her start in life Or the years she'd worked to overcome strife And all anyone saw was the smile in her eyes Too smug and self-righteous to ever realize Her tenderness, fragile, like a dream on the wind Made her easy to crush when she needed a friend When the love of her life loved someone else And spun her joy into a version of hell She sought out her comfort in the hugs of others But it was clear from their words they felt so far above her:

it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they shamed her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"

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She moved on and found new smiles Worked at making life worthwhile But soon enough the hard times hit The kids were hungry in clothes unfit She toiled from dawn till late at night Though sad and worn she did not cry Until one day in weariness She wept to friends of her distress But once again they could not see Past their own big heads to their friend in need

it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they tore her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"

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Then one day on a warm spring morning She fell to sickness with little warning The doctor confirmed her silent fears And told her she'd reached the dusk of her years Her heart was sad and she ached for friends For someone who'd hold her and help face the end But alone she drew her final breath And her "friends" were surprised when they heard of her death By way of GoodBye she left a few simple words And prayed they'd be heeded and not go unheard:
You always told me not to cry That as for weeping I had no right When I was sad and fell to sighing You said just think, you could be dying You broke my heart with your careless verse Don't you know I knew it could have been worse? I only wanted warmth and love But no matter my need it was never enough My last dying hope is that somehow you'll see How hurtful and careless your actions can be And maybe the next time a "friend" needs some care You will be kinder, and you will be there So farewell, remember, the point of this letter: It could have been worse, but it should have been better.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Wednesday, July 9, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Oh my god...i really don't know what to say hun,this is jus so,so beautiful.I felt like crying after i read this...its so touching.Im just sorry that i cant think of a better comment to leave.Dusky..xxx...

  • Drifter On Sunday, October 5, 2003, Drifter (265)By person wrote:

    I love this one no matter how many times i read it. Smacks you with truth and leaves you stunned.

  • Mademoiselle_Minx On Saturday, October 4, 2003, Mademoiselle_Minx (108)By person wrote:

    wow...this is soo true...def a fave...dont know what to say because its so perfect...~katie~

  • yslehc On Saturday, September 27, 2003, yslehc (334)By person wrote:

    wow that was amazing.. dont know what else to say... its awsome

  • TheMistressBucket On Saturday, September 20, 2003, TheMistressBucket (18)By person wrote:

    *With tears in my eyes* How beautiful, thoughtful, and completly touching this piece is. What an amazing Poet you are!

  • Blinded_Tiger On Saturday, September 20, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518)By person wrote:

    In fear we barely touch skin, Skin shall desire a pure touch, It will never fail to notice, Pure or shallow touch, And as it grows cold, Some shall find a final relief. Tiger

  • Drea On Friday, August 29, 2003, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    it touched me deeply. so many times i have heard "it could always be worse". very beautiful. ~Drea~

  • _Andrew_ On Sunday, August 17, 2003, _Andrew_ (245)By person wrote:

    LoL i loved the ending fo sho, the entire poem was tear jerking, but in the end i could only smile, awesome picture, and just... BEAUTIFUL *~*aNDReW*~*

  • A former member wrote: I don't know what to say that everyone else hasn't said already. VERY great write and message. This has 'Ancient Proverb' written all over it. ~Urban Shipwreck~

  • A former member wrote: This is absolutely beautiful, cre... it's going in my favourites, it rings so true and it's beautifully written.

  • A former member wrote: Truely touching and beautifully written ..but what's even more sad is that toooo many people are shitheads like that.

  • IceDragoness On Saturday, August 9, 2003, IceDragoness (193)By person wrote:

    definately something that should be read and well remembered, such an incredibly sad story with a good lesson, at the end i was wondering to myself what happened to the kids though ~Dawn

  • A former member wrote: I really like this poem it made me think

  • A former member wrote: that is such an awesome peom my god.wow WOW

  • A former member wrote: WOW That was really good...It reminds me of a poem one of the people I know wrote. Although she didn't die

  • A former member wrote: WOW....i couldnt breathe after i read this honestly, your poems make my eyes get stuck to the screen, i feel as if it is happening right before me, you truely are amazing...*stares at the screen in awe*

  • Sky Singer On Wednesday, July 16, 2003, Sky Singer (153)By person wrote:

    i wish i had something to say that isn't already here. brilliant poem, and i think i, too, will be more careful when i use that phrase.

  • Rebel_Angel On Tuesday, July 15, 2003, Rebel_Angel (321)By person wrote:

    wow this is good...I will try never to use that phrase again...till I forget...lol Great Write

  • A former member wrote: Cre, this is so beautiful and so true!!! Amazing piece.. :)

  • hate_doll On Sunday, July 13, 2003, hate_doll (263)By person wrote:

    Cre...this is absolutely beautiful...so sad and treacherous. Such a tender message. You're work is treasured by me...especially this piece...simply amazing...

  • A former member wrote: There's tears in my eyes right now, and no, I'm not exaggerating that...this is brilliant and so...oh, I'm at a loss, dear..

  • Demosthenes On Saturday, July 12, 2003, Demosthenes (155)By person wrote:

    o god cre. you have no idea how much i wish i had the words to explain how much i love this. its completely perfect. i cant usually find at least two or three flaaws in everything i read, because im a perfectionist... but i found non ein this. -B

  • Jonas On Friday, July 11, 2003, Jonas (715)By person wrote:

    with each piece i read you break my heart... you may have noticed i don't frequent your site so much as i did... because, i swear you touch so deeply and chip away pieces of my heart... and i'm afraid that i will have none left at the end of my reading

  • Jonas On Friday, July 11, 2003, Jonas (715)By person wrote:

    it doesn't so much sound like it, but that is utterly complimentary, if your work is sad, it is perfectly sad, a sadness that pierces and penetrates to the very core of a sensitive young man... you show me blue hued beauty

  • A former member wrote: This piece is so... true. So sad but true. And i have felt this woman's pain indeed. I love this. Keep it up hun. #flower#

  • Ravenblade On Thursday, July 10, 2003, Ravenblade (307)By person wrote:

    Absolutely amazing work cre...I can't believe I've been away so long as to not have read up on your newest work, but when I get more time I shall do my best...this is sad but powerful. great rhythm, beautiful flow, unbelievably worded. Definatly a favor

  • Ravenblade On Thursday, July 10, 2003, Ravenblade (307)By person wrote:

    favorite*

  • A former member wrote: oh my god. how you come up with these insanely brilliant ideas for poetry, and then masterfully put them into the pages of literature with pure emotion and heart, is way past me... you rule. :)

  • A former member wrote: YES!!! EXACTLY!!!! ugh! i sooo know this feeling cre and wow you just said it so perfectly. Awesome write lady!

  • GothicBlack On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, GothicBlack (186)By person wrote:

    hmm.. i'm at a loss of words.. not sure what to say to this.. besides maybe thank you. i'll watch my words with friends and others.. hmmm.. i really enjoyed this, it opened my eyes. thanks. ~gothic~

  • Ophelia On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    I have sat here trying to write a comment and I just don't know what to say except this is great..........O

  • Aurora_Light On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, Aurora_Light (472)By person wrote:

    wow i think i will never use those words again. i love this write and hope that people realize "It could have been worse, but it should have been better." (to quote a great poet)

  • anathema On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, anathema (50)By person wrote:

    exactly right. and cursed are the people who don't remember that. brava, dear...

  • Six-Out On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    Very good point Jane, very good, I know, I've used the whole coulda been worse scenario, and this makes me look at it differently. Great.

  • maddin foxxxy On Wednesday, July 9, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358)By person wrote:

    ::tears::...this is wonderfully written as it left a tender thought aswell...you write the truth and i can really swim through that perspective..AMAZING.

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