Dangling from the Light Fixture
By SilentStalker
And now I let a silent cry
I want to bid this world goodbye
These feelings led me far astray
It's time for me to go away
I look inside the darkened room
I only see a single broom
A large chair, and a spool of rope
So that may be my only hope
I take the rope and make a noose
I tie it so it won't come
loose
I grab the chair after a while
And slide it to the
center tile
I use the chair to reach my height
I tie
the rope onto the light
I make sure I won't touch the floor
Then wedge the broom against the door
I give the knot
one final check
And put the noose around my neck
I tighten
it with gentle care
Then boldly kick away the chair
The noose gets tight against my skin
The rope is quickly digging
in
My breaths are cut off very fast
I cannot tell how long
I'll last
But why do I now sense this fear?
I want
now to get out of here
Why can't I move? Where is my chair?
My feet are dangling in the air
I cannot scream; I cannot
gasp
A bit of air I try to grasp
'My God' I think, 'What did
I do?'
Goodbye, my world; my life is through.
Comments on "Dangling from the Light Fixture"
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A former member wrote:
Profound,... so much that i could feel the rope tightening with my commotion, I lived and died with the personage.
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A former member wrote:
Nice one mate
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A former member wrote:
Your rhymes are just perfect!.. That's excelent poetry.. And the emotions you write about are overwhelming.. First wanting to die as it were something very easy, quick and beautiful.. But then the pain, despair and agony of wanting to live.. But it's too late.. The last stanza sent shivers down my spine.. Very well penned :)
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A former member wrote:
Really good rhyming. You really put that scene into my head. And especially the end which shows the fear of death most people have, even when they are the ones causing it to themselves
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A former member wrote:
nice work. great rhyming, nice flow and not a single word out of place. and the last line just completes it.
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On Saturday, February 27, 2010, Musik2MyEyes
(192) wrote:
Second thoughts...poor timing...no going back. Better be certain before you react. =P
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On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, Err0r
(358) wrote:
I died with you... Such emotion, the last dying thoughts I think were conveyed perfectly.
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On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...this write was a test for myself whilst in the service; one of the soldiers I was working with didn't believe I was writing most of the disturbing stuff I had, so he gave me a rope and told me to make a poem about it...
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On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, SilentStalker
(1047) wrote:
...the first part of the poem I came up with was the "I give the knot one final check" stanza, and I recited that right in front of him; needless to say, he didn't question my writing anymore...
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On Friday, October 1, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Indecisions indecisions...incisions incisions incisors gnawing pawing...
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On Sunday, September 28, 2003, HeLlSeND
(40) wrote:
hehehe.....A flow....and a truth.....suddenly the world seems lovely, too bad it's as i rise above me....Great
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On Saturday, September 27, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
nice....flows......