can you hear me?

By diavolessa

I will die
There is no point in crying over the bloody color of the sky
worthless waking up the feelings of a clock
I fell, I fell a long time ago
big and heavy, piercing, wounded
with an enormous red tear, only I could see
piercing was the fall, loud and painful
Nameless was the fall
I fell over this land, I fell…

No one saw where the scream went
nobody heard it
nobody knows where it ends
where my scream screams for help.
I am surrounded by youth
tendencies, power.
I see your hand trying to catch on
beautiful, merciless, imploring
but I have fallen, I am vanishing
Under my freezing body
I can only care about my scream
as I will die

Can you hear me?

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Published on Sunday, September 21, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "can you hear me?"

On Sunday, November 13, 2005, Daughter_Of_The_Moon (106) wrote:

One can never be followed into that feeling, great piece as so many agree! Missed your works, you tell things in the most perfect ways.
On Thursday, February 3, 2005, Gideon Lost (137) wrote:

Yes, I can hear you.
On Sunday, October 10, 2004, Ravenblade (307) wrote:

I don't know what to say except this was intense...>Raven
A former member wrote: i cannot believe i have never before rad any of your art; I've read six or seven, and only now am I beginning to find the words that I so suddenly lost upon happening across your ghost of a trail.
On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

I absolutely love the opening four lines. This is a great piece, and lots of other people have already said so, so...I'll just add my name to the roll-call too.
On Tuesday, November 18, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

This felt absolutely apocalyptic. Scary in that way...sad, but remorseless like this is the way it has to be because there is no other way. I likes...~JMDW~
A former member wrote: This is insanely vivid and painful. I love every line. All of them burn images and bring back memories. Great work.
On Sunday, October 5, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (240) wrote:

I feel fortunate to have found this work of yours. The words feel so heartfelt and the emotion so robust. The falling theme tends to be cliche, but this piece somehow took it into another direction. The title idea is brilliant.
On Thursday, October 2, 2003, urbanhumility (1158) wrote:

there is beauty in your despair.....the art in your words, the depth of your way; i hope no other will have the mistake of passing you by, truly you are an enlightend soul.......such beautiful words my friend....
On Tuesday, September 30, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358) wrote:

Sounds like an echo for help.....I really was trapped into the whole concept of the poem....death makes us selfish and dependable at the same time..Very great read.
On Monday, September 29, 2003, Loserland (113) wrote:

death is something we all try to capture at times. it seems you've done a very good job at doing that here.
A former member wrote: This has power, mystique, and raw emotion. Wonderful piece I didn't want to look away for a second.
On Wednesday, September 24, 2003, pushblood (27) wrote:

WOW intense poem every single line was so painful to read. I keep reading this over and over again. "where my scream screams for help." I keep having visions of this horrifying scream. Dam. I love your poetry. Yet again another favorite. Thanks. ~P.B~.
On Wednesday, September 24, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

This piece really illicits an interesting mental picture and emotion - good job! Ciao, T/S
On Tuesday, September 23, 2003, Stranger (263) wrote:

You continue to set my mind and my imagination on fire with your words.
On Sunday, September 21, 2003, AshtrayDirt (31) wrote:

this sounded beautiful over pink floyd #4 on the animals album. oOo. You have an unyielding soul. i like your work.
On Sunday, September 21, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518) wrote:

A part will try to depart, Growing to grow, When will it stop... How? The better question, To know how it goes, That this just grow and grow. Tiger
A former member wrote: ummmm, this is the first of your works that I've read and well, uh, wow, thats about all I've got to say. I enjoyed this poem immensely. Good stuff!
A former member wrote: Unique, never really read something as vivid as this. Tres bein. =P x.x axelle x.x
On Monday, September 29, 2003, nell (270) wrote:

for some reason when i first read this i sensed a type of metaphor " i fell over this land" love that line=)