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WhiteWash
By cre
It all came down to one thing
Dawdling through your yard
The grass kissing my toes
Like paupers at the feet of some king
The smug and smoggy air
Trying at a breeze
Yet
Quickly falling flat
And it was somehow worse for that
We stood, clutching our elbows
In the clingy confines
Of a day not well lived
You, winking out the sun
And shooting that look at me beneath haughty brows
Me, biting my lip and wondering
How
How to tell you all I ever wanted
Was to be all you'd ever need
How I only hoped to plant a different garden
In a bed of weeds
This time yielding flowers filled with dreams
I only wanted good
My eyes cried
At the sight
Of your greyed and chipping house
And I just thought . . .
I could paint it white again.
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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Friday, June 20, 2003.
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On Sunday, March 26, 2006, whisperer
(166)
wrote:
powerful, gripping in a "just listen" sort of way
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On Thursday, April 8, 2004, Exodus
(172) wrote:
you pretty much poured this out of me with this one....i feel this so much....
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On Wednesday, July 2, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(511) wrote:
I’m off, I know I am…but everything is almost tangible…but then it all floats away.
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On Wednesday, July 2, 2003, CharlottesWeb
(511) wrote:
There is something about this that I can’t put my tongue on right now. Something sad, very, very sad that I can’t quite touch. A little subdued in a way that creates an ending that isn’t suppose to be there…not now, not at this chapter in the story. I’m o
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On Tuesday, July 1, 2003, KittyStryker
(711) wrote:
it's hard... you think you can fix it, make it better... but sometimes... the paint we use to fix things only peels right off again.
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On Saturday, June 21, 2003, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
I may have to quit reading your work. If I don't I may just fall in love with you. Again, wonderful. S.
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A former member wrote:
wow. I dont know exactly what to say except what's already been said. I'm a better person for reading this.
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On Friday, June 20, 2003, diavolessa
(208) wrote:
This truly was one of your best. I think this is my favorite so far! The imagery is powerful and the words beautiful! ~D
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A former member wrote:
jane. excellence is becoming standard for you
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On Friday, June 20, 2003, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
Stupid freeverse? That was fucking awesome, scuse the language. But serioulsy jane, I loved it.! You rule...ok, I rule, but this one puts you right up there next to me ;)
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A former member wrote:
hey...i like this one...-Misty
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A former member wrote:
this is one of my favorites of yours so far... always enjoy reading you.
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